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Summary for Lesson 1
In our first writing lesson together, we focused on descriptive writing, thinking about the three fundamental building blocks: high level vocab, literary techniques and sensory language. The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the descriptive pieces assigned for homework. It also contains some really important and helpful links, the inspiration for the gorgeous work the class did on up-levelling their vocab to an even more vivid and sophisticated level, and finally our discussions on sensory language, creating atmosphere, avoiding cliche and using unique and original literary techniques to grab the reader’s attention. The students were absolutely brilliant in today’s lesson, everyone was super engaged and full of fantastic ideas. Really great work today everyone and lovely use of simile and metaphor- very impressive work! See you next week 🙂
Descriptive writing video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RSoRzTtwgP4
Video about creating unusual and quirky metaphors: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3Wrq6AnYuxI&feature=youtu.be
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In the noisy amusement park, color light are flashing at every were. Ferris wheel are spinning. It looked like the colors are spinning. People stand together, having a sweaty smell in the air.Some excited people shouted. We can see the entire city from the top of the ferris wheel.
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The bright lights covers all over the playground, there are red, yellow, blue light stripes are all over the playground. There are people yelling to sell their foods and some others that was shouting on the roller-coaster. There are high and low buildings, but it made the play land more squished.
Ferris wheels are more than one and there looking’s are different too, some are with long stripes and some have with wooden seats on them. Different shops have light bulbs all around them, and the costumer are different at any time. The costumers for the shops are just like money to them so then when their costumer buy something then they will shout even louder. And the lights made the night that became just like the day, even though it is mid-night, but you still can smell the food’s yummy smell.
Little flags are the most interesting things, some of them will talk about what will happen in the following weeks, some will talk about what will this shop sell, and some might even say where is the funniest place to go.
If a wind blows by then you could hear the sound that the people on the roller-coaster make, then you will want to try it too. And the children are telling their mom if they want this or that, or crying loudly, and if you are walking to the playground you might as well hear the noise. But you still can taste the yummy foods for example ice-cream, it is fun but crowed.
Many of the activities you need to line up for a long time and sometimes when you finished it you thought that it was really fun and you will want to play another time, but then you still need to line up that long so most of your time is not playing but lining up to play. But some activities don’t need to line up so now your time is just relaxing and have fun!
Going to a playground can make you feel excited nervous or calm. And that’s what you really need to feel the happiness and be relaxed, it is just like a reward for yourself so you need to express yourself and do any thing you want, it is just a place that can make you feel right and to play, so a play ground is really just for all these things to let you feel better.
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I am in a sleepless playground. There are many snacks, which smell good. There are many people, so it is too loud that even a horn can’t be louder than the voice. It is an amazing thing to know that I had never seen a Ferris wheel in this big. Although the wheel is as tall as a tower, it is still very stable and fun, not like a round tower, boring and un-stable. I believe there must have a roller coaster.
The big wheel is so big that it is even bigger than the sun! I have never seen any wheels like this! This isn’t like the tire on the car, it’s brighter. This is the most beautiful circle that I’ve ever seen. I think when we are on the top of this wheel, we will see a complete picture of this playground. It must be lightful, although we haven’t gone up there.
I see a roller coaster on the wheel by accident, and it must be excited. Will it be fast? I don’t know. I think every roller coaster must be excited. But I know that it won’t be a place to look at the beautiful picture. It is also bright but not as bright as the wheel. However, the wheel is not as fast as the roller coaster. I remember my first roller coaster ride was terrible, so this roller coaster must be faster than that, because that first roller coaster is a child one.
After I have finished riding the wheel, I race to the snacks, because I am very hungry now. I saw many foods that I have never seen and make me very want to try them. I buy some for my friends, because they want me to buy some souvenir for the project for introducing anywhere. I also buy some snacks that I met before. The air smells like barbecue, hot dogs, and candies, and my mouth is full of things, too.
What a nice visiting! There are wheels, roller coasters, performances, snacks, etc.! Maybe I should take my friends to this place again. They will love this! I don’t think this place is any worse than other, although I hate the roller coaster, but everything else is wonderful! If next time this place don’t have much people, I will be able to play everything in this playground and talk to my friends.
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Summary for Lesson 2
In our second lesson together, we focused on narrative writing, thinking about the different stages to writing a narrative story that we could use to create compelling and capitvating stories. The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the narrative stories assigned for homework. It also contains the step-by-step process of story-planning, focusing on the seven elements of narrative writing such as plot, point of view, symbolism and theme. We completed work on how to hook the reader- for which the students came up with loads of amazing ideas such as the techniques of description and in media res. I was super impressed by everyone’s work today, they planned some lovely ideas. Great work everyone, see you next week 🙂
The video from the beginning of the lesson (the GCSE one): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ee-3qumk6E0&feature=youtu.be
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The wind blew in the big wild mountain, hikers were walking in a long path with all kinds of voice raring over and over. Suddenly, a huge rain begins wind and rain were a mess, and even some of the trees and plants are uproot and was been blown into the deep valley. And everyone was shocked.
The hikers ran into a mess, some of them said that they would still go and explore, but some think that the need to go to the cave to wait until the rain was over. Then the hikers split up a part, then a huge howl came it was the lion!
Some of the people that is in the cave was save, but the others ran away for their life’s. The lion was more and more close, everyone was scared, but some of the smart people said that they could lie down on the grass and not breath and let the lion think that they already died. So of they did, the people just lie on the cold grass. The lion cached up with them, and got closer, it sniffed and sniffed everyone was afraid that they would be eaten by the lion, and even the people who hide in the cave sweat for them.
But lucky the lion was not hungry it was just curious about the humans, and now the rain stops it is now the time to let the hikers explore new things. But at this moment they were very caution because no one wanted to see that lion again.
Then they explored something amazing that there was a small hedgehog that is in the dirt and was very dirty. One hiker picks it up and put it in her hands and said that she will adopt the hedgehog the hikers heart melted because of the creature that was cute, but no one cares about it.
Then one of them said that they can find the hedgehogs mom, so of they went, they searched and searched, and at last they found its mom in a pond were the waterfall is. The woman fist gave the little one a bath then took it to her mom. It was very warm when the animal and the animal’s mom met, and everyone was happy.
Then they went to see the waterfall it was so spectacular, and all the hikers are amazed, the water it so clear that they even could see some fish swimming in there, this is an artist artwork and the artist is the nature.
The hiking ends up, but that kind of recall can not end it is a time that they face life and death and they survived, and that they’d helped a small creature to find its mom. This kind of experience will never disappear in their mind, t is lovely and full of challenge.
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On a sunny day, a mountaineering team went hiking together. They are preparing to have dinner on the mountaintop.
Just as they were climbing up the mountainside, they encountered a very steep slope. Several strong men tried to climb up with their bare hands, but all failed. When they were in trouble, a clever woman came up with a solution: she found a rope. Let the strongest man be at the bottom, and everyone step on the shoulder of the person below, overlapping. In this way, the woman at the top successfully climbed to the top of the slope, tied the rope around a large stone, and the remaining people grabbed the rope one by one and climbed up the slope, finally reaching the top of the mountain.
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“It’s you? You killed her, accidentally?” I shouted, astonished. The man in hunting wear stands still, nodding slowly. Everyone was quiet, staring at each other. A woman burst into tears, her husband hugging her tightly. Who is the woman? What happened?
Three days ago, my family and my best friend, Emily’s family went to Rockwell Mountain to camp together. We’re going to stay for two weeks. It was a Sunday, the beautiful blue sky had no clouds at all. The adults planned to meet the famous hunter, Mr. Carter, so they could hunt together and taught us some tricks of hunting.
The second day, when the adults were hunting together in the woods with Mr. Carter, Emily and I decided to play hide and seek. She will be the hider, and I will be the seeker.
Emily was good at hiding. Usually, she stays low and moves slowly until she finds a good spot to hide herself from me. The Rockwell Mountain was so big, so I was a little bit worried about Emily getting lost in the woods. Just as I was about to step and find her, a loud bang of gunshot erupted from the forest, followed by a scream. I was frightened, is Emily hurt, or is it just the adults hunting animals? With my body trembling, I rushed back to the house, shut the door, closed the windows, and waited for my parents to get back.
“Ding!”the door rings. I was scared to answer the door. I peeked out of the curtain, seeing it was Mr. Carter. Relieved, I answered the door. Mr. Carter said straightly:“It’s me. I accidentally shot her, thinking she was a rabbit or some animal. I’m so sorry.”
That explains everything. Everything has been solved, and it’s time to go home.
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What a terrible holiday! It was ruined! I have been all day learning! I am Mars, a five-grade student. This summer vacation was terrible, just because nothing! My parents let me answer questions on a book, and that made me very unhappy. I can still see that dark cloud, right on top of our house. Whatever, everyone else used a real vacation to full their vacation, I used homework!
It is the most terrible holiday ever. I went on an ordinary holiday, like playing games, or going to other friends’ home. However, after the first week, my mom gave me much homework, like practicing a test. I thought, ‘I don’t need to take that test, why I should practice it?’, but my mom said it, so I should do it. It was too much and too hard! One of the questions is filling the blanks with sentences, and I failed it every time. In my school, I just need to read the passage for one time, even half time, then there will be an obvious answer. However, in this book, even though I read 5 or 6 times, I still think every answer is whether all right or all wrong.
After I finished the hard vacation, I found out that I really need to take the test, and I passed it. It was hard really, but it was worthy.
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Summary for Lesson 3
In today’s class we continued our writing lessons thinking today about emotive writing. We began by writing short descriptions trying to evoke particular emotions from the reader before thinking about analysing the connotations of words to uncover what kinds of emotions they communicate. We then looked at Pepys’ diary describing the Great Fire of London and then discussed what historical events we could write a characters’ diary entry for. The class created some historical characters and finally touched on what they needed to remember while diary writing. Fantastic work everyone, particularly when thinking about how word choice can make us think differently about emotions in a piece. Well done and see you next week 🙂
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Covid-19 pandemic
Beep! Beep! I was a little girl called Dora which was in the Covid-19 pandemic period and was really sick.
My head hearts and my arm were really hot, it was just like fire and I was very uncomfortable. And I hated when the nurse came, she always makes me get many shots and hanging bottles. It hearts a lot and every time it feels very tight and when I saw the blood, I will feel scared. And at many times I will cry.
With my eyes closed I felt like that everyday had been so long that I hope I could be better. Nothing ever happens, in the hospital I could only hear the adults talking but in mummering. I wanted to go back to school and see my friends, play with them and talk about what had happen in school. I wanted to have my old life back, but not just lying on the bed and doing nothing.
One night, when I was going to sleep, suddenly a nurse came with a serious looking, I knew that she was going to give me another shot again. But this time it was the worsts! I had five different needles on my hand, it was just crazy! That night I even didn’t sleep well, I woke up with two big black panda eyes and was very sleepy.
After a wile it was time for breakfast, when the nurse came to give me the food, I am very hungry, so I ate a lot. The warmth of the soup makes me happy. And the nurse happily said that I am not so sick so I could go to out and walk!
I am amazed about it and I thought how many days have, I didn’t breathe some fresh air. So off I went, it was amazing when I saw the plants and flowers and I am so astonished, the world was full of color and things that don’t know.
But happy times was always short, I came back to my room and was going to get other shots. Time passed by I felt like everyday was hard and tuff, but I believe that one day I will go out of this “cage” and discover the new world.
And that day finally came! When the nurse happily said that I am going to go out the hospital, I am so excited that I have no time to eat my breakfast but running out and discover the world! I finally reach the time to go out, although I have faced many challenges, but I survived from that. Until this day I still remembered it.
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Covid-19 pandemic
Beep! Beep! I was a little girl called Dora which was in the Covid-19 pandemic period and was really sick.
My head hearts and my arm were really hot, it was just like fire and I was very uncomfortable. And I hated when the nurse came, she always makes me get many shots and hanging bottles. It hearts a lot and every time it feels very tight and when I saw the blood, I will feel scared. And at many times I will cry.
With my eyes closed I felt like that everyday had been so long that I hope I could be better. Nothing ever happens, in the hospital I could only hear the adults talking but in mummering. I wanted to go back to school and see my friends, play with them and talk about what had happen in school. I wanted to have my old life back, but not just lying on the bed and doing nothing.
One night, when I was going to sleep, suddenly a nurse came with a serious looking, I knew that she was going to give me another shot again. But this time it was the worsts! I had five different needles on my hand, it was just crazy! That night I even didn’t sleep well, I woke up with two big black panda eyes and was very sleepy.
After a wile it was time for breakfast, when the nurse came to give me the food, I am very hungry, so I ate a lot. The warmth of the soup makes me happy. And the nurse happily said that I am not so sick so I could go to out and walk!
I am amazed about it and I thought how many days have, I didn’t breathe some fresh air. So off I went, it was amazing when I saw the plants and flowers and I am so astonished, the world was full of color and things that don’t know.
But happy times was always short, I came back to my room and was going to get other shots. Time passed by I felt like everyday was hard and tuff, but I believe that one day I will go out of this “cage” and discover the new world.
And that day finally came! When the nurse happily said that I am going to go out the hospital, I am so excited that I have no time to eat my breakfast but running out and discover the world! I finally reach the time to go out, although I have faced many challenges, but I survived from that. Until this day I still remembered it.
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English writing class 3
March 13, 2135
Today, the U.S.A is throwing bombs to us. I just woke up, seeing everyone rushing around like mice meeting a cat. The U.S.A is the cat, and we are the mouse. I ran outside, not knowing what’s happening now. I saw crazy people carrying toys, foods and other thing to their cars, or even trucks, as if they are going to live on their “moving homes”. Adults shouting to kids, kids shouting to adults, the message passed on into my ears.Suddenly, I truly realized that we are dangerous here as I smelled the scent of fire. I raced back to my house, feeling a bit anxious, at a loss of what to do. I remembered that once a time, I dreamed about myself getting lost at a huge amusement park, couldn’t find my phone, running around. But now, it’s in real life, really happening, and I need to do something about it. I took some canned food, a sleeping bag, some communication equipment, and my favorite toy, my car model my best friend gave me.
The loud noise is closer and closer to us. I jumped on my little truck and raced toward the edge of the city. I needed to drive slowly on the crowdy, muddy dirt road because there were always people running around doing everything but nothing. I felt nervous about whether I can survive this disaster or not, unsure about what will happen next, and sad for those who already dead without knowing. If we can get out of here, we will be safe for now, but not forever.
Wish me good luck
Andy
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Dear diary:
As a loud bang, I woke up from a tent. It was big and comfortable. This is my third day as a pawn. I have always been looking forward for being pawn, and I really did that the day before yesterday. I thought that day, “Wow, I’ve really done this! It doesn’t let me regret the time that I learn sword!”
After a “long” ride, I “soon” arrived at the military camp. It was amazing! There are many camps, water, fire, etc. Some one thinks that this place is boring, I feel that too, because of that annoying, boring practice. That was a nightmare! I can’t do anything, but I really improved my strength. There are many different weapons, but we are not permitted to touch them.
After a while of boring practicing, my superior told me that we must go to the Guandu battlefield. I was excited, not only because at least I can see what a real battlefield looks like, but also, I know this battle, which was one of the Chinese most famous battle, almost everyone knows. I already know we will win by using the 70 thousand pawns against the others, and they have 700 thousand pawns. I really thought I will tell my friends about this thing, but I can’t. I used that sword that I used for years, and I really hurt some people, and I have never thought that feeling ever before. It was amazing for me! Imagine this, you used your favorite weapons and helped this city! Isn’t this great?
I was tired and exited. I came back, feeling exited. I’m surprised that I can come back alive! What will happen next? I am really looking forward for my new life now, I thought, tomorrow will be another nice, exciting day.
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All the things in the city were normal, very normal. The planes soaring in the air, people hanging in the street, traders shouting over each other, competing about who sells the most goods. But then, the air started changing. The cloud covered the sun. The wind started blowing.
I woke up and peeked out through the curtain. The sun shined brightly in the sky, smiling at the people going to work. Maybe dad was in there too, I thought. I’m only six, so Mom needs to stay with me during the day. Mom said that we can go to the toy shop and buy whatever toy I want, since it was my birthday. Thinking is not how you do things, Mom always said. So, I jumped onto my cute little pony mat, changed my clothes, and started the day.
A few minutes later, I was at the front door, waiting for Mom impatiently. I wanted to keep calm, so Mom will say that I’m a good patient kid, but I’m so excited to buy my favorite toy! If I show Dad my little pony pencil case, Dad will say that It’s a good choice.
Finally, we walked through our beautiful garden, toward our car. On the way out, I felt that the flowers were laughing or smiling at me. It didn’t feel well, and I don’t know if it’s good or bad.
As I had expected, I got my perfect pony pencil case. I hid it in my little backpack, not letting anyone see, including me. When we got into our car, a loud bang spread over the city, followed by a second bang and a third bang. I am frightened and scared. I curled up un my seat, and Mom told me to be calm. The city broadcast then told us, residents, to go to the air defense center, and they will keep us safe.
On the way to the air defense center, I saw a huge traffic jam because everyone was heading toward one place. We fought our way to it and finally got safe from that disaster.
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Summary for Lesson 4
In today’s class we learned about literary techniques, digging into what these were and how to match techniques specifically to genre and style. We began by discussing different kinds of techniques and their purpose before practicing using a range of techniques. We then learned about suspense and how to select particular types of language to create a strong sense of suspense. Finally we focused on foreshadowing, delving into the different ways in which it can be created and then trying it out ourselves. Incredible work today everyone, particularly in understanding the idea of techniques as being about language as an art. Keep up the amazing job and see you next week 🙂
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In a dark, cold, night, A black shadow quickly ran in the the house. The air was a little bit wet. The house was dark and quiet. There was a bloody smell in the air.
At the morning, Mike woke up with a yawn. Suddenly, he hear a loud sound from outside:“Mr. Mike! Mr.Mike! There are a murder!” Mike walked out of his house. He ask what happened. And Mr.David said:“Ms.Sam died in her house! Last time we saw her was last day. Nobody saw people went in her house!” Mike frowned :“Take me to her house.”
They rushed to Ms.Sam’s house. Her house was a two store house, but with less windows. I observe the windows and the outside of the house, and walked in. It look huge in Ms.Sam’s house. Everything was expensive. Mike suddenly think about some thing. He ran up to the 2nd floor and ran in to the bedroom. Like what he was thinking, the safe deposit box was opened. nothings was in there. Mike thought for a while. So the murderer comes for money, he thought.
Suddenly, he saw a little bit of blood leading out of the window. He saw a fingerprint, too.“Tell officer Percy to come here.” He said to others. After a while, officer Percy came. He search all over the house, and take the finger print to the police station.
Three days later, officer Percy come to Mr.Mike’s house and said:“The fingerprint lead to Mr.White.”They went to Mr.White’s house and ring the doorbell. “Who is there?” said Mr.White. Quick as a flash, he started to run. The other police jumped out from the grass and catch him.Percy smiled:“Let us go to the police station to hear what you had done.”
Mr.White confess his crime, and Mike are going on the TV for his action. It was a lovely week for him.
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Lila was shocked with fear, under the truth there was still something, a pail white bone with red dimond on it. When she quickly packed it into her bag, suddenly a huge wind came, and the tornado was just in front of the cave. Lila ran with fear, but she was so afraid that her father would know it, so her legs shocked hardly, she wanted to run but her legs wabbled and wabbled, at last she couldn’t hold. She sat on the floor with her mouth wide open, because the tornado was coming!
Woosh! Woosh! The tornado was just like a big lion on the field, it was now in front of Lila. Suddenly a huge wind came and the plants around Lila shook hardly, and some even was blown away. And it came. Lila was blown up by the tornado, she thought that this was the day that she would end her life. She closed her eyes and waited for the death.
One minute two minute three minute…… she waited and waited, but nothing had happened, she was now in a place where there are huge plants growing there and saw a bad man that is running to here and going catch her. She ran and ran but the man was just still there running and running. Know she thought of an idea to play hide and seek to that man. She ran to some tall plants and climbed on them. The man lost the people who he needs to catch so run around and around.
It was soon night that people were still finding Lila, and Lila thought that she would just sleep on the plant and wait. But just then the plant grew smaller and smaller and Lila fell off. Then she heard the man’s voice with anger “I finally found you naughty girl!”
Lila didn’t think more than just run away, she run faster but the man was too. At last she was so tired and thought about that what kind of scary things will the man do with her. She suddenly thought about the pail bone that has a red and on it she remembered that there was a word “ooosh” so she thought that if she said that word something might happen, so she shouted out.
When she finished her head hurts a lot. Just then she heard her mom calling her and when she opened her eyes again she saw that she was still in her bed and realized that it was just a dream.
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Play, play, play! Kids just want to play. I believe that our school must build a huge playground for kids to play. It’s not only for the kids, but also for the school! Schools with a huge playground, or playing area, will attract so many children to come. A huge playground can also change others’ thinking about our school: Wow! A huge playground! My kids will be very happy to be there.
If you build this playground, kids or even parents will love you. Children can play happily, move happily, and learn happily. Children moving around more will make their happiness increase, causing them to learn focused and behave better in school time.
You want to play or learn? Of course, children will LOVE to play. Please build me, build us, build the whole school a happy playground.
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Summary for Lesson 5
In today’s class we studied persuasive writing, thinking through the different voices, styles and techniques we can use in this type of writing. We began by discussing the way in which persuasive writing is about influence, brainstorming ideas of techniques. The class learned and practiced three advanced techniques and we then applied this to thinking about logos, ethos and pathos. We wrote a persuasive piece in response to a prompt, looked and example answers and discussed their strengths and weaknesses. Finally the students thought about how to create an authoritative tone in their writing; excellent work today everyone, really strong understanding and sharing throughout. Fab work 🙂
Hyberbole vid: https://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/articles/z6h72sg
Anaphora vid: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dr970RgZu8w
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To the headteacher of Grade5:
Hi, my name was July, a Grade5 student. I think the school should spend the £1 million from the government for same cool, virtual reality glasses.
Buy some VR glasses will make our school better, and make teacher’s life easier. VR glasses can make student focus, because it are playful. Students can saw colorful image with VR glasses. It would be cool and fun to lean with it.
Also, It can make teacher’s life easier. If school have this, teachers will have the best place they want to work. And they can teach by the invisible whiteboard.
Lastly, VR glasses equal many equipment like computers, iPads, and whiteboard. If the school have this, we don’t need these computers. Instead, we can do things(like typing)on the 3D world.
This is why we should use £1 million to buy some VR glasses. Maybe you can think about it?
Sincerely,
July Bi
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Dear grade five teachers,
My name is Claire, a grade five student. And I think that the government should grant $1million dollars to the poor people.
Buy some books and teachers to let the students learn, or then they couldn’t have a better life, but people are all equal.
Also, if we make them learn well, then even some intelligent will pop up and make our life better and better.
At last it can make that poor place be a place that many other countries people wanted to go, like making a sculpture and it can give more jobs to all the people who live in that place.
This is why that I think the $1million dollars to grant on.
Your sincerely,
Claire
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Dear all teacher who teaches grade five:
Hi!
I am Mars, a grade five student. I think it is a good idea to grant 1 million dollars for the poor students.
First, there are many student here, and some of them has a great future or many great ideas. We must give them help. It is a good idea to buy some electronic equipments to let them think school is fun. Don’t you want them to be a great teacher and help you?
Second, they may have a potential of learning, what we need to do is just to encourage them. It’s easy, just use the money to buy something.
Last, upgrading the environment is also important. If the air always permeate a awful smell, can you tolerate it? Of course not! If you can’t, then don’t expect we can!
That is what I suppose to use 1 million dollar to grant.
Sincerely,
Mars
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I believe that learning from experiences is better than learning from books. Learning in that scene will be more efficient than learning from a fake scene. When you figure a question out on your own, you will know better when you met it next time. If I let to choose the two ways to learn, you must like to try it yourself than hearing me telling you about what it feels like, smells like, looks like…
Also, books or other information written on paper, sometimes, will be wrong. Books are written by people that tried that thing out, it’s their thoughts about it. It may not be what you think, so don’t believe in others, believe yourself. Will you want to see your friend spending five days to finish reading a long information book, but found out that all the information is wrong? That’s a waste of time.
So, please learn from your experiences than from the books, it’s a better way to learn and will help you improve.
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Summary for Lesson 6
Today we studied argumentative essay writing, reflecting on the difference between this and a persuasive essay and then studying different techniques and structures used in argument building. We learned about concepts such as thesis statements, thought about different types of evidence and step-by-step planned out some argumentative essays in response to lots of prompts. Finally the class conducted a debate, working in teams to present watertight arguments centred on logos, ethos and pathos- which they did a particularly impressive job on! Really superb work everyone, I can’t wait to read your pieces for this week. Very well done 🙂
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Imagine you are trying to learn something. Would you rather learn with a book or through experience?
I believe many people will choose to learn with a book. First, books are clear. Books will always provide clear information. For example, when reading a book about something suspicious. Second, if learning anything needs an experience, what if you are reading about Harry Potter? You can’t just run into the wall between number 9 and 10 platform! Third, books are very convenient. You can’t always take an experiment materials everywhere, whereas you can take a book to anywhere.
But some people might think it’s better to gain an experience. First, books can be unreal. However, experiences cannot. For instance, sometimes a book said antimatter will not explode wherever it was. Can you believe it? No! Second, if you try to learn dancing from books, can you really master it?
In my opinion, they all have good things. If we learn PE from books, we will only get more ideas. In addition, if we learn math through experiences, it would also be a waste of time.
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Summary for Lesson 7
In our lesson together, we focused on informative writing, thinking about how to write informatively/ expositionally in the context of newspaper writing. The powerpoint with all the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the articles assigned for homework. It also contains our thoughts on how to structure a newspaper, how to create an eye-catching and effective headline, the students’ ideas about the important features of newspaper writing, and their thoughts on who their role models are and why. On the final few slides, there are also some really great examples of articles written on different people’s heroes from The Guardian, which will be super helpful to the students when it comes to writing their homework. Really well done for your work today everyone, it was fantastic hearing all of your ideas on headlines and how to capture a reader’s attention. I was also super impressed by your knowledge of the purpose of different structural features of newspapers; well done everyone, have a lovely week! 🙂
Here is the video on newspaper writing: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=flq29zwRrZA&t=59s
Homework
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Wonderful work here July, well done! You have chosen some very important aspects of Hellen Keller’s life to focus on, digging into the way in which she is a disability advocate and all the books she has published. You have reflected on the themes of never giving up and maintaining hope very nicely and I really enjoyed the way you used images and sub-sections to make your work pop off the page. The idea of learning and starting over again is a very powerful inspiration and I really liked that you focused on education throughout your biography of her- well done! To make this even better, just be careful with your tenses. Because you are talking about things that happened in the past you should use the past tense i.e., Helen Keller was sick when she was very young. The disease made her blind and deaf… She learned with Anne Sullivan… She grew into a girl. Reading your work out loud could help you hear where you are using the wrong tense. Overall fab work here well done 🙂
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Incredible work Andy, well done! You have used the newspaper template here beautifully to create a piece that is eye-catching and compelling to read. I loved the way you have used quotations, reflecting on some of the most important ideas and themes surrounding education and learning and helping your reader to feel you have lots of expert thinkers to back you up. Your writing is very persuasive, using some really powerful language and I love your ending which uses a one-sentence slogan vividly to drive your point home. Your ideas are sophisticated and your writing is inspiring; lovely use of images too! To make this even better, could you give an example of a teacher who has made a difference, you could choose a famous example i.e., Aristotle or Einstein, showing us how one teacher can impact the world. Overall fab work well done 🙂
Corrections:
Teachers are very important in our lives
They make us smarter, so we can teach our kids
Keeping the community of Earth alive
Teachers make scientists, engineers and other humans
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Hey Mars- yes of course it can, great idea!
Beautiful work Mars, well done! I really loved how you have told the story of Li Taipo through his relationship to poetry, reflecting on the way this changed throughout his life. You have then quoted his poetry which is a great idea as it demonstrates to the reader why you have been so moved and touched by his poems. I enjoyed learning his biography, about how he burnt his poetry and how he moved to many mountains, which gave us a great sense of who this man was and the way he chose to live his life. You’ve used the features of a newspaper fantastically, such as images and incentives for the reader to buy the newspaper, and have used colour and font to catch the reader’s eye wonderfully. To make this even better, could you give us some more information about why he is inspirational, i.e., what makes him special? What did he do in later life? When did he live? Overall fabulous work well done 🙂
Corrections:
Famous Chinese poet
Lived in Sichuan before the age of 25
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Summary for Lesson 8
In today’s class we looked at rhetorical devices, thinking about how they can help us in argumentative and persuasive writing. We discussed the idea of rhetoric, learning about the Ancient Greek conception of it, and then looked at a Mandela speech considering how he had used rhetoric to make his point. The class brainstormed ideas of things they are passionate about and learned some devices such as allusion and pathos. We then wrote the opening to their speeches, thinking about utilising the tone of the powerful and about how to harness emotion. Well done everyone, strong work today. keep it up and see you next week 🙂
Homework
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I am prepared to die
One day changed my entire life. That day I was just going to see the doctor and let her check my body ( if it is healthy or not), but then that doctor said something to another doctor and he came and said to me in a sad voice that I am going to die soon. My heart suddenly broke, I ask the doctor if he can save my life but the answer, I got was so bad because I got a cancer so the doctor can’t help. That night I had a dream, it was when that day came and I am very weak and was just going to close my eyes, with my family members bursting with tears and me closing my eyes with a dream that I can’t open my eyes again. I suddenly woke up with fear, my feet were cold like ice and my face shocked white as a paper. I don’t want to face this kind of tragic, I still want to play and have fun with my friends, Why is it so unfair that everyone except for me was alive and me facing the death. But then I knew that I cannot be afraid of it, I just need to have super fun in these time and when I die I will be the happiest person who died.
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Why do Students Need To Do Homework
Do you ever think about life with no home work? It is cool and good though, but actually, it is bad in some ways, too.
First, you won’t learn thing with out homework. Because in class, teacher told you how to do the work, so you will think you know how to do(in fact, not).But homework will let you know if you know how to du the work.
Also, homework can make you more smart. It could let you be more skilled to do the thing.
In conclusion, homework was good for us. Now, think about it, are you still think life with no home work was good?
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Have you ever thought of having a cat? Cats to people are like best friends meet together when their hard time. Cats are friends, cats are helpers, cats are the one who encouraged you. So why don’t join our organization to save and protect stray animals?
First, we can enjoy the process. if you met a cute, stray little animal, will you want to forsake from it? It’s like leaving your favorite thing in the snow and never look at it. However, protecting a stray animal is hard by yourselves, and you can tell us where it is, and we can help to protect it from uncomfortable environment.
Second, we are experts, so we can help you understanding what animals want to do to you, and how can you protect them or make friends with them. Understanding animals is very important. Imagine you are in a wild forest, and you can see a cat. If you want it to help you, what if you can’t understand it?
For summary, please join us, it’s important and enjoyable.
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Summary for Lessons 9 & 10
In today’s class we completed our writing course, finishing up with a workshop on writer’s voice and a mini mock exam. We discussed how to categorise our own writing and how to leave an imprint of ourselves in the way we use style, voice and language. We looked at free-writing exercises and how thinking about your ideal reader can help you work out what is unique to your writing, and the class discussed how they felt about different genres and why. We then completed a 45 min exam to sum up all the class’s knowledge and work over the past ten weeks. Well done everyone, impressive work today and I can’t wait to read your work. Keep it up and I will see you soon 🙂
Homework
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Little test in class:
Is science or art more essential to humanity? This question requires deep thinking. Science can practice humans’ skills of understanding and solving problems, it can make all the things in humans’ lives clear, solved and organized. Art can practice humans’ skills of creativity and designing structures, it can make humans’ lives more interesting and full of fun.
Science is what the left brain do. Science can keep you to think and be active and let you learn to organize things. For example, a good company or person that owns a good company uses the thought of “I need to control it” to make it a huge company.
On the other hand, art is what right brain do. Art can let you to create whatever things you want and try/experience things out. For example, those famous people that creates a new company and provides others a convenient life like Apple uses the thought of creative and the thought of “I want to try it out” to get to the end.
At last, I want to state that I think art is more important in our lives than science because it can leads us to explore the world and things that we don’t know. Which one do you think is more important?
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