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    • #12003
      VMWEdu
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    • #12057
      Beth
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      Summary for Lesson 1

      In our first lesson together, we focused on descriptive writing, thinking about the three fundamental building blocks: high level vocab, literary techniques and sensory language.  The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the descriptive pieces assigned for homework. It also contains some really important and helpful links on Slide 11 such as the online thesaurus and vocab lists, the inspiration for the gorgeous work the class did on up-levelling their vocab to an even more vivid and sophisticated level, and finally our discussions on sensory language, creating atmosphere, avoiding cliche and using unique and original literary techniques to grab the reader’s attention. The class worked really well in today’s lesson, and I was particularly impressed by the vocab and sensory language they were using. Futhermore, the unique and unusual examples of figurative language the students came up with were really gorgeous. I loved hearing their thoughts on cliche and less exciting vocab, and thought that they were extremely adept at critiquing and improving on their own work. I was also very impressed by their work on sensory language and how it can be used to paint a scene and create atmosphere. Outstanding work today everyone, keep it up and I will see you all next week ! 🙂

      P.S. Here is the video about descriptive writing if you’d like to revise it: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RSoRzTtwgP4&feature=emb_title

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    • #12091
      thea
      Participant

      hello Beth,

      Here is my homework for the second picture:

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/14UHrbMuKmwnOQw7NjVwbMJUJ03-XDP23DAKilw6jdAE/edit?usp=sharing

      Thank you 😀

       

       

       

      • #12286
        Beth
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        Hi Thea,

        Wonderful work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12134
      Amber
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      I loved this week’s lesson, it was splendid!🎈😀

      Here is my homework,

      Have a wondrous week!🎇🎉🎄🎀🎢🎪

       

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      • #12291
        Beth
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        Hi Amber,

        So glad you enjoyed it 😀

        Outstanding work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12136
      Amber
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Sorry about this second message, but if you can’t open my previous document, I have posted it again in this one, only without the picture.

      Apologies for this disruption,🎠

      Amber

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    • #12188
      Yuexi
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      Here is my homework, thank you. ; )

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      • #12295
        Beth
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        Hi Yuexi,

        Wonderful work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12233
      Junming
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      How are you. Your lesson is fabulous! Thank you.

       

      Here is my homework. It is attached below.

      I can’t wait to see you again.

      Johnny

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      • #12304
        Beth
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        Hi Junming,

        I’m so glad you enjoyed the lesson!

        Delightful work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12241
      Ray
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      Dear Beth,

      Please find attached my homework.

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      • #12306
        Beth
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        Hi Ray,

        Dynamic work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12348
      Beth
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      Summary for Lesson 2

      In our second lesson together, we focused on narrative writing, thinking about the different stages to writing a narrative story that we could use to create compelling and capitvating stories.  The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the narrative stories assigned for homework. It also contains the step-by-step process of story-planning, focusing on the seven elements of narrative writing such as plot, point of view, symbolism and theme. We completed work on how to hook the reader- for which the students came up with loads of amazing ideas such as the technique of dramatic irony and in media res. I was super impressed by everyone’s work today, they planned some incredible story frameworks and worked with advanced concepts such as themes and symbolism beautifully. I also thought their interpretation of the ideas from the GCSE video was really superb. Well done everyone! I really look forward to reading all your stories, the ideas you have for them sound amazing. Keep up the fab work guys! 🙂

      P.S. Here are the videos I mentioned that you should watch if you have some spare time:

      Symbolism: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GR9VbSXxouM&feature=youtu.be

      Pacing: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=krpMNLRhM_4&feature=youtu.be

      The video from the beginning of the lesson (the GCSE one): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ee-3qumk6E0&feature=youtu.be

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    • #12374
      thea
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Thank you for the lesson, here is the link to my homework;

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oRWASCkseVvoXgFpZgHHc3fn43r94AgO2mPamwzZ5_E/edit?usp=sharing

      Thank you 😀

       

       

      • #12511
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Thea,

        Imaginative work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12403
      Junming
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

       

      Your lessons are always fantastic! I can’t wait to see you next week. Here is my homework attached below.

      Thank you.

      Johnny

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      • #12515
        Beth
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        Hi Johnny,

        Stellar work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12454
      Amber
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Thank you for the marvellous lesson.

      Have an energetic week!

      Here is my homework.

       

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      • #12517
        Beth
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        Hi Amber,

        Sophisticated work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12538
      Ray
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Thank you for another fantastic class. Sorry I am in a rush and might be late to submit the homework. Hope it is ok.

       

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      • #12556
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Ray,

        No worries!

        Spectacular work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12591
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Here is my homework.  sorry for the lateness.

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      • #12750
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Yuexi,

        No worries!

        Impressive work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12603
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 3

      In our final creative writing lesson, we focused on emotive writing, thinking about how to use language to evoke an emotional response from the reader and play on their heartstrings.  The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the diary entries assigned for homework. It also contains our work on the importance of word choice and connotations to evoke emotion, thinking about how to use adjectives, adverbs, nouns and verbs to subtly suggest ideas to the reader, and our work on character creation, looking at how to get inside the psyche of a fictional character. We used a diary entry from Captain Robert Scott as inspiration, analysing his language and interpreting the emotions on display, and thought more generally about the conventions of diary writing, the details of which are on Slide 11. Finally, we thought about the way in which humans speak about their emotions figuratively, and the consequent importance of figurative language and literary techniques in emotive writing. The class were absolutely fantastic today, they were brimming with lots of amazing ideas and contributions. They dealt with the themes of Scott’s diary with amazing maturity, considering some really difficult emotions that Scott presents the reader with and reflecting this in their own work. They also all did some beautiful work on switching between language designed to evoke sympathy and language designed to evoke anger and presented some really gorgeous emotive work. Really well done everyone, you were an absolute pleasure to teach today, as always. I really look forward to reading the emotive diary entries you come up with- keep up the amazing work!

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    • #12734
      thea
      Participant

      Hello Beth,

      Thank you for the amazing lesson 😀 Here is the link to my homework:

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yadRndH7DHojdLpfLX4VCxuky91xhOWBnLtRsRgB3jY/edit?usp=sharing

      Thank you 😀

       

      • #12881
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Thea,

        Riveting work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12861
      Ray
      Participant

      Dear Beth, Please see the homework. Thanks.

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      • #12901
        Beth
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        Hi Ray,

        Outstanding work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12864
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Here is my homework,

      Thank you.

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      • #12904
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Yuexi,

        Fantastic work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12869
      Junming
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

       

      Sorry about the delay. Today, I’m having a music theory exam so I didn’t have much time to squeeze it into the deadline.  Here is my homework for this weeks’s lesson.

       

      Johnny.

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      • #13768
        Beth
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        Hi Johnny,

        No worries about the delay! Gorgeous work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12930
      Amber
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      I sent in my homework on Monday, but I have just found out that it isn’t on the website, I am not sure whether it was because of technical problems, sorry for the delay. I have attached it again to this message, thank you.

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      • #13774
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Amber,

        No worries about the delay! Inspired work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #12982
      Junming
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      Dear Beth,

      Here is my mock exam answer. I hope you have a good week before meeting again!

      Johnny.

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    • #13003
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 4

      In today’s lesson we completed our creative writing mock exam, spending the first ten minutes of the lesson to quickly revise the core components of the three types of creative writing we have studied: descriptive writing, narrative writing and emotive writing. We also looked at some top tips for exam practice, and thought a bit about planning and time management. The class then spent twenty minutes completing their writing, using an additional five minutes to plan. They all worked in a really focused, interested and mature way today and all seemed to have prepared wonderfully for the exam. They also then self-evaluated their work fantastically, thinking about what went wells and even better ifs and then thinking more deeply about whether they had included all the necessary elements such as literary techniques and advanced vocab. We planned a story together as a class which will hopefully help the students think about the different ways in which they can use the planning process to their advantage, and also thought a bit about tips for remembering advanced vocab. Really brilliant work today everyone, I am very excited to read and mark your exams. Keep up the focus and enthusiasm you all show so beautifully in our lessons together! 🙂

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    • #13797
      Beth
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      Hi everyone,

      Wonderful work all round on the mock exams this week! Well done!

      I’ve attached everyone’s feedback below.

      See you soon 🙂

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    • #13861
      Beth
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      Summary for Lesson 5

      In our first essay writing lesson together, we focused on persuasive writing, thinking about building on the students’ knowledge of persuasive writing and thinking about advanced techniques. The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the persuasive letters assigned for homework. It also contains our thoughts on the conventions of formal letter writing, the persuasive techniques thought up by the students and our work on creating an argument using logos, pathos and ethos. We spoke about authoratative voice and how to build it, and also looked at and marked example pieces of persuasive writing- all of which is on the powerpoint. Everyone worked to a super high standard today, I really enjoyed hearing all of their examples of persuasive techniques that they produced and thought that their understanding of the philosophical elements of argument was fantastic. They also all performed brilliantly in the mini-test on persuasive devices- really well done guys! As ever, I am really impressed with all of your work. Keep it up and I look forward to reading your persuasive letters! 🙂

      A video in case you’d like to do some persuasive techniques revision: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LRVOLqvXNmg

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    • #13991
      Junming
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

       

      I loved your lesson this week. Here is my homework. I can’t wait to see you next week.

      Thanks,

      Johnny.

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      • #14199
        Beth
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        Hi Johnny,

        Wonderful work this week,  I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14064
      Amber
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

       

      Happy Easter!! I hope the Spring sunshine will always shine upon you!🤩🎇

       

       

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      • #14201
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Amber,

        Thank you, happy Easter to you too!

        Beautiful work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14129
      Ray
      Participant

      Dear Beth, Please see the homework.

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    • #14242
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 6

      In our second essay writing lesson together, we focused on argumentative writing, thinking about how to build logical and watertight arguments using a seven-step format.  The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the argumentative essays assigned for homework. It also contains our thoughts on how to structure a piece of argumentative writing, our work on logos, ethos and pathos, a check-list for how to ensure your argument is successful (slide 6) and our thoughts on the types of evidence that can be used in a piece of argumentative writing. Everyone worked well today; I really enjoyed hearing their ideas on how to structure and form water-tight arguments, and thought that their understanding of the key differences between persuasive and argumentative writing was superb. Well done everyone, keep up the fab work and I look forward to reading your arguments! 🙂

      Here is the video from class if you would like to revise the key elements of writing to argue: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yA5yIXCX4iA

      Here is an extension video to watch if you have time: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NKEhdsnKKHs

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    • #14312
      Junming
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      I really loved your class. Here is my homework. See you next week!

      Thanks,

      Johnny.

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      • #14475
        Beth
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        Hi Johnny,

        I’m so glad you enjoyed the lesson!

        Amazing work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14336
      thea
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thank you for the lesson.

      Here is the link to my writing:

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Oh3XneCtp98r9-l96ocfji9JgdeRTdITM5PnrCATEPg/edit?usp=sharing

      Thank you 😀

      • #14477
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Thea,

        Stunning work this week,  I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14341
      Amber
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Thank you for such a marvellous lesson!  Have a splendid  Spring!!!

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      • #14479
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Amber,

        Thank you, you too!

        Incredible work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below.  See you soon 🙂

         

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    • #14506
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      here is my homework.

      Sorry for the lateness

       

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      • #14696
        Beth
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        Hi Yuexi,

        No worries!

        Great work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14513
      Ray
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Please find attached my homework. Thank you!

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      • #14701
        Beth
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        Hi Ray,

        Wonderful work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below.  See you soon 🙂

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    • #14540
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 7

      In our final essay writing lesson together, we focused on informative writing, thinking about how to write informatively in the context of newspaper writing.  The powerpoint with all of the resources is attached below, which should be used to help write the articles assigned for homework. It also contains our thoughts on how to structure a newspaper, how to create an eye-catching and effective headline, the students’ ideas about the important features of newspaper writing, and their thoughts on who their role models are and why. On the final few slides, there are also some really great examples of articles written on different people’s heroes from The Guardian, which will be super helpful to the students when it comes to writing their homework. Really well done for your work today everyone, it was fantastic hearing all of your ideas on who is your personal hero and why. I was also super impressed by your knowledge on the purpose of different structural features of newspapers, and how engaged you all were throughout our lesson. Well done everyone, have a lovely week! 🙂

      Here is the video on newspaper writing: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=flq29zwRrZA&t=59s

      I’ve attached some templates below to use for homework (or you can create your own)

      P.S. Remember to revise for our exam next week!

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    • #14549
      Amber
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Thank you for teaching me so many skills!

      See you next week😀

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      • #14806
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Amber,

        Incredible work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14595
      thea
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Thank you for the fabulous lesson, Here is the link to my writing:

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1W1pW0Qu0Af9OnaU_eYO0VAn1hl6kTrQo6ORqFuR-KlE/edit?usp=sharing

      Thank you 🙂 🙂

      • #14808
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Thea ,

        Amazing work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14654
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Here is my homework, thank you

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      • #14810
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Yuexi,

        Lovely  work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14666
      Ray
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      Dear Beth,

      Please find attached below my homework. Thank you.

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      • #14812
        Beth
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        Hi Ray,

        Stunning work this week, I’ve attached  your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14699
      Junming
      Participant

      Dear Beth

       

      Here is my homework.

      Thanks,

      Johnny

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      • #14814
        Beth
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        Hi Johnny,

        Fabulous work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #14865
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 8

      In today’s lesson we completed our essay writing mock exam, spending the first ten minutes of the lesson to quickly revise the core components of the three types of essay writing we have studied: persuasive writing, argumentative writing and informative writing. We also looked at some language techniques in advance of the exam, and thought a bit about planning and time management. The class then spent twenty minutes completing their writing, using an additional five minutes to plan. They also then self-evaluated their work fantastically, thinking about what went wells and even better ifs. Everyone worked beautifully in today’s lesson, I really enjoyed hearing all their thoughts on their work and thought that their summaries and understanding of the three types of essay writing was outstanding. I have been so impressed with all of you over the last few weeks and really look forward to reading your exams. You should all be very proud of the work you have done in our lessons together, it has been a pleasure to teach you! Well done everyone, and I hope to see you all again soon in the future 🙂

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      • #14867
        Beth
        Participant

        P.S. Here is a video with some top tips for exams and studying. Give it a watch if you get a spare minute: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=unijc3z6X9U

    • #15076
      Beth
      Participant

      Hi everyone,

      Brilliant work in the mock exams that we did last week!

      I’ve attached all of your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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    • #15107
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Hi, I re-edited my exam writing.

      Here it is,

      Thank you.

       

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      • #15223
        Beth
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        Hi Yuexi,

        Such a great improvement, very good work! I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 🙂

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