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    • #43056
      VMWEdu
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    • #43228
      Beth
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      Summary for Lesson 1

      In today’s lesson we began our work on 11+ writing, focusing today on character creation and how to focus on one key character in an exam. We started the lesson with some metaphor work to enable the students to practice and expand upon their use of figurative language. We then moved on to thinking about the structure of these lessons where every week we will be dissecting and studying a different piece of 11+ writing advice written by an 11+ examiner. Today we thought about how to use character archetypes, backstory, ideas regarding a character’s flaws and morality and thoughts on their character arc to create realistic, memorable and complex characters. We then considered how these characters could express themselves within the stories they inhabit, thinking about dialogue and the function it plays there. Amazing work today everyone- so many great ideas! Keep up the wonderful work and I’ll see you next week! 🙂

      Video on dialogue that we watched: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7xx7bfcE9U0

      A video on character from the same series that could be really helpful revision (watch if you have a spare 5 mins!): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fGRyP3p-YPI

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #43250
      EdwardLi
      Participant

      hi Beth

      should i do this paper again because i have already done it and i go to the school who created this paper which is Magdalen college school so i will just do the task i didn’t do

      from lucas

      • #43377
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Lucas, as long as you write a new original piece then I don’t think it matters, but yes good idea to do the task you didn’t choose last time anyway!

    • #43256
      Ethan
      Participant

      My homework for this week.

      Sorry Iwasn’t there for the lesson.

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      • #43382
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Ethan,

        No worries, thanks for doing the homework anyway!

        Super work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43262
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hello Beth,
      I really enjoyed the lesson.
      Thanks
      Jasmine

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    • #43270
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hi Beth,
      Please ignore the previous document, which was wrongly attached.
      This is correct one.
      Many Thanks,
      Jasmine

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      • #43386
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jasmine,

        Fabulous work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43273
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Many thanks for the lesson. My homework is attached.

      Regards

      Victor

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      • #43388
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Victor,

        You’re welcome!
        Super work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43277
      Jerry N
      Participant

      Hi Beth!

      Here is my homework!

      I have decided to chose option 1!

      Kind regards,

      Jerry😁

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      • #43390
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jerry,

        Lovely work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43279
      EdwardLi
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      here is my homework attached below.

      from Lucas

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      • #43392
        Beth
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        Hi Lucas,

        Super work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

         

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    • #43308
      SophiaG
      Participant

      As the radiant moon glared at the ship harshly with its elusive light, the Esperanza was lightly bobbing on the dazzling diamond surface of the calm oceans. Midnight was approaching gently yet fast paced.

      It was another tedious day of laboriously chopping up potatoes. Jemima was sharpening her cut blade carefully and determinedly polishing it opal clear. You could almost see her crooked grin. After she performed this nightly ritual, she flung her glossy brown hair back and twist a hair tie quickly on. She clambered cautiously into her long, flowing night gown and then swiftly blew out the candle next to her mattress.

       

      Next day, Jemima arose to the sound of pitter pattering feet up ahead. She dressed into a vest and pants almost immediately and tugged on a white skirt. She eloped upstairs to find everybody doing their job and happily greeting one another. Jemima secretly went from the back to catch a better glimpse of what was happening when suddenly … BANG! The bottom part of the ship burst up and then gave an almighty POP! Everyone panicked like a damsel in distress and leapt like chickens overboard. Jemima knew what had happened. The gunpowder in the magazine had exploded! The cooking boy must have let a fuse go all the way and then..

      Everything went black.

      When she woke up, the sun was gleaming in her eyes and someone was whispering in her ear “The Esperanza’s blown up.”

      • #43394
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Sophia,

        Beautiful work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43350
      SophieK
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Please find my assignment attached. Many thanks.

      Sophie K

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      • #43396
        Beth
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        Hi Sophie,

        Fantastic work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43359
      Olivia
      Participant

      HI, Beth,

      Please find Livvie’s home work in the attachment, thanks!

      Best Regards,

      Annie C

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      • #43398
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Olivia,

        Good work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43363
      shuxuan
      Participant

      Tengyi

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      • #43400
        Beth
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        Hi Tengyi,

        Good work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43367
      imposter tze
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Please find attached the homework for Tze.

      Thanks.

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      • #43402
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Tze,

        Really stunning work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

         

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    • #43369
      efay
      Participant

      Dear Beth, please kindly find attached homework from Efay. Thanks

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      • #43404
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Efay,

        Great work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43406
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 2

      In today’s lesson we continued our work on 11+ writing, focusing today on the examiner advice “base your story around one main plot event”. Working from this basis, we completed work on the definition and nature of plot, thinking about the seven archetypes and practicing using them in the context of an exam paper. We then moved on to thinking about how to use the unexpected to create originality from within these archetypes, crucial in building authentic, gripping and interesting plot lines, and which the class used beautifully to come up with some unique and original ideas for stories. Great work today everyone, very well done for all your creative and imaginative story planning and ideas. See you next week 🙂

      Video on plot archetypes: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TGLXQM74oME&t=81s

      Homework

      hmwrj

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    • #43451
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Dear Beth,
      Here is my homework.
      I really enjoyed learning about the different types of plot.
      Jasmine

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      • #43522
        Beth
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        Hi Jasmine,

        I’m glad to hear it!
        Brilliant work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43456
      Ethan
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      My homework for this week

      Ethan

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      • #43543
        Beth
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        Hi Ethan,

        Lovely work on this, see you soon 😀

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    • #43474
      Jerry N
      Participant

      Hi Beth!

      Here is my homework for this lesson!

      Kind regards,

      Jerry😀

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      • #43545
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jerry,

        Exciting work this week, see you soon 😀

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    • #43479
      EdwardLi
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      please find my homework attached below

      from Lucas

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      • #43547
        Beth
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        Hi Lucas,

        Some nice work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below 😀

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    • #43489
      SophieK
      Participant

      Hi Beth!

      My homework is in the attachment below.

      Thanks,

      Sophie. K

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      • #43549
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Sophie,

        Wonderful work, see you soon 😀

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    • #43491
      efay
      Participant

      Dear Beth,

      Please kindly find attached Efay’s week 2 homework. Thank you.

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      • #43551
        Beth
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        Hi Efay,

        Nice work this week, see you soon 😀

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    • #43495
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Thanks for the lesson.

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      • #43553
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Victor,

        You’re welcome!
        Lovely work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43497
      imposter tze
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Attached is the homework for Tze.

      Thanks.

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      • #43555
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Tze,

        Beautiful work on this, your feedback is below 😀

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    • #43514
      Olivia
      Participant

      Hi,

      Please find Livvie’s homework in the attachment, thanks!

      Best Regards

      Annie C.

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      • #43557
        Beth
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        Hi Olivia,

        Wonderful work this week, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43518
      SophiaG
      Participant

      We hurtled through the dark, mountain formed tunnels in our heavily packed camper van. The sounds of the road rattled in our ears as we bounced on our seats. We were on the way to see aunty Lota. She is possibly the nicest person ever and I was thrilled to go and see her. The fact that we had to very rarely see her didn’t bother us at all. We had loaded me and my four brothers onto the van with a few packs of gum for the rising altitude on the bumpy road. It takes such a long time I packed my ruffled comics, needy stitching and my raisins. I could live like this, as long as my brothers didn’t so terribly irritate me.

      As soon as I saw aunty’s little house, I basically dropped my jaw. She had changed it so simplistically yet so stylishly you couldn’t even see the difference. Little bonsai trees here and there, a drop of gleaming camellias and best of all, the garden gave me a sense that a prick of honeydew had been cheerfully set upon the scene.

      That week I went to the movies with aunt, indulged some giant toffees and got a dozen different dresses. One checked, one spotted. All too soon it was time to go. I waved my hand and drove away. I looked back and saw the glossy images of joy being inked upon our hazy hearts.

      • #43560
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Sophia,

        Charming work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43519
      shuxuan
      Participant

      Hi, Beth,this is Tengyi homework, thank you so much

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      • #43562
        Beth
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        Hi Tengyi,

        Lovely work on this, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43541
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 3

      In today’s lesson we continued our work on 11+ writing, focusing today on the examiner advice “use sophisticated structure”. Working from this basis, we covered a lot of ground thinking about how structure is both small scale (sentence structure, paragraph structure, punctuation, grammar etc.) and large scale (plot structure, openings and endings etc.). We analysed an extract from Pepys’ diary for structural features, studied juxtaposition and spoke about why structuring a short story is particularly important. We considered the idea of story-writing being an exercise in architecture and spoke briefly about complex punctuation and how to use it to interesting effect (i.e. using dashes in a character’s speech to suggest anxiety “I- I- um- I guess not…” or using long sentences with lots of commas to increase the pace of the action). The class did brilliantly today, taking on board lots of complicated ideas with a fantastic focus and creative thinking. Amazing work class, well done and keep it up 🙂

      Homework video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wv5bPHwihl8&t=176s

      Juxtaposition video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4KXVPS3FYkQ

      There are punctuation revision sheets on the PowerPoint to help you too!

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #43661
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 4

      In today’s lesson we focused on figurative language, following the examiner’s advice about using it carefully and thinking about how to expand our knowledge of more high level techniques. We started by completing work on metaphor, discussing how to allude to certain connotations and link two otherwise unrelated topics with figurative language (i.e., insects and the eyes). We then moved on to thinking about the purpose of figurative language and the students completed work on three high-level advanced techniques: allusion, allegory and motif. Wonderful ideas today everyone, particularly with your figurative writing earlier on in the class; well done & have a lovely week! 🙂

      Khan Academy video we watched: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lzKj-bLvrYQ

      Homework

      hmwrk

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    • #43682
      efay
      Participant

      Hi Beth, Efay’s homework for week 4. Thanks.

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      • #43738
        Beth
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        Hi Efay,

        Amazing work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43687
      EdwardLi
      Participant

      to Beth

      please find my writing attached in a word doc

       

       

      from Lucas
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      • #43740
        Beth
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        Hi Lucas,

        Nice work this week,  I’ve attached  your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43690
      Victor
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      Hi Beth,

      My writing is attached. Thanks for the lesson.

       

      Regards

      Victor

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      • #43747
        Beth
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        Hi Victor,

        You’re welcome!

        Fab work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43692
      shuxuan
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      Hi, Beth,this is Tengyi homework

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      • #43749
        Beth
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        Hi Tengyi,

        Some good work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43706
      SophieK
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      My homework is in the file below

      Sophie K

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      • #43760
        Beth
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        Hi Sophie,

        Gorgeous work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43712
      Jasmine
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      <p style=”text-align: left;”>Hi Beth,</p>
      Thanks for the interesting lesson. My technique what allusions.

      Jasmine

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      • #43762
        Beth
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        Hi Jasmine,

        You’re welcome!

        Amazing work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43722
      imposter tze
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      Hi Beth,

      Please find attached Tze’s homework.

      Thanks.

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      • #43811
        Beth
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        Hi Tze,

        Fab work, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43724
      Jerry N
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      Hi Beth,

      Here is my Homework!

      Thanks!

      Jerry

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      • #43813
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jerry,

        Gorgeous work, I’ve  attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43759
      SophiaG
      Participant

      I silently trekked up the corridor, dimly lit and suspicious. I clutched my magical charm,  almost wishing to come out of this horrendous abyss. My head was like a whirl-wind. Would I defeat the ‘Esmo’ or be crunched into pieces? Would I even come out again? As I approached the arena, my forehead was as wet as a pool. Large drops fell down on my ripped, massacred and scorched skirt.

      One thought passed briefly through my mind. Surely my sword would protect me but now, thoughts or even dreams were useless. However tired I was I had to fight. I summoned – like a Genie- all the drips of energy and valiantly left in me. I thrust up my fists but at that very moment the ‘Esmo’ arrived…

      It was large and menacing , its hair fire – ashes from hell. Its claws were enough to make a man shriek. Its teeth were decaying, slugs in a mouth. It was as tall as five grown men standing on each others heads but most mortifying were the fallen angels wings. Then the battle started…

      The beast was infinitely worse than smog. It swung me around mercilessly, apprising of my torture and agony. I was like a football, being tossed by a towering brute. Just then, when I was almost dying my sword sprung out to save me. At that, the beast snarled out defiantly, but it was too late…

      My righteous sword had sliced the beast, its black shrivelled heart had gone forever. Suddenly, the harsh sun beating down on us stopped, and a colourful fountain eroded in its place.

       

       

       

      • #43815
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Sophia,

        Exciting work, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43764
      SophieK
      Participant

      Hi Beth

      Here is my homework for week 5. Sorry I was absent.

      Sophie K

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      • #43817
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Sophie,

        No worries!
        Great work on this, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43785
      Beth
      Participant

      Summary for Lesson 5

      In today’s class we focused on thinking creatively, looking at methods and tactics that the students can use to help them ‘think outside the box’. We began with our work on metaphor before moving on to the criteria attached to this week’s paper that advised the students of what the examiner was expecting from their work. We then began planning a story as suggested by the exam prompt. The students then had to take their story and morph it, using several advanced narrative devices (unreliable narrator, breaking the 4th wall, perspective of an innocent) to make their writing a little more unusual. They then had to think about writing constraints such as writing in future tense, 2nd person or backward to help push their imagination even futher. Everyone worked gorgeously today and came up with some really fantastically creative responses- lovely ideas and brainstorming guys. I can’t wait to read your responses! 🙂

      Writing Constraints Ideas: https://medium.com/writers-on-writing/constraints-in-creativity-are-they-a-good-thing-30720b182222

      Homework

      hmwr

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    • #43864
      Jasmine
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      There is my homework for lesson 5. Journeys are so fun to write!

      I got slightly carried away an wrote a little too much, but couldn’t find a way to edit it.

      Jasmine 😀

       

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      • #43894
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jasmine,

        I’m so glad you enjoyed writing this!

        Fab work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43870
      Victor
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      My homework is attached. Thanks.

       

      Regards

      Victor

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      • #43896
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Victor,

        Super  work this week, I’ve attached your feedback below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43874
      SophiaG
      Participant

      Marianne took to piano like an eagle takes to the sky. Everyone thought she would quit within the month. She didn’t. They knew her work was 24/7 as it was hard, gruelling practice, no time spare for rest.

       

      The keyboard seemed alien to the touch, something plucked out of a mythical tale. Marianne thought to herself “I can learn this!” forbidding bad emotions towards the piano in her concentrated, focused, brilliant mind.

       

      Each mistake, each falter was a new step towards achieving her dream and whilst others thought it useless Marianne treasured her learning like an emperor treasured his gems (You get the idea, don’t you?).

       

      Day by day, week by week, Marianne grew stronger and stronger at piano until it became her rock, her ally to step on faster and faster. A change started to show. At school, a quieter, more focused child. In music class, her better scales and rhythm amazed the teachers. Nobody noticed but Marianne was  improving (you imagine this, I assume).

       

      After the magic started, Marianne played perfectly, not a single mistake to be found. No longer a feeble pawn to the piano, but the piano was her brick, her foundation to greatness. She cherished her gift like a candy apple in autumn.

       

      So you can see here that practice makes perfect. Never give up, try your hardest to achieve whatever it is you’re doing.

      • #43898
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Sophia,

        Charming work this week, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43875
      Jerry N
      Participant

      Hello Beth,

      Here my homework!

      Jerry

      P.S. It a horror story!😈

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      • #43900
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Jerry,

        Fab work this week, your feedback is below. See you 😀

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    • #43877
      Olivia
      Participant

      HI,

       

      Please find Livvie’s homework in the attachment, thanks!

      Best Regards,

      Annie C.

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      • #43902
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi Olivia,

        Imaginative work this week, your feedback is below. See you soon 😀

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    • #43879
      efay
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      Efay’s week 5 homework. Thank you.

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    • #43881
      Ethan
      Participant

      Hi Beth,

      This is my homework for the week.

      Ethan

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    • #43883
      Ethan
      Participant

      for week 4

    • #43892
      Olivia
      Participant

      HI, Beth,

      sorry, this is Livvie’s homework for this week.

       

      Best Regards,

      Annie C.

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      • #43904
        Beth
        Participant

        Hi, I’ve marked Olivia’s homework and uploaded in on your comment above, it should be around 4 posts up the forum 😀

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