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Kensuke’s Kingdom
The butterfly Lion
VarJak Paw
The Secret Garden
Black Beauty
Watership Down
Little Prince
Journey to the River Sea
The Call of the Wild
Thief Lord
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Beautiful work, Alina!
This is an absolutely stunning piece of writing. You have done a brilliant job of using the new words that we learned in this lesson and have produced a really descriptive and highly effective piece of writing.
To improve, you could also try using some other techniques such as metaphor and similes.
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Wonderful work, Alina!
This is a lovely part of the book to select as your favourite and you have done a great job of describing why you enjoy it so much. Your use of adjectives is particularly impressive!
To make this even better, you could also try to find some quotes from the text to help support your answer.
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Black Beauty Lesson 1
I felt very sad when Black Beauty was taken from his mother, because my mum went away from me before and everything I felt like everything was wrong. I also felt very angry and unfair, because why can’t Black Beauty just stay with his mother forever? Why can’t Beauty run free in the wild? Why does he have to work for peoples? I felt very angry.
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Black Beauty Lesson 1
I felt really sad when Black Beauty was taken from his mother, because my mother left me with my father and brother once, and I felt like erverything was different without my mother. I also felt very unfair and angry, because why can’t Black Beauty stay with his mother forever? Why does Beauty have to work for peoples? Why can’t he run freely in the wild?
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Black Beauty Lesson 1
I felt really sad when Black Beauty was taken from his mother, because my mother left me with my father and brother once, and I felt like erverything was different without my mother. I also felt very unfair and angry, because why can’t Black Beauty stay with his mother forever? Why does Beauty have to work for peoples? Why can’t he run freely in the wild?
Jessie
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Lovely work, Jessie!
This is a really strong response to the homework question. You have demonstrated a wonderful knowledge of the book and your use of questions really makes the reader think deeply about what you are discussing.
To improve, you could take some quotes from the story to help support your answer.
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Diary entry
In summer On hot sunney Monday my master let me sleep and rest,because he said that he is going to let me rest on Sunday and Monday,I was very happy
On Tuesday my master rid me to a friends house and let me play with the horse there,I was very happy.I really like him ,he is also really nice to me.
On Wednesday my master rid me to a big market and bought me lots of good food,and at night he gives me a big delicious meal.On Thursday I was sick and he gived me lots of good food and made me well in the Saturday.On Saturday my master rod me to a train station and we went to anther big and nice country and stayed there entli the winter came.-
Brilliant work, Pipi!
This is a fantastic diary entry. You have captured Beauty’s voice wonderfully and have done an excellent job of taking inspiration from the story.
To improve, make sure you double-check spelling, punctuation, and capital letters (i.e. ‘In summer On hot sunney Monday’ > ‘In summer, on a hot sunny Monday’).
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My favourite part of this book
My favourite part of this book is when Captain told black beauty his story.Because I think that it is really interesting and really cool,and it made me more like to read this story. -
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How do I feel when the rabbits have to leave the warren.
Personally, when the rabbits left the warren, I thought that it was true ––– there was danger coming. Unexpectedly, the author didn’t write about the danger coming to where they have left. Instead, he kept talking about what Hazel and the other rabbits did after leaving the warren. At that time, I changed what I thought, I thought that maybe nothing would happed the the warren, I thought that Fiver was wrong.
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Rolly said they are arist and if they get back,they they woulI feel really happy.Becuase Captain d colt.So they need to go and leave the worren so that Captain Rolly wouldn’t catch them,and also at the first part of this story it tells you that Fiver’s feellings are right.So if they don’t leave then they will be hurt by the dangerous that Fiver feel’s.
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Today was the semi-finals of the Olympic race and Max was feeling demoralise. His very rude brother (Sam) knew that he was feeling like this so he started teasing him. At the race Max started to fidget but when the race started,a runner named Bob had bamboozle him.Now Max was in last place and he was very intrepid but then the first place runner did something weird to Max and he was very perplexed. Suddenly Max pushed himself and surprisingly he was in second place!!!!! After that exhausting day Max went home and relaxed .
THE END
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Here is my homework. Thank you
Victor fell down onto the floor of the quarry , he needed recourse , right now! He was playing tag around the quarry pit his dad and other colleagues worked in, his friend bamboozled him and dodged but Victor tripped and descended down into the tunnel. Now he sat up and waited for help, but then he began to be restive and fidgeted with the rocks. Just as he was about to be demoralized, there came his intrepid hero, his father!
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Today was a blustery day and Mason was minding his own business walking on the stone path when he suddenly came across a stranger.His mum told him to never talk to them so he kept walking.As he did that the stranger followed him and he had a cunning smile but Mason was courageous so he wasn’t scared.After a few minutes he started to feel very nervous so he started to scurry on the path but he never got away from that stranger so now he started to feel very scared.As fast as a cheetah Mason was running back to his house and before he knew it he was home but he saw the stranger running after him so he opened the front door and he was at home “Finally I got protection!” he said.After a few days he knew why the stranger was following him he was trying to KIDNAP Mason so now Mason would go with his mum everywhere she went so he wouldn’t get followed by a stranger ever again.
THE END
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My favourite part of this book is when hazle and others are getting out of the warren because it makes me really excited what is going to happen in the future so I really like that part and it is really cool I really like it!
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Today was a blustery day and Ethan was going to be a volcanologist so that is what he settled with,after a few days later Ethan was sent to examine an active volcano so that’s what he did.As he was examining the volcano he came across flaring lava he knew not to go too close or he might suddenly fall in so he took two big steps back.As he took his first step back he saw another volcanologist but this person was very close to the boiling lava, so Ethan called out to him that he might fall in the lava but the other volcanologist took no notice from him, now Ethan was getting enraged.Ethan kept calling out to the other volcanologist but it was always the same progress the other volcanologist was not listing,so eventually Ethan went home.When Ethan was home he was starving and thirsty but he had plentiful of food and drinks so after eating lots of veggies and a little bit of chicken he was no longer starving.After eating all of his food he got some water out of the fridge and gulped it all down it was time for bed so he went to his cozy,warm bed and slept.Ethan’s day had gone by.
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Great work, Yilin!
This is a really exciting and adventurous story. You have done a brilliant job of using the vocabulary and you set the scene incredibly well. I particularly love your detailed description of the weather.
To improve, you could think about adding in some dialogue to show exactly what they are saying to each other and how.
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Maybe is because that Adams books are all have sad endings.So that is why that Adms choose Hazle to die.Or maybe is because that Adam made Hazle die in purpus so some people want to read more of his book.
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Beautiful work, Violet!
This is a wonderful story and you have done a marvellous job of using the new vocabulary. I am particularly impressed by how well you create your characters and how clearly you get across their emotions.
To make it even better, you could mention what she plans to do when she gets back home.
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Brilliant work, Annie!
Your story is incredibly interesting and really holds the reader’s attention. I love the detail you go into in describing Penny; you really make the reader feel for her and want things to go her way!
To make this even better, you could spend some more time describing what the school is like (i.e. what can you see/hear/smell in the school?).
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My favourite part of this book is when
Maia and mrs Carter arrives to the island and met the tween I think is interesting because from now on Maia
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Good job, Violet!
This is a very interesting part of the story to choose as your favorite and your response to it is intriguing. Watch out for the spelling ‘house’, not ‘horse’.
To improve, try to give a bit more information about why you do not like the twins (i.e. what is it about them that is so dislikable).
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Beautiful work, Annie!
This is a really creative and exciting story. You have done an excellent job at using the vocabulary. Also, I really love the message that you end on- it is very positive and uplifting!
To improve, you could add in a little dialogue to show what the students sound like and how they interact with one another.
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