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    • #44616
      VMWEdu
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    • #44636
      Beth
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      Summary for Lesson 1

      In today’s class we began our work on narrative writing, using adventure as a framework to help us think about why stories matter. We began with a big class discussion about why we as humans tell stories, thinking about how they can entertain, teach us things or help to solve the big questions of life. We looked at what narrative means and how we see it in the structure of story mountain and then spoke about the genre of adventure. The class looked at an adventure masterclass featuring lots of great tips such as creating risk for the characters and placing them in unusual environments. Finally we read an extract from Treasure Island introducing one of the characters and used this to create character descriptions of our own. The class made up some incredible adventure characters, describing them with beautiful detail and including some really exciting and compelling twists and turns. Very well done today everyone, it was a pleasure to see you all and hear your fun, creative and fascinating ideas. See you next week 🙂

      Video from today: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0NESGqweSwI

      The PowerPoint is attached below to help you with the homework.

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #44641
      Claire
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework for this week. I hope you enjoy it and have a wonderful week!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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      • #44701
        Beth
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        Hi Claire,

        You should be very proud of this piece!
        Outstanding work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44643
      Claire
      Participant

      p.s. I was inspired by the Percy Jackson series.

      • #44703
        Beth
        Participant

        Amazing! I love Percy Jackson

    • #44658
      bruceL
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      My homework is attached below.

      Bruce

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    • #44660
      Ivy
      Participant

      hey beth here is my adventure homeowrk for this week have a lovely day

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      • #44704
        Beth
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        Hi Ivy,

        I hope you’ve had a lovely day!
        Wonderful work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44662
      MaggieY
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      Homework

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      • #44706
        Beth
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        Hi Maggie,

        Super work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44664
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

    • #44665
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      here’s my homework

    • #44666
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      sorry my link is working on my laptop

      here’s my work

       

      The wind howled through the trees, carrying with it the scent of salt and the promise of the unknown. I stood at the edge of the cliff, staring out over the churning sea below. The horizon seemed to stretch endlessly, a vast expanse of water and sky, and with every breath I took, my heartbeat faster, matching the rhythm of the waves crashing against the rocks.
      The map had been handed to me in secret, its edges worn and fragile from age. It spoke of a place no one had dared to visit for centuries, a hidden island that held a treasure lost to time. Most dismissed it as myth, a sailor’s tale spun to entertain the weary. But I knew better. There was something real about it, something my grandfather had whispered about in his final days before he died.
      The faint sound of footsteps behind me made me turn. A shadowy figure emerged from the mist, a tall man with a scar running down his cheek. He’d been trailing me for days, and though his intentions were unclear, one thing was certain: he had come for the map.
      “You’re not the only one looking for it,” he said, his voice low and gravelly. “And you’re not the only one who believes in its power.”
      I narrowed my eyes, my fingers instinctively brushing the map in my pocket. I had no choice but to start running. The guy immediately started sprinting.
      “Just give me the map and ill be on my way!” he shouted now six feet away.
      I turned a sharp left to a small cave. I climbed in. The guy was looking for me somewhere out there for however long it takes.

      • #44708
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jessica,

        Gorgeous work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44669
      fabio
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      This is the work by Fabio

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      • #44710
        Beth
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        Hi Fabio,

        Super exciting work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

         

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    • #44675
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hi Beth,
      Here is my homework.
      Have the most wonderful weekend.
      From Jasmine

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      • #44712
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jasmine,

        Thank you, hope yours was lovely!

        Gorgeous work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

         

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    • #44677
      Olivia
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

       

      Please find Livvi’s homework in the attachment, thanks!

       

      Best Regards,

      A. Clark

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      • #44714
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Livvie,

        Wonderful work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

         

         

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    • #44681
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth this is my homework for lesson 1.

       

      In a dark forest, came out a girl with beautiful ocean blue hair and glowy eyes that are torches to guide her. She walks with soaked boots on while the stormy rain continues. Her body trembles each time a lightning bolt makes a sound. She grips her little hands that are numb and red. She quickly found a boat nearby to steer when the flood starts, the tall trees starts to fall and the little girl didn’t know what to do…

      This was inspired by Zoe’s escape from “Floodland”.

       

      Have a nice weekend.

      • #44716
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Melanie,

        Superb work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44682
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth this is my homework for lesson 1.

       

      In a dark forest, came out a girl with beautiful ocean blue hair and glowy eyes that are torches to guide her. She walks with soaked boots on while the stormy rain continues. Her body trembles each time a lightning bolt makes a sound. She grips her little hands that are numb and red. She quickly found a boat nearby to steer when the flood starts, the tall trees starts to fall and the little girl didn’t know what to do…

      This was inspired by Zoe’s escape from “Floodland”.

       

      Have the best weekend!

      • #44718
        Beth
        Participant

        Hey Melanie- your feedback is attached just above 🙂

    • #44689
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 2

      In today’s lesson we finished our work on narrative and adventure, thinking about how setting and tension play a huge role in making a story tense and exciting. We began by refreshing our ideas on how a narrative works learning about structures such as the Hero’s Journey, before moving on to our adventure masterclass. The students considered the importance of a dangerous or suspenseful setting and came up with fantastic examples of their own. We then focused on tension and how to build it, using six key tips, before finishing up by describing our settings and sharing ideas for ‘calls to adventure’ which can act as the inciting incident for a story. Amazing work everyone, very creative ideas throughout our class and brilliant sharing from each and every one of you. Keep it up and see you next week 🙂

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #44738
      bruceL
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      Hi Beth, My homework is attached below.

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      • #44779
        Beth
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        Hi Bruce,

        Thrilling work this week! Your feedback is below 😀

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    • #44740
      fabio
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      This is Fabio’s Lesson 2 writing.

      Thanks

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      • #44781
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Fabio,

        Fab work on this, your feedback is attached below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44742
      Ivy
      Participant

      heya beth here is my adventure against the time story

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      • #44783
        Beth
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        Hi Ivy,

        Brilliant work on this, your feedback is attached. See you soon 😀

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    • #44746
      MaggieY
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      This is my homework.

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      • #44785
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Maggie,

        Super work on this, your feedback is attached. See you 😀

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    • #44748
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      This my homework

      Thanks for the lesson

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      • #44787
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jessica,

        You’re welcome!

        Nice work this week, your feedback is attached below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44754
      Claire
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework for this week. Hope you enjoy it!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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      • #44789
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Claire,

        Delightful work on this, I enjoyed it a lot! Your feedback is attached below 😀

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    • #44756
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hi Beth,
      Here is my homework.
      Have a delightful weekend.
      Thanks
      Jasmine

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      • #44766
        Jasmine
        Participant

        Hi Beth,
        Sorry I wanted to make some edits.
        Please read this version.
        Thanks, Jasmine

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        • #44803
          Beth
          Participant

          Hi Jasmine,

          Fab work on this, I’ve attached your feedback to this reply. See you soon 😀

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    • #44762
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      I wrote the opening for my adventure story,

      have a nice day!

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      • #44805
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Melanie,

        Nice work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #44764
      Olivia
      Participant

      Hi, Beth

      Please find Livvie’s homework in the attachment, thanks!

      Best Regards,

      A. Clark

       

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    • #44770
      Olivia
      Participant

      HI, beth,

       

      I have re-attched the file, some error on last one.

       

      Best Regards,

      Annie

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      • #44809
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Livvie,

        Super work on this, your feedback is attached 😀

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    • #44798
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 3

      In today’s class we thought about character and dialogue, discussing why these are such important elements. The class brainstormed and debated their personal approach to character, coming up with some amazing ideas for the way in which they create characters that their readers care about, and they shared their ideas in break-out rooms beautifully. We looked at an eight step process for creating character, digging into elements such as backstory and using archetypes, and the students came up with some of their own ideas. Finally we looked at dialogue and its importance. Well done everyone, fantastic work today. Keep it up and see you next week 🙂

      Creating character: https://milanote.com/guide/characters

      Dialogue vid: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kLdZsmxxqMw

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #44839
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      My homework is attached below.

      Bruce

       

       

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      • #44880
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Bruce,

        Lovely work on this, I’ve attached your feedback 😀

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    • #44847
      Olivia
      Participant

      HI, Beth,

       

      Please find Livvie’s home work in the attachment, thanks!

       

      Best Regards,

      A. Clark

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      • #44882
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Livvie,

        Gorgeous work this week, your feedback is below! 😀

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    • #44851
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      thanks for the lesson

      here’s my homework

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      • #44884
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jessica,

        You’re very welcome!
        Amazing work this week, your feedback is attached 😀

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    • #44853
      Claire
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework for this week. Have a brilliant week and see you next lesson!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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      • #44903
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Claire,

        Fab work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #44855
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      This is my homework for week3,

      Have a fabulous weekend.

    • #44856
      Melanie
      Participant

      Sorry it didn’t send the document

    • #44857
      Melanie
      Participant

      Did it send I can’t see it

       

      • #44879
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Melanie, it didn’t seem to send! If you try again and manage to get it posted I can mark it asap 🙂

    • #44858
      Melanie
      Participant

      Did I? I can’t see it.

       

    • #44860
      MaggieY
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      Sorry,for the late.

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      • #44905
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Maggie,

        No worries! Nice work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44862
      Ivy
      Participant

      here is my homeowrk beth! enjoy reading

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      • #44952
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Ivy,

        Great work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #44868
      fabio
      Participant

      Hi Beth, this is my dialogue

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      • #44954
        Beth
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        Hi Fabio,

        Amazing work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #44944
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      It looks like my HW didn’t come through.

      Here it is anyways.

      Thanks,

      Jasmine

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      • #44957
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jasmine,

        That’s okay! Nice work on this, your feedback is attached 😀

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        • #44961
          Jasmine
          Participant

          Hello Beth,

          I don’t think you saw the whole story.

          If you cannot see the document this is it:

          Usually Furina was not scared of the dark, usually the dark was not forty foot tall. It didn’t have milky black wings, and most certainly didn’t have a chariot pulled by two horse who look like they were stepping on smoke.

          Nyx was too much to take in. Her dress was a void of black, her face was hard to see except for the pinpoint of her eyes. Her horses nickered.

          ‘Down both of you,’Nyx hissed to her horses, “These little prizes, I will kill myself.’

          Furina didn’t feel confident but her instincts all screamed talk. After all, two demigods couldn’t take Nyx down. At least not two demigods using force.

          ‘Oh, please don’t kill yourself! ’ She cried. ‘We’re not that scary are we?’ Furina nudged Lisa, forcing her to agree.

          ‘Ha ha, yes that would be sad, killing yourself.’

          ‘Do you know who I am?’ Nyx demanded.

          ‘Well, your Night, I guess, as your so dark. But we thought we weren’t going to meet you as the travel guide hadn’t included you. Let see, where have we been? The river Phlegethon, the Cocytus, even the random Titans and giants here and there; but Nyx… you weren’t featured.’

          ‘Not featured?’

          ‘Yeah,’ Lisa added, warming up to the idea. ‘We came down for the Tartarus tour. I mean mount Olympus is so overrated.’

          ‘Gods totally,’ Furina agreed. ‘However, nobody said we would run into Nyx. I guess they thought your not important.’

          ‘Not important’

          ‘But we could change that,’Lisa added. ‘How about a photo with you and your children. We would then personally add it to the travel guide.’

          Suddenly, a dozen demons and minor gods spawned in front of Nyx. Furina wanted to run, but that would only kill her. Her insides screamed in fear.

          ‘Sorry, but you guys are so…dark. Even if I used a flash it wouldn’t come out,’ Furina complained.

          ‘Yeah,’ Lisa managed, ‘You guys are not photogenic.’

          ‘You miserable tourists!’ Nyx hissed. ‘How dare you not tremble before me, not beg for my autograph.’

          ‘Its getting late, Furina lets go have lunch in one of the restaurants the tour guide recommend,’ Lisa insisted.

          ‘But first, I think we should get Nyx to have a photo with her darkest child, as having all her children won’t come out. So who do you choose?’

          ‘I am the darkest’ Eric hissed, spraying darkness everywhere.

          ‘I am darker still’

          ‘No, behold my darkness’

          ‘Wait!’ Nyx called, suddenly panicked ‘I cannot see anything.’

          ‘Yes!’ Shouted shouted one of her children, ‘It was me.’

          ‘No it was me’

          ‘Fool, I did it,’

          Lisa squeezed Furina’s hand, ‘ Ready?’

          “Someone, give me some light!’ Cried Nyx. ‘Gah, I cannot believe I just said that!’

          ‘Jump,’ Furina called. Together they jumped, reaching for the doorway far, far below.

           

           

           

           

           

           

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          • #45028
            Beth
            Participant

            Hi Jasmine, not sure what happened there, so sorry! I’ve attached your updated feedback to this reply. Thanks for re-uploading, I loved reading this! 😀

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    • #44950
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 4

      In today’s class we continued our work on characterisation, thinking about some key tips to get inside our characters’ minds. We spoke about psychology and what it can help us think about as writers and we focused on the importance of motivation. The class completed a writing exercise taking their characters to dinner and then did some hot-seating in small groups, embodying their characters and being interview by their partner in order to more fully understand who they were. We thought about how asking yourself where your character goes from here is important and the class worked beautifully together to get a sense of how strong characters can push the plot forward. Amazing work everyone, very well done and see you next week 🙂

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    • #44963
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Here is my HW. Hope you enjoy reading it.

      Thanks

      Jasmine : D

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      • #45030
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jasmine,

        Delightful work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #44981
      karl
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework for this week. Have a brilliant day and I’ll see you next lesson!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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      • #45032
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Claire,

        Thank you, you too!

        Brilliant work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #44983
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      Here’s my homework for this week

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      • #45034
        Beth
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        Hi Jessica,

        Fab work on this, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44985
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      My homework is attached below.

      Thanks for the lesson.

      Bruce

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      • #45036
        Beth
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        Hi Bruce,

        You’re welcome!
        Really nice work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44987
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      My homework is attached. Thanks.

      Regards

      Victor

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      • #45038
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Victor.

        Lovely work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44993
      MaggieY
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      Here is my homework, have a good day.

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      • #45040
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Maggie,

        Thank you, you too!

        Charming work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #44995
      Olivia
      Participant

      HI, Beth,

      Please find Livvie’s home work in the attachment, thanks!

      Best Regards,

      Annie

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      • #45042
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Livvie,

        Great work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #44998
      Ivy
      Participant

      hey beth sorri i am late here is homework! have a fabulous week! 🙂

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      • #45115
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Ivy,

        No worries!

        Fab work on this, see you soon 😀

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    • #45000
      fabio
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      This is Fabio’s L4 writing. =^)

       

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      • #45117
        Beth
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        Hi Fabio,

        Nice work on this, see you soon 😀

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    • #45015
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth this is my homework!

      Have a nice day!

       

       

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    • #45017
      Melanie
      Participant

      sorry wrong story!

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    • #45019
      Melanie
      Participant

      sorry wrong file!

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    • #45021
      Melanie
      Participant

      pressed the wrong one sorry!

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    • #45023
      Melanie
      Participant

      sorry! Please check this homework.

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      • #45119
        Beth
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        Hi Melanie,

        No worries!
        Lovely work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45045
      Beth
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      Summary for Lesson 5

      In today’s class we completed some work on rhetorical devices, persuasion and rhetoric. We began by learning about the Ancient Greeks and how they used rhetoric, thinking about ethos, pathos and logos. We then thought about techniques such as the tone of the powerful and sounding as confident as possible in our language, before looking at a speech by Nelson Mandela where he used lots of really powerful techniques such as rule of three, similes and alliteration to emphasise his ideas passionately. The class shared ideas on this speech, completed some amazing research on rhetoric and finally read a poem that inspired Mandela out loud. Very well done everyone, I look forward to reading all your amazing pieces! Great job 🙂

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #45079
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thanks for the wonderful lesson,

      My homework is attached below.

      Bruce

      P.S I did some research.

       

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      • #45121
        Beth
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        Hi Bruce,

        You’re very welcome!

        Great work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #45085
      fabio
      Participant

      Hi Beth this is my homework

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      • #45123
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Fabio,

        Gorgeous work this week, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #45089
      MaggieY
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      This is my homework.

      Hope you like this!

      And have a good day!

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      • #45125
        Beth
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        Hi Maggie,

        Nice work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45093
      Claire
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework for this week. Thank you for the fantastic lesson; I enjoyed reading about Nelson Mandela a lot! I hope that you enjoy reading my homework and have a brilliant day! See you next lesson!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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      • #45127
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Claire,

        So happy to hear you enjoyed the lesson!

        Excellent work this week, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45099
      Ivy
      Participant

      hey beth here is my homework for this week enjoy reading!

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      • #45129
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Ivy,

        Brilliant work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

         

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    • #45103
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      here’s my homework for this week

      Ladies and gentlemen, esteemed guests, and friends,

      Today, I want to talk about a shift we all need to make in how we approach the world around us. A shift from merely skimming the surface to engaging with depth, from rushing through life to taking the time to truly absorb and reflect. In a world constantly pulling us in a thousand directions, the ability to stop, reflect, and engage thoughtfully is becoming more essential than ever.

      We are living in an age of instant gratification. With the swipe of a finger, we can access information, communicate with anyone across the globe, and consume an endless stream of media. We are constantly ostracising ourselves from the world. But in this rapid exchange, something critical is slipping through our fingers: the opportunity to truly engage and do many things that people can’t do. We are skimming through books, conversations, ideas, and relationships. But let me ask you this: Are we really understanding anything in the process?Are we making connections? Are we letting the deeper meaning settle into our minds?

      • #45182
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jessica,

        Lovely work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45110
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hello Beth,

      Here is my homework. Thank you for the wonderfully lesson, I really like looking at the poem, it was very beautifully written!

      Hope you have a great week,

      Jasmine

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      • #45184
        Beth
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        Hi Jasmine,

        You’re very welcome, I’m so glad you enjoyed it!
        Excellent work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45112
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

       

      My homework is attached. Thanks.

      Regards

      Victor

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      • #45186
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Victor,

        Charming work this week, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45133
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 6

      In today’s class we continued our persuasive writing work, thinking about how to build arguments. We learned about what a contention is and thought about structuring a persuasive essay, discussing how to use the intro as a roadmap and how to finish on a call to action. We then spoke about how to keep our thinking and argument original before the class responded to some persuasive prompts and then had mini debates in break out rooms. The students came up with some wonderful ideas, shared lots of questions with one another, and built on their thinking. We concluded with some work on counterarguments and why they are important. Amazing work everyone, very well done and see you next week 🙂

      Homework

      mwr

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    • #45161
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thanks for the wonderful lesson, my homework is attached below.

      Bruce

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      • #45188
        Beth
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        Hi Bruce,

        Nice work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #45166
      Olivia
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

       

      Please find Livvie’s howe work in the attachment, thanks!

      Best Regards,

      Annie

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      • #45190
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Livvie,

        Good work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #45168
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      here’s my homework for this week

    • #45169
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      My link isn’t working on my iPad so here’s my homework

      While some may argue that products are being developed too quickly, it’s crucial to recognise that this rapid innovation is a reflection of technological progress that benefits society in

      There is a growing need for tools that are more efficient, faster-to-use, and have better capabilities. More and more people use their devices for various purposes, including communication or entertainment at home and work. Therefore, tech businesses are meeting consumer demands by designing quicker devices capable of handling many activities, thus guaranteeing users a seamless and pleasant user interface. Ultimately, faster and more efficient tools enable people to engage more effectively.

      Prolonged market competition is behind the fast launch of fresh products. Constantly trying to offer innovative features, quicker processing speed, and more advanced designs to keep or expand market share, companies This competitive pressure helps to create new ideas at a great pace, therefore. Consumers finally profit from superior goods, more choices, and improved characteristics as businesses compete to beat one another.

      Rapid advancements in technology drives major business expansion. It drives research and development investments (R&D), spurs technological innovations, and creates several sectors’ new employment possibilities. The fast advancement of technology has a ripple effect on sectors from software development to hardware production to marketing and logistics that drives economic activity and employment.

      Faster devices let advancements across many fields including communication, education, and healthcare. Faster processing power, for instance, lets appliances run more advanced simulations, increase virtual reality quality, and even help real-time medical diagnostics. These developments directly affect society by physically improving standard of living in measurable ways. The fast rate of technological development guarantees we keep creating means to handle some of the most urgent issues globally, including access to good healthcare, educational resources, and effective communication.

      The quick rise of gadgets is not a fluke but a natural course of events caused by improvements in materials, manufacturing techniques, and computational power. The demand for quicker, more efficient products will of course rise as technology keeps developing. Steading up this progress would limit the potential for technical advancements and hinder society from gaining advantages from innovations that could potentially tackle major global challenges such as energy efficiency, public health issues, and climate change.

      Energy efficiency is positively influenced by faster devices. More modern gadgets generally run faster on less power. Lowering the rate of innovation could lead people to depend on obsolete, less energy-efficient technology for a long time to come, therefore aggravating environmental problems. The pursuit of swift innovation propels the creation of products that are both more powerful and energy-efficient, thereby contributing to a more sustainable and eco-friendly future.

    • #45170
      MaggieY
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      This is my homework for lesson 6.

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      • #45228
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Maggie,

        Good work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45173
      Ivy
      Participant

      hey beth here is my homework for this week

       

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      • #45230
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Ivy,

        Lovely work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #45192
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      My homework is attached. Thanks.

       

      Regards

      Victor

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      • #45232
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Victor,

        Super work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45212
      fabio
      Participant

      Hi Beth sorry my homework was late

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      • #45236
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Fabio,

        No worries!

        Great work on this, your feedback is attached 😀

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    • #45214
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 7

      In today’s class we looked at descriptive writing, focusing on how to utilise emotion and perspective in our description. We opened with a discussion on how to create interesting descriptive passages, looking at an example where narrative and description collided and discussing how it played upon the senses to paint an image in the reader’s mind. We then learned about the role of perspective in description, thinking about how digging into empathy and emotion can connect our word choice to our wider themes. The class wrote some amazing pieces keeping this in mind and discussed them in pairs, explaining the imagery and emotions they were aiming for. Incredible work everyone, very well done for all your brilliant thoughts and see you next week 🙂

      Homework

      hwmrk

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    • #45238
      fabio
      Participant

      hi Beth this is my homework.

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      • #45286
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Fabio,

        Great work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #45240
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thanks for the lesson.

      My homework is attached below.

      Bruce

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      • #45288
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Bruce,

        you’re welcome!

        Terrific work this week, your feedback is attached 🙂

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    • #45242
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thanks for the lesson.

      My homework is attached below.

      Bruce 🙂

    • #45243
      bruceL
      Participant

      My Homework

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    • #45252
      Olivia
      Participant

      Hi, Beth,

      Please find Livvie’s homework in the attachment, thanks!

       

      Best Regards,

      Annie

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      • #45292
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Livvie,

        Lovely work this week, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #45254
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      Here’s my homework for this week

      A crumbling asylum, which stood on the cliff topso many years ago. The building is a crumbling gothic edifice, the stone walls cracked and worn by the passing of time. The windows are covered in darkness and pieces of glass, some gaps gaping with empty space behind. There is the overwhelming stench of rust and mildew hanging thick in the air, and a cold chill is left on damp stone. A rusty, deformed iron gate at the gate groans with every burst of wind, protesting the interloper.

      The abandoned grounds are heavy with brambles, their thorny stems crawling over the broken pathways leading up to the central building. In the distance, the sound of waves crashing against shattered rocks beneath carries eerily, contributing to the desolate atmosphere. The sky itself is perpetually grey and featureless, casting an unnatural grey light over all, and making the atmosphere even more stifling.

      Inside, the halls are quiet save for the groaning of the boards and the faint echo of some. or someone, moving through the blackness. Fading, yellowed wallpaper sticks to the walls, where twisted, ghostly shapes seem to leap from the corners of the rooms, as if the building itself is alive, and waits. The empty patient rooms are filled with broken furniture, rusty hospital equipment, and torn sheets—remnants of forsaken lives. Every corner is weighed down with untold stories, whispers of suffering that seem to reverberate through the emptiness.

      There is no escape from the sense of fear that lingers in the air, like a choking presence that never leaves. It’s a place forgotten by time, but never left behind.

      • #45366
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jessica,

        Great work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45256
      MaggieY
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      This is my homework for lesson 7.

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      • #45368
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Maggie,

        Good work on this,  your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45258
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      My homework is attached. Thanks.

      Regards, Victor

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      • #45370
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Victor,

        Terrific work on this, your feedback is attached 😀

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    • #45262
      Ivy
      Participant

      hi beth here is my homework for this week!

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      • #45372
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Ivy,

        Superb work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45272
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thanks for the fantastic lesson; I really like descriptive writing. Here is my Homework.

      Thanks

      Jasmine

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      • #45374
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jasmine,

        You’re welcome, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

        Wonderful work on this, your feedback is attached 😀

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    • #45276
      karl
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework for this week. I hope you enjoy it and have a nice day!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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      • #45376
        Beth
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        Hi Claire,

        Gorgeous work on this, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #45297
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 8

      In today’s class we continued work on descriptive writing, learning some masterclass tips and playing around with ideas such as context, the narrator’s focus and unique details. We looked at examples from a masterclass guide on how to keep descriptive writing fresh and then worked together on thinking about how the reader finishes in their imagination what the writer begins in theirs. We looked at different ways of thinking through setting choices, read and analysed famous author’s passages of description, and finally played a writing game based on Google street view and description. Very good work today everyone, it was super enlightening to hear all your brilliant work. Well done and see you next week 🙂

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #45302
      Claire
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      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework for this week. Have a brilliant day and I’ll see you next week!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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      • #45378
        Beth
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        Hi Claire,

        You too, thank you!

        Lovely work this week, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45307
      fabio
      Participant

      Hi Beth I did my homework and here it is

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      • #45380
        Beth
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        Hi Fabio,

        Great work on this,  I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #45325
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thanks for the lesson,

      My homework is attached below:)

      Bruce

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      • #45382
        Beth
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        Hi Bruce,

        Super work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #45331
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth.

      This is my homework for lesson 7.

      hope you like it!

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      • #45384
        Beth
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        Hi Melanie,

        Nice work on this,  I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #45333
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hello Beth,

      I really like the idea of having to chose a random place on google maps and having to describe it! So creative.

      I hope we get a similar activity in the future. Hope you like my HW

      Thanks,

      Jasmine

       

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      • #45386
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jasmine,

        I’m glad you liked the idea, I’ve loved seeing all of your responses!

        Exceptional work this week, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #45336
      MaggieY
      Participant

      Dear Beth

      This is my homework for lesson 8.

      See you next week.

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      • #45363
        Beth
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        Hi Maggie, you seem to have accidentally attached someone else’s homework here! If you get your one uploaded, I can mark it asap 😀

    • #45340
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      Here’s my homework for this week

      Thanks for the lesson

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    • #45347
      Ivy
      Participant

      here is my homework for this week

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    • #45358
      Olivia
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

       

      Please find Livvie’s homework in the attachment, thanks!

      Best Regards,

      Annie C.

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    • #45388
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

       

      My homework is attached. Thanks.

       

      Regards

      Victor

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    • #45393
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 9

      In today’s class we had a writer’s workshop, working together on workshopping and revising our past two months of work. We spoke about our favourite genres and the lessons we have learned about writing, thinking about practicing the four styles of writing we’ve studied, and the class did some excellent writing jumping between genres. They then planned some really fab stories in groups and we finished by looking at some final tips. Amazing work everyone, good luck with revising for next week’s mock and very excellent work today! See you next week 🙂

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #45451
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      This is my homework from lesson 8,

      sorry for the late homework!

       

      An interesting street

       

      This street is unbelievably creative and fashionable, and it is nothing like anything I’ve seen before! There are lots of cartoon drawings with perfectly clean tall buildings. out of everything, this is why I picked this street because it is very  interesting since lots of cars are really fancy and it’s more like a super expensive street that only rich people go to. There’s also lots of famous shops like Chanel, Dior and Louis Vuitton. Every pupil there where’s in total around like 2,000 euros! I can’t afford to wear all that!!!

      There were pink buildings, blue buildings, whatever colour you can imagine! I love that place and I really want to go visit.

    • #45464
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 10 

      In today’s class we completed our mini mock. Amazing work today everyone, and for the past ten weeks. You have all been fabulous writers and learners and it’s been a pleasure working with you all. Very well done and keep up all the incredible creative ideas! 🙂

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #45466
      Melanie
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      This is my writing from the mock exam!

      have a nice time!

       

      The unexpected adventure

       

      One morning, Klara was getting ready for her flight, she was going to Italy! She has always wanted to go to Italy since she has heard such good things about going there. Additionally, she also  has a friend there that she always wanted to meet, Paulina, they have been chatting online since they started work! That was three years ago!

       

      Klara boarded the flight (which took like 3 hours in the queue) that was 2 hours to get to Italy.

       

      She arrived! She was jumping with excitement. The second she got to the hotel and put her luggages in the room, she sprinted outside and went in the first interesting place.

       

      Place 1: The Madonnina statue.

       

      The Madonnina statue was absolutely amazing, the weather was also really suitable for eating an ice cream or having a walk around the forests next to the statue.

       

      Place 2: Paulina’s house.

       

      Klara was chatting to Paulina earlier and told her that she just got to Italy and maybe she could go to her house? And Paulina said yes, so Klara went to Paulina’s house and drank tea, they were just chatting (because that’s what adults do) and enjoying their time.

       

      Klara loved this visit and would like to be here again in the future, sadly she has to go to work so she can’t stay.😢

       

       

    • #45467
      bruceL
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Here is my Mock

      Bruce

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    • #45469
      JessicaCB
      Participant

      Hi Beth.

      Here’s my mock exam.

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    • #45471
      Ivy
      Participant

      hey beth here is my mini mock for this week

      BTW will next term be spring course?

      p.s hope you enjoy reading it and have a loverly rest of the week!

      sincerely, ivy

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    • #45473
      Claire
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my Mini Mock. I hope you enjoy it and I hope you enjoy it. I am so lucky to have such a supercalifragilisticexpialidocious writing teacher! See you in the next course!

      Kind Regards,

      Claire

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