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Summary for Lesson 1
In today’s lesson we began our work on playwriting, focusing on the central conventions and tropes of writing for the stage. We considered what makes a play a play, discussing the role of performance and the audience, and then considered some examples of famous plays and playwrights. We then considered the history of plays, tracing it all the way back to the Ancient Greeks and thinking about the genres of tragedy and comedy. The class then designed some fantastic comic and tragic characters, thinking about key elements to include such as a fatal flaw for tragic characters and something absurd for comic characters. Finally we spoke about the things that are both easier and more difficult to communicate through drama, considering how much the audience is forced to infer, and began thinking about dramatic elements such as staging, set and lighting. Everyone worked fantastically today, the class were able to consider how different types of play give rise to different types of character beautifully, and came up with some great ideas for comic characters to write about. They also spoke about the structure of a script and thought of some amazing ideas for lighting and staging their plays. Well done guys, keep up the amazing work and I’ll see you next week 🙂
Video to watch with the tips from playwights: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uS60yAqump0&t=6s
Video we watched on Ancient Greek theatre: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GWmfltQOT8U&feature=emb_logo
Homework
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Mr Slippery script
In the house of the Slippery family came a shout.
Mrs Slippery:(shouting)the floor is so dirty!
Kid Slippery and Little Slippery rushes downstairs and stops immediately after seeing the mess.
Kid Slippery and Little Slippery:(together)not my fault
Narrator: Mr Slippery heard the shout and slipped downstairs.
Mr Slippery:(sighing)looks favorable
The Slipperys looks at Mr Slippery blankly.
Mr Slippery: you don’t get it?
Slipperys:(together)nope
Mr Slippery sighed and continued to walk and drool at the same time.
Mr Slippery accidentally slipped on his drool.Mr Slippery:(screaming)aaahhh!
Narrator: Mr Slippery was sent spinning across the dirty house floor
Kid Slippery:(wincing)very tidy clean up
Little Slippery:(nodding head)very
Mr Slippery’s foot bonked the wall and he finally stopped spinning, revealing a very clean floor.
Mr Slippery:(mumbling)I feel very dizzy
Mrs Slippery:(shrugging)at least the daily floor clean up is done
Mr Slippery:(sighing)you’re welcome
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Summary for Lesson 2
In today’s lesson we continued our work on playwriting, expanding on the work we completed last lesson to think in more depth about specific dramatic techniques and concepts to include when writing a play. We focused on the idea of dramatic conflict, looking at giving characters ‘motivation’, and thought about how to drive the plot through dialogue and suspense. We also consider techniques such as dramatic irony and different forms of suspense, and completed work creatively re-interpreting a piece of script creating whole new scenarios that could work in the context. The class worked wonderfully today, particularly in transforming the script we were working with in their own style and to fit their own conception about what was going on in the plot of the play. I really enjoyed hearing all your ideas and thought that the scripts you were working on all sounded fantastic. Keep it up everyone! 🙂
Video on characterisation: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fGRyP3p-YPI
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P.S. Here is a comedy/mystery book that could give you inspiration for prompt number 5 on Slide 8 (it involves a bunch of people who are invited to an island for a reason that is concealed from the reader…)
https://www.google.com/search?q=i+know+what+you+did+last+wednesday&oq=i+know+what+you+did+last+wednesday+&aqs=chrome..69i57j0i271.5832j0j9&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8
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Summary for Lesson 3
In today’s lesson we focused on our second genre of writing: poetry writing. We began by trying to decode what makes a poem a poem, focusing on concepts such as the economy of language a poem uses, squeezing all the excess water out to write very concisely and with a great focus on imagery and condensed meaning. The class then discussed the poems and poets they liked and considered their own experience in poetry writing. Finally, we completed a case study of Maya Angelou, studying her poem Still I Rise, which the students used to inspire their own work writing literary techniques and symbols that fit with the key themes of the poem. Really well done for today everyone, you all worked beautifully and came up with some exceptional metaphors and similes to describe the feelings articulated by Angelou in her writing. Amazing work- I look forward to hearing all about the poetry you have been reading next lesson 🙂
What makes a poem a poem video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JwhouCNq-Fc
Maya Angelou: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qviM_GnJbOM
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Hi Doris,
My computer won’t open this document for some reason, it says it is unreadable? Is there anyway you could upload it as a PDF instead? You can export a PDF from word in the home tab (click home on the top left corner and then export and then PDF). Let me know if that’s okay, or if not you can email it to me at bethjones30@ymail.com.
Thank you! 🙂
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Miss beth this is my homework and the previous class homework because my previous homework I uploaded to the wrong class. Liya Thank you
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Hi Beth,
Thank you for your reply.
I update my homework as word and PDF file, pls kindly check which one you can open. 🙂
Thank you!
Doris
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Summary for Lesson 4
In today’s lesson we completed our work on poetry writing, thinking about applying all of our knowledge on what makes a poem a poem to our own writing. We began by completing a free-writing exercise, where the class were given the opportunity to figure out where their mind goes to when they think of poetry, and then spoke about the poems they selected for homework that they enjoyed reading. In the second half of the lesson, the class workshopped the free-writing poetry they had written, thinking about how to apply rhythm and meter, before then discussing poetic techniques such as assonance and enjambment. Finally we thought about theme and how to establish it in writing. Great work today everyone, I particularly enjoyed hearing your free-writing poetry and the ways in which you had explored rhyme, rhythm and emotive language in these. Keep up the gorgeous work 🙂
BBC website with info on rhythm, really helpful to have a look at (it’s the one with the video on rhythm that we watched in the lesson): https://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/topics/zmbj382/articles/zmpxbdm
Poetic pattern video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=URuMb15CWJs
Collection of poetry to look at that spans the history of poetry: https://www.poetrybyheart.org.uk/ks3-timeline/
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Beautiful work Doris! I love how you have evaluated your emotions in response to this poem and thought about the way you can relate it to your own life. I agree that the image at the heart of this poem (a little boy just trying to please his dad) is very touching- it’s the thought that counts! I also really like how you have weighed up the comedic element of this poem too, thinking about how the tone is funny and how our perspective is entirely through the kid’s innocent eyes. Really fab ideas- well done Doris, I really enjoyed reading both this poem and your thoughts and feelings on it 🙂
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Homework from Amy:
Homework
I’m walking in the woods.
I’m walking in the woods
Listening to the sounds,
I can hear the birds chirping
All around.I’m walking in the woods
Looking through the trees,
I can see the leaves
and the bumble bees.I’m walking in the woods
Feeling the gentle breeze,
I can feel the whispers of the wind
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Homework from Vicky:
Cane lane
I strolled down the street,
Turned around a corner which was never very neat.
But instead of seeing pigeons walking dumbly around,
There was some pins lying mysteriously on the ground.
I must have walked the wrong way,
So I turned around and walked away.
What was that place?
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<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>By the age of two</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I walked on two.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>As I came to three</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I climbed my first tree.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>When I was four,</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I once slept behind the door.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>As I turn five,</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I visited the hive.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>Time comes to six,</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I heard a song by little mix.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I was seven,</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I thought 100 was expensive.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>When I turned eight,</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I heard that shortsightedness was at a terrifying rate.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>The age of nine,</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>I had a proper dine.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>Ten was fine,</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>Everyday was just a ‘sigh’</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>Now I’m eleven.</p>
<p style=”margin: 0px; font-stretch: normal; font-size: 12px; line-height: normal; font-family: Helvetica;”>Leered about molecules.</p> -
I don’t know what just happened…I’m sending it again.
By the age of two
I walked on two.
As I came to three
I climbed my first tree.
When I was four,
I once slept behind the door.
As I turn five,
I visited the hive.
Time comes to six,
I heard a song by little mix.
I was seven,
I thought 100 was expensive.
When I turned eight,
I heard that shortsightedness was at a terrifying rate.
The age of nine,
I had a proper dine.
Ten was fine,
Everyday was just a ‘sigh’
Now I’m eleven.
Leered about molecules. -
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We are grass
That can make you stress
We are flower
That is wonderful
We are umbrella
That can give you protection
We are water bottle
That can put water
We are everything
That can do anything
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Summary for Lesson 5
In today’s lesson we had our first class on speech writing, our third genre that we will be studying in this course. We began by thinking about what makes a speech a speech, discussing the fusion of poetry, politics and philosophy that speeches often encompass. We then spoke about some examples of famous speeches and speakers, ranging from Martin Luther King to various actors to politicians. The class learned some top tips of what makes a speech powerful and memorable, such as use of humour, knowledge of the audience and appealing to wider issues and themes. Finally, we focused on a speech made by Greta Thunberg to the UN, evaluating its effectiveness and thinking about the techniques and emotions she uses to get her point across. This fed into a discussion on the power of the spoken word, which the class all articulated their thoughts on fantastically. Great work today everyone, it was a pleasure to hear all of your thoughts on what makes a speech powerful. Keep it up and have fun researching your chosen topics for our speech writing workshop in next lesson 🙂
Speech writing tips video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oV1h7n0HcTE
Greta Thunberg at the UN: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=haewHZ8ubKA&t=2460s
Martin Luther King ‘I Have a Dream’: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_yOBncaiito
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Summary for Lesson 6
In today’s lesson we completed our work on speech writing, thinking about the most important elements a speech should include and thinking carefully about tone and emotion. We began with a piece of free-writing before thinking about the most attention-grabbing ways to hook an audience. We spoke about the structure a speech should follow and considered techniques for evoking the emotions of the audience, discussing how different topics may elicit different responses ranging from hope to laughter through to anger, guilt or regret. We studied how to condense an argument into fewer than ten words and spoke about why clarity of argument is so crucial. Finally, we considered the PERFECT acronym which outlines the key techniques of speechwriting. Excellent work today class, you all came up with some really powerful and strong ideas to shape your arguments around and I loved hearing about your passions- well done 🙂
Obama’s powerful speech techniques video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OFPwDe22CoY
Video on speech openings we watched in class: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7tzentBmmUc
A great revision guide on speech writing that can help you think of some fantastic speech writing techniques: https://www.lovelearningtutors.com/main-blog/2018/4/30/how-to-write-a-speech-english-gcse-exam
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Dear Beth:
please check my homework, thank you!
Amy
Homework
Tonight my speech might change your life.
We all know that right now the world is unhealthy,
but how do we make it better? Right now families on other countries would want to visit, but this unhealthy problem
is in their way. This coronavirus is a very deadly problem.
Even if you’re body is very weak, someone will always stand
by your side. We are all working so hard together to defeat
this, but however we tried, it never work. I hope that the future
would get better, so we can follow our dreams and make them
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Hi, Beth:
Here attached my homework, please check it, thanks!
Vicky
Coronavirus
Coronavirus is hard to control. You don’t know wether somebody has it or not. Even if so, we have to try. Coronavirus is not a good thing to have. So if we control it, the world would be more peaceful. No masks, viruses, and no thoughts about having it.
Imagine a world without it. No dangers, and we only have to worry about pollution.
Imagine a peaceful world, no life and death situations anymore.
That is why we have to try to control it, even if it’s hard. If it’s hard, that means we’ve got to keep trying. We have to fight for our life.
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Summary for Lesson 7
In today’s lesson we began our study of the final genre we will be looking at in this course: short story writing. We spoke about what makes a short story different from a novel other than the fact it is shorter, and considered some of the authors famous for writing short stories such as Roald Dahl and the Brothers Grimm (fairytales). We then moved on to thinking about how short stories often centre around one unusual, bizarre or unique situation or image in order to hook the reader in, such as a woman picking up roadkill on the side of the motorway. Finally we spoke about minimalism in short story writing and the different ways in which we can implement it through features such as show don’t tell, using fewer characters and ‘locked-room’ settings, thinking about how to squeeze a story down to its bare bones. We looked at a six-word story by Ernest Hemingway to finish the lesson, considering how so much meaning can be packed into a short phrase or sentence. Brilliant work today everyone- you all came up with some beautiful unusual ideas for story starters and completed some excellent character work. Have fun with your reading homework and I’ll see you next week 🙂
Short story tips (we’re watching the second half of this video next lesson, we watched the first four minutes today): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ae61kGNpQPs
Homework
The Roald Dahl Stories for Homework
The Landlady (this is the spooky one that’s quite creepy so don’t read it if you’re scared easily): https://www.teachingenglish.org.uk/sites/teacheng/files/landlady_text.pdf
The Hitchhiker (this is the silliest of all of them & not creepy at all): https://www.tdms.worcs.sch.uk/content/RemoteLearning/english/year7/The_Hitchhiker.pdf
Lamb to the Slaughter (this one is a little creepy but not very scary at all & quite silly/ ridiculous): https://theshortstory.co.uk/devsitegkl/wp-content/uploads/2015/06/Short-stories-Roald-Dhal-Lamb-to-the-Slaughter.pdf
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Here are Ernest Hemingway’s sequels to the six word story we looked at in the lesson:
https://www.newyorker.com/humor/daily-shouts/ernest-hemingways-six-word-sequels
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Here is my homework for Lesson 6:
Children should be able to choose what they learn in school. They are the ones learning, so
perhaps they should be able to make decisions on the subjects of what they actually want to learn.There is wide variety or subjects that people can take. from drawing to math to history. and not all or its essential.In this speech I will argue about that i want to change subjects students are learning school because I don’t find certain subjects useful or helpful, including math, but other subjects like Chinese are necessary to live for me.
Math is a boring, monotonous subject that destroys people’s brains with its randomness in
problems. Math is very strict and just displays numbers in its most boring form. The answer is always the same answer to a math problem. and that is very unfair to people with a wide imagination.It is also useless in real life sometimes it can come up with random numbers that are unrealistic. for example, it can say things like “You are buying a ruler and the guy tells you that its price is 2x+12*56/2.In addition, in my math book, there is a problem with a kid always spilling ink on a notebook or not knowing his parents age, and I always have to solve for it. So, children like me will start resenting these characters, Hating imaginary characters is not good for children’s mental and physical states.Furthermore, being stuck on an arbitrary problem like this can make people go crazy and go mental
when they have trouble solving it-or maybe is this is just me? therefore, the monotony and
ridiculousness of math stores is a very senates subject that am passionate about
In contrast Chinese is necessary for my everyday life and does not five me headaches in the
same way as math, It’s more useful in everyday life because no one communicates in a “language of math
when you walk on the streets, Chinese use chines to communicate.Chinese usually has about six parts, with the first part being Chinese characters, the second part being letters, and the third part being words, Each Chines characters of Chinese is useful and understanding. Chinese can help me communicate properly, and may even help crazy people in my math problems who
could just ask their parents age. You can even use your imagination in Chinese class. I would much rather spend more time taking Chinese class than learning math,
In conclusion, not all subjects are created equal and I would find school more useful if I could
choose which subjects stop spend my time learning. he world would be a better place and more
productive. If less emphasis was put on classes that students are reluctant to take.What class would you want to take if you were a student?
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Summary for Lesson 8
In today’s lesson completed our work on short story writing, thinking about putting into practice the conventions we had learnt last week and reviewing Dahl’s way of telling short stories for adults in order to help us do so. The class began with a great, lively discussion of Dahl’s short stories, where they discussed how effective each story was and why. We then looked at key tips for creating a poignant and powerful short story, such as building tension with every scene, focusing only on necessary detail, embracing minimalism and creating twists and turns in the narrative leading up to a climactic and revelatory ending. The class then all wrote their own fantastic short stories and self-evaluated them according to a checklist of important things to include. The students worked beautifully today and I was really impressed by their abilities in recalling the most important conventions of the genre and in putting those into practice. Amazing work everyone- keep it up and I’ll see you next week 🙂
Short story tips: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DLxeTh8QO0o&t=41s
Anti-social writing tips (watch before homework!): https://www.youtube.com/watch?time_continue=2&v=flthk8SNiiE&feature=emb_logo
Short story ideas to inspire you: https://blog.reedsy.com/short-story-ideas/
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Dear Beth:
Below is my homework, thanks!
Amy
There once was a little boy, his name was Henry.
On one bright sunny morning, he went out with a walk with
his dog, just when he was walking, he saw a light shining from
the sky, he started to walk a bit quicker, Max followed, when the boy was close enough, he was able to see what was it, he put his feet in, suddenly, he flew up, Max went with him too. Henry flew up, suddenly he knew it, an spaceship. He tried to make himself heavy, but in the light, he was like a feather, he looked up and in the spaceship he went. When his feet touched the floor, he was quiet, he tried to not scream, but it went out anyways, the door opened, and an alien stepped out and raised its axe then… -
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Hi Beth this is my homework
thanks Have a good day
Wind hallowed trough the branches made hissing sound. Rain smashed down on people’s coats. People walked with their head down, footsteps appeared with muttering. Hallie was alone in the street by herself going back home. She was very afraid of the bad weather. She had one arm out holding an umbrella, another was tucked in her pocket. The people around her seems to annoy this girl, most of them was tucked tightly in their little comfortable jacket. Some although had saw the lonely and unassisted little girl but act like seeing through. Their eyes were very tired to move not even to move a little, they looked at the girl intuitionism. Well for Hallie herself was quite unpleasant.her heart was full of fearlessness.
Hallie was so scared, because the vicious wind had took her younger brother away about two years ago. And now the city had once again been surrounded by the evil and powerful wind.
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Summary for Lesson 9
In today’s lesson we completed our writer’s workshop, focusing on consolidating our knowledge from the previous eight lessons and focusing on revising key writing skills. We began with some work on metaphor, thinking about how to use a random word generator to help come up with inventive and unique examples of figurative language, and the class came up with some great ideas in response. We then moved on to thinking about the four genres we have learnt over the course of the past eight weeks, revising the key conventions of each and considering which each student liked and disliked the most. Finally, the students asked any questions they had about writing in general and we looked briefly at some checklists that outline what the students should be aiming for in their writing. Good work today class, remember to revise for our lesson next week and I wish you all the best of luck with your work! See you soon 🙂
Random word generator: https://randomwordgenerator.com/
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Dear Beth:
Please check my homework, thank you!
Amy
There once was a little young boy, his name was Henry.
On one bright sunny beautiful morning, he went out with a walk with his brown husky dog, just when he was walking, he saw a light shining from
the blue dark sky, he started to walk a bit quicker, Max followed, when the boy was close enough, he was able to see what was it, he put his feet in, suddenly, he flew up, Max went with him too. Henry flew up, suddenly he knew it, an spaceship. He tried to make himself heavy, but in the light, he was like a feather, he looked up and in the spaceship he went. When his feet touched the floor, he was quiet, he tried to not scream, but it went out anyways, the door opened, and an alien stepped out and raised its axe then…
He tried to protect himself, he closed his eyes, waiting, for the last moment, but he never felt it, he opened his blue eyes, the mystery creature was gone without a trace.-
Gorgeous work Amy! You have made your work far more descriptive and detailed, which works perfectly for this story. I also really like the changed ending (fab use of parenthesis around the word ‘waiting’ to create suspense), and think it creates a really creepy sense of dramatic tension. Just be careful that you are making all the grammatical corrections I highlighted too (i.e., ‘a’ spaceship instead of ‘an’, or ‘it came out anyways’ instead of ‘it went out anyways’). Overall, a lovely piece of improved writing and a great story- well done 🙂
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Children should be able to choose what they learn in school. They are the ones learning, so
perhaps they should be able to make decisions on the subjects of what they actually want to learn.There is wide variety or subjects that people can take. from drawing to math to history. and not all or its essential.In this speech I will argue about that i want to change subjects students are learning school because I don’t find certain subjects useful or helpful, including math, but other subjects like Chinese are necessary to live for me.
Math is a boring, monotonous subject that destroys people’s brains with its randomness in
problems. Math is very strict and just displays numbers in its most boring form. The answer is always the same answer to a math problem. and that is very unfair to people with a wide imagination.It is also useless in real life sometimes it can come up with random numbers that are unrealistic. for example, it can say things like “You are buying a ruler and the guy tells you that its price is 2x+12*56/2.In addition, in my math book, there is a problem with a kid always spilling ink on a notebook or not knowing his parents age, and I always have to solve for it. So, children like me will start resenting these characters, Hating imaginary characters is not good for children’s mental and physical states.Furthermore, being stuck on an arbitrary problem like this can make people go crazy and go mental
when they have trouble solving it-or maybe is this is just me? therefore, the monotony and
ridiculousness of math stores is a very senates subject that am passionate about
In contrast Chinese is necessary for my everyday life and does not five me headaches in the
same way as math, It’s more useful in everyday life because no one communicates in a “language of math
when you walk on the streets, Chinese use chines to communicate.Chinese usually has about six parts, with the first part being Chinese characters, the second part being letters, and the third part being words, Each Chines characters of Chinese is useful and understanding. Chinese can help me communicate properly, and may even help crazy people in my math problems who
could just ask their parents age. You can even use your imagination in Chinese class. I would much rather spend more time taking Chinese class than learning math,
In conclusion, not all subjects are created equal and I would find school more useful if I could
choose which subjects stop spend my time learning. he world would be a better place and more
productive. If less emphasis was put on classes that students are reluctant to take.What class would you want to take if you were a student?
And that should I say I did not use show and tail but are used a very powerful hook in the beginning and the end in the beginning I’ve heard about my Big idea, and in the end I ended up with a question that hook the reader. The passage I wrote about it’s interesting and useful in real life because I always wondered about choosing the subject I learn. My opinion it is I know convincing and interesting persuasive paragraphs because I’m sure that a lot of children in my age they would imagine things like that.
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Beautiful self-evaluation Sofia on a really fantastic piece of writing. I love that you’ve thought about both the content and persuasiveness of your writing, alongside the techniques you have used such as the rhetorical question at the end. You have also connected this wonderfully well to the work we did on speech writing (i.e., using phrases such as your ‘big idea’). You’ve considered your audience beautifully (children your age) and thought about how to appeal to their point of view. Just be careful with your grammar and spelling- i.e., it is ‘show and tell’ and the first little bit at the beginning (‘and that should I say’) is a little bit confusing. Overall, gorgeous work- well done 🙂
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Miss.Beth the homework for the lesson! if you have time check it, please.
when he said that to me my heart broke like a diamond I found myself began crying for some reason he said that I throw so badly in the handball game my heart began to hurt. My friend was there helping me. I suddenly laugh a bit quietly I want to say that who can throw so beautifully when you first learn to touch a sport. You didn’t throw on the competition well too why dare you to talk to me like that we are a team we are each other’s teammates I know that maybe I am trash in this sport, and I might be trash forever on this sport but that doesn’t mean I can’t improve to you that I can change that thing. You might be a big tree in this sport I might just be a little grass on this topic, but you need to know that grass still can stand up when we are being stepped by people or tress like you laugh at me.
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This is great Liya- you have thought beautifully about the things you wanted to adapt in this piece and have pulled it off really nicely. You have used some gorgeous metaphorical language (i.e., ‘grass can still stand up when stepped on’) and have traced your main character’s emotions fantastically- I really get a sense of how frustrated and upset they are but how determined they feel at the same time. To make this even better, try to use a little more punctuation to break up your sentences, as it can get a little confusing without things such as a question mark after ‘how dare you talk to me like that?’ or commas to split up some of your longer sentences. Overall, wonderful, emotive work- really well done 🙂
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Summary for Lesson 10
In today’s lesson we completed our final mock writing exam, spending the first few minutes of the lesson learning about the trope of the anti-hero before launching into our writing. The class spent thirty-five minutes completing their writing, using an additional five minutes to plan. Everyone worked really well today, the students were very engaged throughout. Congratulations on finishing your mocks today class & well done for all your hard work over the last few weeks. I hope you have a lovely few weeks break and will hopefully see you all again very soon! Keep up the amazing writing and remember to have a look at the feedback I give you for your mock. Well done everyone 🙂
Anti-hero video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MEjgDeSnBMs
Homework
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Mock Exam:
The wind licked the surface of the train. Withered and yellow leaves were tipping their toes standing dubiously on the pitiful branches. The train cried piteously and was soon running away from the devastation. I stepped out of the train looked at the sky it was very cloudy. The sun has been hidden into the cloud-like a frightened fawn that had been almost attacked by a tiger.
The clouds kidnapped the sun and the blue sky was no longer beautiful, it was a freezing autumn day and I had just come to Nottinghamshire. I walked off the station and hurried to my friend’s wedding.
The Mansion that my friend owned was quite near the train station. After checking out on the googol map, I realised it was only 72min by foot so I decided to take the taxi. After 37min, I finally arrived at the wedding. My friend welcomed me to her home. The mansion was such a heavenly place. The chandelier was not only very high-level but also very practical. The overall image of the chandelier is a design full of personality style It’s great because it’s directly above the dining table, so considering that it’s hot to eat in summer, a button has been specially designed to turn on the fan and air conditioning directly. Her living room was very interesting. Upon entering the door was a small cabinet full of warmth, and going inside was a small kitchenette heading for the balcony looking to the right is the dining table to the left was a large floor-to-ceiling window next to the lovely coffee table and the small sofa was very elegant. Behind the sofas were some books that my friend has accumulated over the years. Going upstairs I saw another big balcony and the room my friend and help husband shared, next to the bedroom was a big study that she and her husband all use together they were very good scholars my friend was a news reporter for a high ranking company, her husband was a professor at the university. Everything in the study looked so former it gave me a sense of the courtroom.
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The mock Exam:
Today’s story is about an orphan girl that was sad about her mother and father’s death, so she forever lives on that day when her father and mother died, and she is helping to let her mother and father die. So once upon a time a girl name Nanci her father and mother died when she was 4 years old, she cannot run out of the sadness of her mother’s and father’s death. Her father and mother died because of a traffic accident. One day when Nanci is sleeping, she began to have a bad dream about her mother and father’s death. But she does not know why she cannot get out of this dream by hitting herself thinking that it will let this dream end, but it did not. She began to explore where she is and why is she here. Then she heard a beep then she sees her father and mother wake up in their bed where Nanci is staying in a house. Nanci looks at the calendar it says 1996 year and June 6. Nanci was shocked because she is on the day that her mother and father died, then she finds that her father and mother discover her “hey, who are you may I ask?” Nanci’s father said. Nanci said, “I am your daughter from the future.” Nanci’s father said, “interesting how can we know? Our baby now is just 1 year old”. Nanci knows that they won’t believe her. But she is sure that this is the day they died. “I am going to keep them from all the dangerous things to let them die.” Nanci thought to herself. When her mother and father go to work, she began to follow. They first go to the building site and work there for hours they lift heavy wood and brick that help to make a house and they climb up to the up of the metal stick that was holding up the building they sit there with no things that can protect them from falling. When there is a lunch break for them to at lunch, I thought they are going to eat lunch but no they go to a delivery work where they delivery foods, when they didn’t get right on time they have be scolded by the customer for lateness. They at the right time when the lunch break finish, they go back to the building site to work when I see this there are tears that was in my eyes, I use my hand and wipe them out. At the end of the day they go to delivery customers to there home with cars. I began to cry but I have nothing to do with this I cannot help anything……
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