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    • #9874
      VMWEdu
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    • #9878
      Marnie
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      Very well done today, everyone! There were some fantastic contributions and thinking ‘outside of the box’, where all of you had interesting examples of heroes/heroines and villains, as well as a variety of opinions! Attached is the PowerPoint from today’s lesson, where the final slide outlines the homework, which is to describe your very own hero/heroine or villain. Remember to look at the slide before the homework slide, to see which techniques you could use to make your writing even more exciting and imaginative.  Happy writing everyone, and see you next week 🙂

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    • #10052
      Candice
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      This is my homework:)

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      • #10099
        Marnie
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        Attached is your marked description- well done, Candice! 🙂

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    • #10091
      SofiaL
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      My dad is a great hero to me. Even if he doesn’t do anything special in his everyday job, I admire him a lot. He is a businessman who helps to make sale petroleum. My dad was always the image of hero’s. When I heard the song not all hero’s wear capes, I was very touched.

      My father does not usually show his feeling. He might be strict and serious when he is at work, but I know that he loves me, and I can feel his love in every movement and every sight. He is not used to cuddling me every day, however, when he does it once a week or so it is clear that these actions are extremely sincere and come from the big heart of my father. Every single time he gives me a cuddle, I feel overwhelmed with love and his attention. And these are the most precious moments of our relationships with my father.

      This is my hero the way I see him. This is the hero I love so much!  And it is the only thing which matters! I have the strong understanding that there are no perfect people in the Earth; however, my father is perfect for me. Seeing his confidence in me some day I want to make him proud. I thank God every day for giving me such a loving and caring father. Whenever I need his help, he is always free timed for me. He is like a hero to me. He is a funny, cool, adventurous and smart human being. This is my hero — my father.

      • #10101
        Marnie
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        Attached is a marked copy of your work- well done, Sofia! 🙂

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    • #10113
      Marnie
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      Well done today, everyone! I was very impressed with your insight and ideas surrounding the fantasy genre- keep up the enthusiasm! Attached is the PowerPoint from today’s lesson, as well as the homework details on the last slide. Remember to think about how to effectively use similes, metaphors and personification, and how to make your fantasy action scene as imaginative as possible through fascinating characters, as well as setting. Have a lovely week and I’ll see you next Saturday 🙂

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    • #10194
      Candice
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      Attached below is my homework.
      Enjoy 🙂

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      • #10278
        Marnie
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        Attached is a marked copy of your homework- well done again Candice 🙂

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    • #10238
      SofiaL
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      Once there lived a nobleman who had three sons, two of whom were comely and clever youths, but the other a natural fool, named Jack, who was generally engaged with the sheep: he was dressed in a parti-coloured coat, and a steeple-crowned hat with a tassel, as became his condition.
      Now the King of Canterbury had a beautiful daughter, who was distinguished by her great ingenuity and wit, and he issued a decree that whoever should answer three questions put to him by the princess should have her in marriage, and be heir to the crown at his decease. Shortly after this decree was published, news of it reached the ears of the nobleman’s sons, and the two clever ones determined to have a trial, but they were sadly at a loss to prevent their idiot brother from going with them.
      They could not, by any means, get rid of him, and were compelled at length to let Jack accompany them. They had not gone far, before Jack shrieked with laughter, saying, “I’ve found an egg.” “Put it in your pocket,” said the brothers. A little while afterwards, he burst out into another fit of laughter on finding a crooked hazel stick, which he also put in his pocket; and a third time he again laughed extravagantly because he found a nut. That also was put with his other treasures.
      When they arrived at the palace, they were immediately admitted on mentioning the nature of their business, and were ushered into a room where the princess and her suite were sitting. Jack, who never stood on ceremony, bawled out, “What a troop of fair ladies we’ve got here!”
      “Yes,” said the princess, “we are fair ladies, for we carry fire in our bosoms.”
      “Do you?” said Jack, “then cook me an egg,” pulling out the egg from his pocket.
      When he reached the palace, he knocked at the gate loudly with his crook, and having mentioned the object of his visit, he was immediately conducted to the hall where the king’s daughter sat ready prepared to see her lovers. He was placed in a luxurious chair, and rich wines and spices were set before him, and all sorts of delicate meats. Jack, unused to such fare, ate and drank plentifully, so that he was nearly dozing before midnight.
      “Oh, shepherd,” said the lady, “I have caught you napping!”
      ‘No, I have been fishing
      “No matter what that, I have been fishing in my pocket, and have just caught one.”
      “Oh my!” said she, “let me see it.”
      The shepherd slyly drew the fish out of his pocket and pretending to have caught it, showed it her, and she declared it was the finest she ever saw.
      About half an hour afterwards, she said, “Shepherd, do you think you could get me one more?”
      He replied, “Perhaps I may, when I have baited my hook;” and after a little while he brought out another, which was finer than the first, and the princess was so happy that she let him to leave,  morning the princess told the king,  astonishment, that Jack must not be beheaded, for he had been fishing in the hall all night; but when he heard how Jack had caught such beautiful fish out of his pocket, he asked him to catch one in his own.

      • #11040
        SofiaL
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        I’m resubmitting week 2’s homework of Fantasy Fiction, hope it could be marked, Thank you.

        A child named Lucy came down town once when she was riding her little pony they rode throw the field and came across a long wide river, Lucy got of her pony. She walked closer to other water and she reached down to the water surface,she quickly put her hand in the water, she reached deeper. Her body had no balance for a while, when she got better, she was thrown in another world. ‘Who are you my dear?’ asked a voice, she stood up and waved her head furiously. ‘Lucy, Lucy Haderton. And I just want to ask why is it so cold and it is October, shouldn’t it be hot and cool now?’

        ‘Oh, come on girl don’t be too cold, get on the bus, and I will explain to you.’
        Lucy got on the bus as quickly as she possibly can.

        The old man began to explain; ‘there was a kingdom that was in heavenly snow, n everything was silent. Winter, at the beginning of his out of a natural step – cold wind. Night had fallen, and the wind, like a big omen, wandered over the snow-fields before every house in the town, growling furiously and gasping wearily. The bare branches trembled in the gate, and waved. Only one person can save the world, a human not an old one.’

        The old men asked Lucy where would they drop her she said she did not know, lastly, they dropped her at the garden. Lucy pushed aside the garden gate, she walked, she saw beautiful flowers with faces on it she pats the flowers. Suddenly she heard a voice on the top of her head it said ‘get of that rose’. Lucy looked up she saw a woman she never saw, a woman who had the hair of snowflakes, who had eyes that where cold. To be continued……

        • #11084
          Marnie
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          Attached is your homework- well done, Sofia 🙂

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    • #10264
      Yuexi
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      Hi ,I am really sorry that I posted my writing late, because I posted it in the wrong place.

      Here it is:

       

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      • #10281
        Marnie
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        Attached is a marked copy of your work- well done, Yuexi!

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    • #10268
      Yuexi
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      Hello

      Here is my writing for lesson 2

       

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      • #10283
        Marnie
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        Attached is a marked copy of your work- good work, Yuexi!

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    • #10272
      Vivienne
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      My Heroine

      In our daily lives, there are a lot of different    people, nice people, evil people. The one that really stands out is an heroine. A  heroine doesn’t necessarily need to be someone who wears a cape  and has magical powers, it could be anything or anyone who is kind.

      The heroine in my heart is a character from “Twist of gold” by Micheal Morpurgo, he is a person from the British army. Although we might not know what his name is but we do know one thing, he is a kind and generous man. He helped a poor family in a even poorer village by giving biscuits to the poor. Maybe it didn’t save the mother but it saved Sean and Annie. I understand now why it is called “Twist of gold”, I guess it’s because the main characters of the book’s family background changed from poor to wealthy.

      This soldier is a very kind and stern character, he feed the poor O’brien’s and care for them…but he only helps a little for he and then are enemies. I know it is very hard to become friend to your countries enemies but if you can you would have a kind and warm-hearted living being.

      I  think we should all have a heart like this soldier.

       

       

      • #10285
        Marnie
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        Attached is your work from week one- well done, Tongtong!

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    • #10273
      Vivienne
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      My dream.

      I was in a castle just sitting by an oven, knitting some weird hats. Just then, I fell asleep. I dreamt that I was still in my castle sleeping but when I opened my eyes everything was different, there were people wearing hats in the shape of a star, a water bottle, a swimming pool, a computer, a bird, everything! I wasn’t dreaming, I was really standing somewhere different. I……Iwas standing in my castle in the olden days! I looked at myself and found that I no longer was wearing a sky jumper but instead robes made of silk and a hat in the shape of the earth. In my hands was a pair of chopsticks. No! Wands!

      I shouted a random spell, ” Expelliarmus!” A red line shooted out of my wand and hit the person opposite me. His wand flew out of his hand into mine. I was so surprised and even lost balance, the person opposite me smirked and flew towards me and snatched his wand back. I screamed another spell, “Crucio!” another red light shot out of my wand and a “yelp” echoed in the castle. The villain flew to the ceiling so that he was out of my reach.

      Thanks to my eyesight, I caught sight of a broomstick in the corner of the room, although it was short but it, still was very fast. I ran to it just in time so I missed my enemies hit. I jumped onto the broomstick and flew towards Oliv, he backed away and I nearly hit the with just one millimeter till I touch it. “You will never kill me!” he cried and then vanished. The moment he vanished I fell asleep and everything felt familiar again, I was back to the present.

      • #10287
        Marnie
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        Well done, Tongtong! Attached is a marked version of your fantasy homework 🙂

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    • #10276
      Marnie
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      Well done today, everyone! We had some high-level discussions and debates concerning journalistic writing, where everyone had very fascinating and relevant points to add! I have attached the PowerPoint, with some of our discussion points added in to the mind-maps on the features/techniques of articles and opinion pieces. The homework is explained on the last slide- remember to look back through the PowerPoint if you need to go over the key differences between the two pieces of writing. Well done again, and see you in a fortnight in the new year! 🙂

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    • #10393
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Happy new year!🎆

      Here is my homework:

      ; )

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      • #10765
        Marnie
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        Attached is your homework- well done, Yuexi! (And a happy new year to you too:) )

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    • #10812
      Marnie
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      Fantastic work today everyone on some tricky techniques! Everyone had great ideas and grappled with the new topic really well! Attached is the PowerPoint and remember to look back to previous slides to help you for this week’s homework. If you have any further questions, please write them down at the bottom of your homework, and I can help you. Well done and have a great week, everyone! 🙂

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    • #10932
      SofiaL
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      Penguins are birds that cannot fly. The name “Penguin” comes from the Welsh terms “pen” meaning head and “gwyn” meaning white.There are 17 species, an empire penguin is the largest penguin on Earth. A fulling grown empire penguin is over a meter tall, they weigh 40 kilograms.Penguins have black and white feathers and they waddle when they walk.Penguins spend most of their time in the water searching for food. They cannot swim backwards, however. A penguin can hold its breath underwater for about 6 minutes. Penguins don’t live near freshwater – at least none that isn’t frozen. Instead they drink salt water. They have a special gland in their bodies that takes the salt out of the water they drink and pushes it out of grooves in their bill, so the water they are actually drinking is filtered.They also have a avocado-shaped body.Penguins are birds that can swim.During the mate season penguins head for special places on the shore.At there the mother lay there eggs,after that the father penguin put the egg on top of his feet,under a special kind of body part called the brood pouch.

      Most penguins lay two eggs every year but emperor penguins lay only one egg. After the penguins meet, the mother lays her egg and soon goes in the ocean to eat. The father and mother take turns keeping the eggs warm, and the baby hatchs.The time one parent is alone with the eggs or chicks and going hungry may be weeks or months depending on what kind of penguin they are.

      • #10951
        SofiaL
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        Please ignore first draft. here is my second draft. Mark this version please. Thank you.

        Penguins are birds that cannot fly. There are 17 species, an empire penguin is the largest penguin on Earth. A fulling grown empire penguin is about a meter tall, they weigh 40 kilograms.Penguins have black and white feathers and they waddle when they walk.Penguins spend most of their time in the water searching for food. A penguin can hold its breath underwater for about 6 minutes. Instead they drink salty water. We might question the penguin, the water in the ocean is salty, but do they still drink it? The answer is yes, let think what else would they be able to drink?Penguin has a special part of body that can pull the salt out and let the fresh water in.
        Penguins are birds that can swim.Penguins spend most of their time in the water searching for food. A penguin can hold its breath underwater for about 6 minutes. During the mate season penguins head for special places on the shore.At there the mother lay eggs, penguins usually lay more than one egg but an empire penguin lay one egg.After that the father penguin put the egg on top of his feet, under a special kind of body part called the brood pouch.While the father is keeping the egg warm, the mother goes to catch fish in the ocean.This is called the sharing work. We might as the father penguin another question: during this time(the mother out), don they eat anything? the father have to stay with the child no matter what: they stay without food, so they might lost a lot of Thierry body weight. By August , the little egg is about to hatch. The mother come back to see her baby.And the speeding wheel comes back to the mother, then the father goes to fish.

        • #10995
          Marnie
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          Attached is your homework (second draft)- good work, Sofia!

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    • #10965
      Yuexi
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      Here is my homework

      thanks alot.

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      • #10997
        Marnie
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        Attached is your homework- great work, Yuexi 🙂

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    • #10985
      Candice
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      • #11007
        Marnie
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        Attached is a marked copy of your work- well done, Candice! 🙂

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    • #11009
      Feite
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      My week 4 homework

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      • #11015
        Marnie
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        Hello, Feite! Please could you copy and paste your homework into the box on this page? 🙂 Unfortunately, the document you sent is incompatible with my computer and is not showing me your homework! Thank you 🙂

        • #11155
          Feite
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          FeiteParticipant
          Zebras are mammals because they have fur, they are warm blood and they make milk for their babys. Zebras are herbivores and eat mostly grass, shrubs and barks. When there is no grass to eat they travel to another place for grass. They live in Africa. They live in large herd to keep safe from predators. Zebras have great hearing and eyesight and can run speed up to 65km per hour. They also have powerful kicks to avoid predators. The strips on a zebra are unique because they are a little bit different. The black and white strips can help them camouflag. People have wondered for a long time if Zebras are black with white strips or white with black strips. It may seem like most zebras have dark skin under their strips so we think they have black skin with white strip.

    • #11013
      Marnie
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      Well done today, everyone! This has been one of the trickiest topics and you all handled it with such enthusiasm and thoughtfulness 🙂 The homework is on the final slide- there is no need to make a shape (like a rainbow, or a gingerbread man!), but if you are able to experiment with the line length, the spaces in-between words and your word choices, that would be great! Remember to look at the last slide’s example to help you out if you get stuck. Happy writing and see you all next week 🙂

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    • #11122
      Feite
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      Zebras are mammals because they have fur, they are warm blood and they make milk for their babys. Zebras are herbivores and eat mostly grass, shrubs and barks. When there is no grass to eat they travel to another place for grass. They live in Africa. They live in large herd to keep safe from predators. Zebras have great hearing and eyesight and can run speed up to 65km per hour. They also have powerful kicks to avoid predators. The strips on a zebra are unique because they are a little bit different. The black and white strips can help them camouflag. People have wondered for a long time if Zebras are black with white strips or white with black strips. It may seem like most zebras have dark skin under their strips so we think they have black skin with white strip.

      • #11172
        Marnie
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        Good work, Feite 🙂

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    • #11165
      SofiaL
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      Please see attached homework.

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      • #11176
        Marnie
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        Attached is your marked homework- very good, Sofia!

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    • #11167
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Here is my home work .

      If you have trouble reading it, please tell me on

      https://vmwedu.com

      thanks a lot.

      • #11174
        Marnie
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        Attached is your marked homework- very good, Sofia! 🙂

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        • #11180
          Marnie
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          Apologies Yuexi- you can ignore this attachment 🙂

    • #11168
      Yuexi
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      oops

      Here it is.

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      • #11181
        Marnie
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        Great work this week, Yuexi! You may have sent the same poem twice, so I’ve just marked the two which I’ve been sent 🙂 Well done!

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    • #11187
      Feite
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      My week 5 homework

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      • #11193
        Feite
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        Please use this one.

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    • #11189
      Feite
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      Week 5 homework

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      • #11195
        Feite
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        Please use this one

         

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        • #11199
          Marnie
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          Attached is your homework- good work, Feite! 🙂

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    • #11191
      Feite
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      Please use this one if the front one couldn’t be open

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    • #11201
      Marnie
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      Great work today, everyone! We tackled some trickier language analysis today, as well as discussing the role of the narrator and key ideas within detective novels. Attached is today’s PowerPoint- make sure to go over previous slides if you need any inspiration for the homework task. Good luck and have a great week 🙂

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    • #11275
      SofiaL
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      The team of detectives and agent handed their information and blood specimen collection to the police officer.

      ‘So, it is true that there once lived a man called Bob Haguerd?’asked the police.

      ‘Yes, the investigation of evidence are the finger print and the blood type that was left on the floor and walls.’ said an agent.

      ‘OK, then why don’t we go to the place where the murder is done together tonight, to check around again’ regimental police.

      They all agreed. Let’s zoom in to tonight

      My first impression of the house was hunted. It had a wide garden, and a white blocked gate. The lambs in the garden we’re not all lights up Some of them were broken and we’re making Ziggy a sound I looked at the column It was kind of broken and I look on the other side the other side ‘s column was with blood stakes I thought ‘why would it be only one column that had blood stains not two of them’. then I looked closer at the fingerprint I certainly realized that it is not the same one. I thought ‘maybe the murderer had person who is been murdered put a handprint on the column to make sure it wasn’t him’ pushed the gate open and walked slowly touching the column.

      My assistant and I stepped into the room the first thing told Richard (my assistant) me was we are going to hide behind this big closet if danger come. After a few looks of the room they heard footsteps coming today but far far away I pushed Richard behind the closet closed the door and went behind the closet.

      • #11364
        Marnie
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        Attached is your homework- good work, Sofia!

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    • #11301
      Vivienne
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      “Alliteration, sibilance, assonance”

      I like snakes, they come in different colors and shapes. There are different types of those slithering snakes, we know around 3000. Only about 200 of them can kill you. Snakes have forked tongues, they flick then in different directions to smell food or sense danger.

      Snakes slithers and hisses. When flick their tongues into different directions they make hissing noise. Snakes have slick, smooth and also a little slimy belly scales. If their scales were maybe spiky or dry then their speed would be much slower. A snake usually travels  about 5m per minute.

      Snakes lifespan , depends on their size and type. Boas live for 25 to around 50 years; many colubrids live between 15-25years and smaller species live for 5-10 years.

      My favorite snake is the “King Cobra”. It is usually two-colored and is striped, their snakes are rather large and is normally black, brown or yellow.King cobras muzzles are rounded and their tongues are black, it has two fangs and there to five maxillae teeth in the lower jaw. Its diet is mainly on other snakes—venomous and nonvenomous, they also feed on lizards, eggs and small mammals. They’re the only type of snakes which build nest for their eggs, which they will guard there forever until the eggs hatch. The King Cobra is very venomous, their venom can kill a human in around 45 minutes!

      The fastest snake also will be the deadliest. The “ Black Mamba” can move at the speed of 5.5 meters per second!!!!!! Its bite could kill people in less than thirty minutes! They are skinny and not very long, their scales are usually black to white. They have eyes that you can’t say are very small and jet black pupils.

      Some people like to keep snakes as pets and they normally keep a Corn snake, California Kingsnake, Rosy Boa, Gopher Snake or the Ball Python. Although it is fun to keep snakes as pets but some snakes can die of stress related to captivity.

      • #11366
        Marnie
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        Well done, Tongtong! Attached is a marked copy 🙂

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    • #11313
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Here is my homework

      Thank you 😀

      P.S I love mysteries 🧐

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      • #11368
        Marnie
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        Well done, Yuexi! Attached is a marked copy of your work 🙂

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    • #11316
      Vivienne
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      One freezing winter, my assistant told me, a death took place in the Portland Hospital. On November 12th a patient was found dead, the doctors and nurses all calmed to be innocent and said that he might had just died of his wound on his left arm. I immediately set out to that hospital.

      Once I reached Portland, a crowd of suspects gathered around, they were all doctors and nurses who work here, they al had frightened expressions on them and a card in their hands. I walked straight in the hospital and into the office of detectives.

      An unknown voice said,” Welcome, Detective Ilan! Take a seat, take a seat! We are discussing about the coincident that happened, join us please!”

      I replied shortly, “ It was not a coincident.”

      “Why not?” everyone stood up glaring at me.

      “ Why would somebody kill another without a reason? Why, would the killer make it look as nothing has happened?”

      The unknown voice sounded once again, but this time is was cold and icy, rather than warm,” Ilan!! Do you know manners? How, why would it be on purpose…do you have any evidence? Please tell me if you do.”

      “I’ll show you rather than tell, follow me.”

      I led everyone to the room, it was big and wide, a smell of blood and death flew into our noses. It was a new smell to me but it was also sweet in a way because it also had a smell of purpose and evidence. I searched the room and found a phone, it was still recording but the screen was black before I picked it up. I stopped it from recording and started hearing it:

      “Are we there?”

      “Yes this is it, Anderson. He was the once a wanted criminal, when he went to kill the Miller’s, he wore a set of white clothes, everyone thought he was innocent and the person who found him saw that he was still alive. He was brought to here to stop the blood which was flowing out of his sleeve.”

      “I’m ready to kill”

      “3, 2, 1.”

      “ Brrnng ” a low but loud sound echoed for a few seconds and it was quiet, complete stillness.

      I let all the detectives hear this and a voice rang out, “ I still think that maybe the people in the recording might have had the wrong information, also, who were they?”

      He was right, although this recording is very real but we still don’t know who did the talking.

      • #11372
        Marnie
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        Attached is a marked copy of your work- great writing, Tongtong! 🙂

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    • #11362
      Feite
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      My homework

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      • #11370
        Marnie
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        Well done, Feite! Attached is your homework 🙂

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    • #11374
      Marnie
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      Well done today, everyone! I was impressed by your ability to answer tricky, thought-provoking questions on literal and figurative imagery- you all had very interesting, different ideas. I particularly liked our discussion on idioms! Attached also is today’s PowerPoint, where the homework is outlined on the final slide. Have fun writing, and have a great week everyone!

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    • #11455
      SofiaL
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      When Hermione was 11 she recognized herself as a witch, from this she had a brand-new knowledge of herself because she was and muggle at first. On the train, she mad drawn and Harry they quickly became close friends but first Hermione did not really like Ron, either Ron liked Hermione. They went to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. At the sorting hat, they were sorted to Gryffindor. Well, at first Hermione was cold, I mean she was a little arrogant. She was smart, the head girl of Gryffindor, top grades, so that to Ron in my opinion was a little stupid, compared to Hermione he was not the best. Not to mention that she was born a Muggle who didn’t know anything about magic, which made me wonder how did of muggle girl learn magic.

      Hermione Granger is not only a clever girl, but she is also a sensitive girl. If not, she would not be friends with Harry and Ron. The reason I say Hermione is a sensitive girl, it’s because she empathizes with her friends. The reason I said this, is because whenever Harry and wrong I’m mad at each other or they have a fight the only person that can let Harry and Ron be reconciled and become friends again like before is Hermione.

      ‘I just want to study, and with a little cleverness, and more important things — friendship and courage!’ That is what she said to herself in the first book of Harry Potter, when Harry is about to be meet Voldemort. Well, it shows us which explains that Hermione is not arrogant after being friends with Harry and Ron.

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        Marnie
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        Great work, Sofia 🙂

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    • #11513
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Here is my homework.

      Thank you ; D

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      • #11537
        Marnie
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        Great work, Yuexi! 🙂

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    • #11527
      Candice
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      My Homework Attached Below 😀

       

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      • #11535
        Marnie
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        Fantastic work, Candice 🙂

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    • #11541
      Marnie
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      Well done today, everyone! I really enjoyed hearing your thoughts on Fables, as well as the animals which you think are most effective 🙂 Attached is the PowerPoint on today’s lesson- the homework is on the final slide, and remember to go back over the rest of the slides for any inspiration. Enjoy writing, and have a great week 🙂

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    • #11543
      Candice
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      My Homework Attached Below 😀

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      • #11860
        Marnie
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        Well done, Candice! 🙂

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    • #11549
      Vivienne
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      This is my homework for last week😅🥳

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        Marnie
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        Hello Tongtong! The file type used doesn’t open correctly on my laptop, however, word would work if you’d like to send it again, or you could copy and paste it into the box here 🙂

    • #11555
      Feite
      Participant

      My homework for week 7

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        Marnie
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        Great work, Feite! 🙂

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    • #11616
      SofiaL
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      Once upon a time, there lived a very beautiful girl called Maranda, she had a very rich father. How rich? I say he was a Dutch, a butch might scare you but I tell you they are related to the royal family. One summer vacation Maranda and her father went on a cruise to go to Asia.

      On the cruise they met a black man, I mean his skin is black, he was a slave, a slave that was in pain, not only on the body but in his thoughts as well. He was pushed from the crowd. His right arm was injured being hit by the owner, his neck had scars, his legs were with blood and bruises because his owner had hit him so badly. No one wanted to help him because they thought negro people were bad and they don’t need to be respected. The girl went to help the slave without thinking, her dad was going to stop her but he didn’t get the time, the girl helped him to stand up.

      Later, Maranda’s father blames her, he says: ‘oh Maranda, I am so ashamed of you. Do you know what kind of person that man is? Oh well, I tell you he is a slave, a slave Maranda, someone like John not honest, and dirty that is what that man is! Insulting child.’

      I was surprised what Maranda responded: ‘everyone is the same. We can’t discriminate people who has different background, Father.’

      Quote from Wonder [if they can’t change how they look then it is time to change how we look at them.]

      • #11865
        Marnie
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        Great work, Sofia! 🙂

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    • #11702
      Yuexi
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      Here is my homework

      The peacock and the caterpillar
      On the quiet stream there was peacock who is always fond of himself. He rise his head like a royalty to drink and walk so beautifully (he thought so) that he looked like as if he has a aching feet and a sore neck. The peacock was also feed by the royal family and is cleaned by the maid. How proud he could be. So that peaceful peacock had already lived in the palace for TEN years and is greedy of the beauty. If there were any peacock that is or was more appealing than him, then he will use his cunning plots to stop them from getting known by the royalties.
      on the other hand, the caterpillar was just born. His mother had said to him that he shouldn’t go to the world outside or then there will be some terrible thing. So the caterpillar listened and strayed away from the others.
      Years passed, one day, when the peacock was feasting great fully with the golden flower of luck and jewels, the caterpillar was eating the crust around. He, the caterpillar couldn’t stop himself from eating all the good until he was at the peacock’s feet! Then he remembered what his mother had said to him, but just as he was about to crawl away, the peacock looked downwards and straight into the caterpillar’s eyes. First, the peacock was shocked, so he screamed :” Oh, what an innocent, ugly little creature lying besides my!” The caterpillar said, timidly:” Hello? May I just have another crunchy little snack?” The peacock pocked him with his beak and almost squished the caterpillar when the princess came to walk with him. That saved the caterpillar’s love.
      A few months later, the caterpillar turned into a charming butterfly with every color on his wings and fly so absorbing that he is a magical leave falling from the sky. In the meantime, the peacock’s feathers all fell out and had no more beauty so he was chained up and was told to be dragged back to the forest.
      The peacock felt ashamed of himself when he saw the caterpillar again.

      Thank you

      the moral  is that the beauty of royalty last short, but the beauty of live lasts forever.

    • #11703
      Yuexi
      Participant

      Oh , sorry that was my draft

    • #11704
      Yuexi
      Participant

      here it is.

      Thank you

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      • #11867
        Marnie
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        Brilliant work, Yuexi! 🙂

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    • #11874
      Marnie
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      Well done today, everyone! You all contributed fantastically well today, and it was a pleasure to hear such a wide range of insightful answers 🙂 Attached is the PowerPoint with the homework outlined on the final slide; you can choose to make the setting magical, scary, comedic- it’s your choice! Happy writing, and I shall see you next week 🙂

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    • #11941
      SofiaL
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      Once upon a time, there was a poet who did not marry in her live. She had neither husband nor children, so of course she had no grandchildren. She lived alone by the sea, and there was a faint smell of the sea when she opened the door.

      There are many strange shapes of shells on the sand, very attractive. Some are in the shape of stars some are in the shape of sheep, some are in the shape of moon.

      The sky is very blue, cloudless, the sea is shining dazzling blue, it seems that the sky and the sea are together, no one actually can recognise which are the sea, which are the sky. Standing on the shinning beach, I looked far into the distance, and saw a place where water and sky meet, faintly invisible, there were only little ships on the sea, like hanging in the air. The charming sunset spread slowly over the sea, like a mysterious coat being placed over the sky. The sea is divided into three colors, first light blue, then dark blue, and finally deep blue. The water is like a palette, mixing all kinds of blue, how beautiful! Suddenly, the sky darkened down, the distance where the water and sky meet faintly appeared a thin white line, and heard waves. I thought is the tide coming? I held my breath and looked excitedly into the distance, a delicate scent of the beach drifted on the gentle breeze.

      • #12092
        Marnie
        Participant

        Really great work, Sofia! 🙂

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    • #12103
      Marnie
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      Wonderful work today, everyone! I was very impressed with all of your perceptive comments on ‘everyday writing’, and I think you all demonstrated very attentive thinking, particularly when analysing the advert of the trainer. Attached is the PowerPoint from today, with the homework on the final slide. Thank you for another fantastic 10 weeks too- you’ve all made excellent progress and it’s a joy teaching you all! 🙂

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    • #12170
      Candice
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      Does the item have to be real?

       

      • #12379
        Marnie
        Participant

        Hello Candice! Apologies on replying so late- but it doesn’t have to be real!

    • #12358
      SofiaL
      Participant

      You want to park a car safely? If you do, try my new invention 4D car. 4D car is a very boring name, right? Well his nickname is “FIRE WHEELS”, the main reason why it is called in that fantastic name is because it’s wheels. All the specialties on the wheels.

      The wheels have 3 specialties, the first specialty is “countryside” button. This button can prevent the cars wheels to get dirty or have mud on the surface, and even sometimes if you are in rural areas, the road would be irregularity and sometimes if it’s not made of pitch, if it is made of blocks, or made of stone or other materials it would be hard to drive on, so the car maker (myself) made it special. I used a furtive material called vibration isolating pad. It will solve the problem of having driving unbalanced.

      The second advantages of the wheels, is it can turn into a “ball”. People hate parking, well my mum hate parking, grown-ups says sometime it is too narrow, or the other cars are not in their right position, so they can’t get the right position… Due to all those complains from adults I invented the “ball”. When press a keyboard on the car and then you would let your car park easily in to the right place in the parking-lot.

      The third, last but not least is the “Fire ball” This might be weird but it not only can be use in rural areas it can be used in urban areas as well It can use in everywhere. “Fire ball” is to be in a super high speed, like if the passengers on the car is sick, or has very important but the passenger is late, “Fire ball” is very necessary. The country might give you a licence to use this car.
      This is my 4D car.

      • #12380
        Marnie
        Participant

        Fantastic work, Sofia! 🙂

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