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    • #3616
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Aims of the lessons
      ★ Equip students with invaluable writing skills .
      ★ Teach students how to produce different forms of creative writing (i.e. c reative fiction, analytical
      writing, letters ).
      ★ Excite and encourage students to continue reading and practicing their writing skills.
      ★ Engage students in class discussion to build both the skills as an individual and as a team
      player.
      ★ Offer students personalised feedback and help them build their strengths and improve their
      weaknesses .

      10 Lesson Plans

    • #3619
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Summary for Lesson 1

      What did we cover
      – Introduced the course and each other
      – Discussed the different forms of writing
      – Discussed and worked on structuring a piece of writing
      – Discussed and worked on making writing more interesting (i.e. using adverbs,
      adjectives)
      – Discussed and worked on ‘Show not tell’

      Class report
      It was brilliant to meet the students this morning and begin our first lesson of the course. We
      began by discussing what we will cover over the next 10 weeks, how the lessons will work,
      and then did a round of introductions. It was great to get to know the students a little more and
      find out about what their favourite books were.
      We then moved on to discussing what different forms of writing there are (i.e. fiction and
      non-fiction) and why it is so important to know your audience. The students had a solid
      understanding in these areas, which was encouraging to see.
      Next, we looked at how to structure a story. As well as completing some tasks which required
      the students matching a sentence to the structure block it belonged to, we also came up with
      our own ideas of how to open and end a story. This early exercise showed the students
      creativity which will be invaluable as we go forward in our lessons.
      We then thought about how writers make their stories interesting and focussed on using
      adjectives and adverbs. The students very much enjoyed coming up with different descriptive
      words and produced some wonderful sentences.
      To finish, we did an exercise on ‘show not tell’ and looked at how writing can be made more
      descriptive by describing how emotions manifest themselves in a character rather than just
      stating how they feel.
      This was an incredibly encouraging first lesson and I am very excited to read the students’
      work and move on to our first focussed writing session.

      Homework for Lesson 1:

      Write the opening to a story. In your opening you should set the scene and introduce at least one character. Be sure to use adverbs, adjectives, and ‘show not tell’!

    • #3656
      KaysonH
      Participant

      Once upon a time there was a hansom,unbelievable boy.He has a good mom.She works carefully at all the work.In there house there was a creepy,dangerous,bad,scary spider.It has 8 hairy legs and 6 gigantic eye,one mouth witch is full of terrifying,sharp teeth.The boy was called Joe,his dad was real smart.But he had a stupid damn friend.In their house there was a huge bucket of gluey slime sticking inside it.Everybody in the house liked it so much,they even almost play it everyday!

      • #3735
        Jessica
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    • #3661
      EdwinL
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      Please find attached the fiction written by Edwin.

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        Jessica
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    • #3669
      KevinKang
      Participant

      One summer day, when I was playing MineCraft on my

      i-phone…Suddenly, a scary gigantic zombie with a golden sword wants to attack me! I was scard, the only thing I got from my box is a electric sword,a golden hat and a iron shield. The war started, I used my electric sword to fend against to the gigantic zombie. At last we can not tell who is the winner so I dropped a bucket of lava and the zombie dies. Lastly, Iwent into class and I saw everyone is celebrating that we win the fight.  The end.

       

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        Jessica
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    • #3671
      Youyou
      Participant

      Hi, homework lesson 1 by ChenYou :

      … Once upon a time there was a nice little girl called Laura. She lived all by herself in a beautiful tree house. She lived next to a small village where Laura had a best friend named Vanessa. Every night, Laura came to Vanessa’s big front door and waited for Vanessa to come down, then they walked silently together to the marvellous tree house. In the tree house Vanessa prepared two hot chocolates while Laura put two fluffy cushions and a little table next to it. Then they both sat down on the fluffy cushions. Then they waited for the sun to rise. After, maybe four to six hours Laura bring Vanessa back to her house. Every night was like that… until one day, Laura and  her family moved out…

      • #3731
        Jessica
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    • #3896
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Summary for Lesson 2

      What did we cover
      – Reflected on what we covered last lesson
      – Discussed how we found the homework and read through students’ work
      – Discussed what was good and what could be improved in our homework
      – Discussed what the look out for in a story that you are going to continue
      – Looked at stories and brainstormed ideas of how we might continue them
      – Composed our own continuation of a story individually
      – Shared our writing and discussed what we did well

      Class report
      We began the lesson today by recapping what we covered last lesson; it was great that the students remember the activities we did and why they were important.
      Next, we spent some time thinking about our homeworks. We discussed what we enjoyed about doing the writing and what e found challenging; many students reported that they
      loved being imaginative (which is great!) and that they found choosing the best vocabulary and doing ‘show not tell’ (SNT) sometimes challenging. With this in mind, we will do extra
      work on ‘SNT’ in future lessons.
      A few students then volunteered to share their work. They read through their writing and then myself and the students discussed what we enjoyed about it. I also offered some comments on what could be improved.
      We began our work on ‘continuing a story’ by discussing what we would look out for in the story that we are going to continue; the students were good at realising how it is important to notice the characters, settings, objects, action, and mood in a text.
      We looked at an example story and picked out the important information that we would use when continuing the story. Then, as a group, we brainstormed some ideas for how we might continue the story.
      We moved on to doing some individual work; we read through another extract together,identified the key information, and then the students were given 10 minutes to continue the story.
      To finish, we shared our work and discussed what we did well. I was very impressed by the quality of the students’ writing, particularly as they had a short period in which to do it; it was clear that they had taken on board the learning done in the lesson and put this new knowledge into practice very well.

      Homework for Lesson 2:

      Read the passage below. Continue the story.

      (Look up the definitions of any words that you are unfamiliar with.)

      Soaring majestically in the warm currents of air, the eagle flexed her mighty wings in a demonstration of power and agility. She enjoyed these early morning flights as the sun began to rise and the earth warmed to the touch of its rays. The air was fresh and clear up here in the mountains – it was going to be a glorious day. As she swooped and swirled idly, she spotted a flicker of movement among the spruce trees below. Folding her wings, she plummeted earthwards, gathering a speed unmatched by any other creature on this mountain. As she neared the swift approaching ground, she stretched and turned, talons extended. What was it that she had spied only seconds ago?

    • #3919
      LeoL
      Participant

      The thing she had saw was a ferocious soldier!She started to fly away quickly but it was too late.The soldier shot her wing and red blood started spilling out of the wound.Then the soldier slowly poisoned her!She started to feel sleepy and her legs became wobbly.Then all was black.

       

       

      The End

    • #3922
      AlanL
      Participant

      When the eagles wondering is she seeing things, the black shadow appeared again! Then it appeared clearly, letting her know that the thing she saw was the legendary triple headed panther! The eagle flied away, but the panther with three enormous heads, three pairs of sharp eyes, reacted by making a huge jump, so tall it jumped as high as the tallest tree in the jungle! The eagle made a U turn, facing the panther. The eagle soared with great speed; while the panther made a huge jump with a really big force.                                                       They eagle soared up once more, making the panther landing with a thud on the ground. The eagle dived down, talons extended, aiming for the panther. The eagle caught the panther and soared in the air. When they are above the clouds, the eagle dropped the panther in the air, and the panther fell helplessly, waving it’s paws, and fell to the ground. There was a enormous boom and the panther is knocked out. The eagles celebrated that the monster is gone. Nobody knows that the panther is waking up, but the panther is gone. FOR NOW!!!

    • #3925
      Youyou
      Participant

      Homework lesson 2 by ChenYou:

      Suddenly she saw two eyes staring at her. It was a big dragon. The eagle flew away as far and as fast as she could . Then she heard a crying sound, it was the dragon! Then eagle stopped she slowly went back near the dragon. << Why are you crying? >> asked the eagle. << Because nobody wants to be friends with me >> answered the friendly dragon. << Why >> said the eagle. << Because, every time I want to ask someone, they ran (or fly) away.>> While the dragon was talking , the eagle felt even sorry for the dragon. So the eagle said sorry to the dragon, then the dragon asked the eagle if he want to be friend with him, and the eagle said yes. So the eagle and the dragon became best friends.

    • #3956
      EdwinL
      Participant

      She saw a fire hawk, her wings being golden. The little fire hawk’s beak was golden. The eagle asked the fire hawk what was her name she answered she was called Blaze. They played everyday afternoon to the evening, they had a lot of fun playing like (hide and seek). They always had to find their food by themselves, or build their nests.

    • #3994
      Haoming
      Participant

      She saw another flicker of movement and flew towards it. Big mistake. It was a Honey Badger and they were the toughest animals on the planet. It charged and the Eagle flew away speedily into the upper mountains, safe from the Honey Badger. “That was a close one!” she thought. As she circled the peak, she thought about the first flicker of movement and wondered if it really had been the Badger. She saw another flicker of movement and as quick as a flash, she  swooped downwards. She found a muskrat and swallowed it whole. It seemed that not all movements were Honey Badgers.

      Actually, when Eagles speak, they say everything the other way around, so what the Eagle actually said was “Taht saw a esolc eno!” when she said ‘That was a close one.’

    • #4016
      Jessica
      Participant

      Feedback for Haoming, Edwin, Youyou and Alan.

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    • #4021
      Jessica
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      Feedback for Leo.

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    • #4046
      KevinKang
      Participant

      She saw two boxes next to the spruce tree, one is made by iron, and one is made by diamond. She took the boxes all away when the man which is mean was not looking at the eagle, when she(the eagle) plummeted back, she opened the box made by diamond, she saw a lot of diamond in this box, she very disappointed because she thought that is full of foods…

      BUT, when the eagle opens the box made by iron, there is a fat rabbet inside! The eagle was happy, she ate the rabbet and took a rest…… when the box owner came near to the spruce tree, he was angry, but he saw his diamond are still there inside so he was not angry any more and he became friends with the eagle.

      The end.

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        Jessica
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    • #4107
      KaysonH
      Participant

      A LION!!! A lion pounced towards the eagle, the eagle was surprised and frightened. The eagle spread its wings and flew straight in the sky. It said I am not stupid and I knew that the lion will come. The eagle said to itself that I hope this special day is NOT destroyed by the lion. Well, we are not scared it’s just a female lion, said the eagle’s friend. We will kill the female lion. Oh, few.

    • #4220
      Haoming
      Participant

      A plucky ladybird was holding onto a flying dandelion seed. A lingering lion passed by, like leftover biscuit crumbs, but it didn’t notice the ladybird. The ladybird saw a herd of browsing sheep and flew around them. One of the sheep noticed him, but it wasn’t interested.

      The ladybird jumped off the dandelion and flew to a hole in a tree. He landed inside and made himself comfortable. Then he went deeper inside and found a woodlouse. The woodlouse said hello. The ladybird said hello. What’s your name? the ladybird asked. “Blahblahblah” answered the woodlouse, “And you?” he asked. “Skoodilypooper” replied the ladybird. They played hide and seek and became best friends.

      On television, they watched Crash Course World History. They learned about different civilisations and at one point a man said “And Caesar went skoodilypooping with Cleopatra.” Another time, when the man was going to talk about Egypt, he said “Hello, this is John Green, Crash Course World History and today we’re going to talk about Egypt. No, Older

      Older

      Older

      Older

      Less fictional

      Yes, that one,” as if somebody was clicking slides and clicked the wrong slides on purpose.  The two insects had been laughing in hysterics.

    • #4226
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Summary for Lesson 3:

      What did we cover
      – Reflected on what we covered last lesson
      – Discussed how we found the homework and read through students’ work
      – Discussed what was good and what could be improved in our homework
      – Looked at similes and metaphors
      – Discussed what the look out for in an image that you are going to use as inspiration
      – Looked at images and brainstormed ideas of stories we could write about them
      – Composed our story individually
      – Shared our writing and discussed what we did well

      Class report
      We began the lesson today by recapping what we covered in the last lesson and discussed what we enjoyed about it.
      Next, we looked over our homeworks. We talked about what we enjoyed about doing the writing and what we found challenging. Some students offered to share their work and the group and I spoke about what we particularly liked about it and what could make it even better.
      We then looked at using ‘similes and metaphors’ to make our writing more vivid. The students really enjoyed doing the exercises and all came up with some really lovely ideas.
      After that, we started our work on ‘using an image as inspiration’ by discussing what we would look out for in an image that we are going to write about; as with ‘continuing a story’, the students were great at noticing what characters, settings, objects, action, and mood is shown in an image.
      We looked at several images and picked out the important information that we would use when writing our story. Then, as a group, we brainstormed some ideas of what stories we might write about different images.
      After this we did some individual work; we looked at an image, identified the key information,and then the students were given 10 minutes to continue the story.
      To finish, we shared our work and discussed what we did well. The variety and creativity shown in the students’ stories was brilliant, and it was evident that they had been attentive to the learning we had done in the lesson and used similes/metaphors very well.

      Homework for Lesson3 :

      Look at the image below. Write a short story inspired by it.
      (Use at least one simile or metaphor in your story).

    • #4227
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Summary for Lesson 3:

      What did we cover
      – Reflected on what we covered last lesson
      – Discussed how we found the homework and read through students’ work
      – Discussed what was good and what could be improved in our homework
      – Looked at similes and metaphors
      – Discussed what the look out for in an image that you are going to use as inspiration
      – Looked at images and brainstormed ideas of stories we could write about them
      – Composed our story individually
      – Shared our writing and discussed what we did well

      Class report
      We began the lesson today by recapping what we covered in the last lesson and discussed what we enjoyed about it.
      Next, we looked over our homeworks. We talked about what we enjoyed about doing the writing and what we found challenging. Some students offered to share their work and the group and I spoke about what we particularly liked about it and what could make it even better.
      We then looked at using ‘similes and metaphors’ to make our writing more vivid. The students really enjoyed doing the exercises and all came up with some really lovely ideas.
      After that, we started our work on ‘using an image as inspiration’ by discussing what we would look out for in an image that we are going to write about; as with ‘continuing a story’, the students were great at noticing what characters, settings, objects, action, and mood is shown in an image.
      We looked at several images and picked out the important information that we would use when writing our story. Then, as a group, we brainstormed some ideas of what stories we might write about different images.
      After this we did some individual work; we looked at an image, identified the key information,and then the students were given 10 minutes to continue the story.
      To finish, we shared our work and discussed what we did well. The variety and creativity shown in the students’ stories was brilliant, and it was evident that they had been attentive to the learning we had done in the lesson and used similes/metaphors very well.

      Homework for Lesson3 :

      Look at the image below. Write a short story inspired by it.
      (Use at least one simile or metaphor in your story).

    • #4233
      LeoL
      Participant

      Once apon a time, there was a good ladybird named Buggy.One day his mother asked him to go out and fetch some aphids for dinner.He still had an hour to rest.He thought of the last answer to his science homework.It was about dandelions.Then he saw one fly in the air.then he suddenly took out his homework  and ticked the yes.Then he caught a few aphids and went home.The next day, he handed in his homework and he got A+A+ for his science homework!

       

       

       

      The End

       

    • #4258
      Youyou
      Participant

      Homework 3 – Chen You:

      Once upon a time, a mother ladybug had a lazy and hungry ladybug in her house. (The lazy and hungry ladybug was her child) One day, the little ladybug was meant to clean his bed, and he fell asleep. So the mother grounded him, and sent him in the forest to take some wood for the fire. On the way, saw his friends the ants, so the ants asked him if he could go and play with them. Then he climbed up an oak leaf. Suddenly, a large wave of wind blew the the oak leaf and the ladybug. Then the ladybug screamed. “Ahh,. HELP ME, BRING ME DOWN!!!!!!!!!!” But the wind disagreed and continued to take her up. She was next to her house, she cries. “MUM I AM COMI……..” It was DARK and SILENT. A moment later she heard her mother’s voice, she opened one eye and saw her mother crying on her chair. She asked “What’s going on? Ahh ! Screamed her mother. And she fell down from her chair. “Honey, are you really alive?” “Yes, I am mother” And they hugged each other, from that day, they lived happily ever after.

    • #4259
      KaysonH
      Participant

      Once upon a time, mum asked ladybug to play outside after the breakfast. Suddenly, the ladybug saw a dandelion. He wanted to see what inside it, but suddenly the wind blew.

      The dandelion brought the ladybug to the farm. The dandelion like a fan flapping away.

      In the farm, there were lots of animals. Some Moo, some Meow, some wolf and some oink. Some made mind, some dig the mud and some played the strings.

    • #4267
      EdwinL
      Participant

      Homework 3 – by Edwin

      Once upon a time, there was a dandelion floating in the air. A ladybug lived on it! It was sitting on the stem of the dandelion as if a witch was sitting on a broom. The creature was very beautiful and cute, it was as small as a eraser. It thought the dandelion was its home! It lived for years and years.
      The dandelion was its space ship. It took it up to tall trees, the food for the ladybug was tree leaves! So the storey became captain ladybug and its broom! The dandelion enjoyed staying with the ladybug, and the ladybug enjoyed staying with the dandelion too. They became very best friends!!!

    • #4270
      AlanL
      Participant

      Once, there was a little bug called Buggery. His two little eyes looked like pearls and its skin is like a tiny mat with a few polka-dots. One day, it went comping with his friends. Since Buggery was a little baby bug, it did not know how to fly. It watched sadly as his older friends took of in the air, leaving him behind.Buggery looked for something that has a chance to fly so he could have a transport for flying with his friends.

      After a moment, he found a few things that might fly;the first one is a leaf. He tried to make it fly, but they are too heavy for the wind to lift them. The second item is a piece of a branch. He stood on it, but the branch itself was too heavy,the branch is so thick it look like a tree trunk for Buggery! The third and last item is a little dandelion. This is his last hope. if this did not work, all is lost.He took a deep breath and stepped on it.The second he stepped on it, he flew to the air! He looked like witch on a broom and swished through the sky.

      After he caught up to his friends, they gasped and thought: This is a  dream, he cant fly! He rose in a sea of  polka-dots and flew in the air happily. When he landed, he was as tired as a pig and held his [ broom] and walked home as slow as a snail.

      When he got home, he shared his story to his family but they did not belie him. Buggery smiled to himself and : thought, It does not matter whether they believe it or not, as long as I trust myself, it is a true experience and also the best day of my life then he climbed the stairs like a sleepy monkey and went to his bed, and drifted into a nice, sweet sleep and a sweet dream.
      <p style=”text-align: left;”>                                                             The End</p>

    • #4298
      Jessica
      Participant

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      Jessica
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      Edwin feedback.

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      KevinKang
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    • #4430
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Summary for lesson 4:

      What did we cover
      – Reflected on what we covered last lesson
      – Discussed how we found the homework and read through students’ work
      – Discussed what was good and what could be improved in our homework
      – Looked at imagery and openings
      – Discussed what the look out for in a title that you are going to use for a story
      – Looked at titles and brainstormed ideas of stories we could write about them
      – Composed our story individually
      – Shared our writing and discussed what we did well
      Class report
      We began the lesson today by recapping what we covered last lesson; it was good to see that
      the students had remembered what we did very well and it was clear through the quality of
      their homework that they took onboard the learning.
      We then looked over our homeworks. We discussed what we enjoyed about the writing and
      what we found challenging; the students reported enjoying the creative side and struggling
      more with things such as trying to think of similes to use. A few of the students shared their
      homework and, as a group, we discussed what we enjoyed about them.
      Next, we spoke about imagery and using the ‘5 senses’ in our writing to make our work more
      vivid and interesting. The students came up with some wonderful ideas for how to use
      imagery to describe a beautiful garden, and many of them used imagery very well in their
      individual writing.
      We spoke about openings next. We looked at different ways of opening a story (i.e. using
      speech or an intriguing object/action/character) and came up with some examples using the
      idea of an ‘alien hunt’.
      After this, we spoke about what is important about a story’s title and what information we can
      gain about the type of story it will be from its title. The students are getting much better at
      thinking about these opening questions, which is very encouraging.
      As a group, we came up with different ideas for stories using a few titles. The students
      enjoyed thinking about what ‘The Accident’ or ‘The Hidden Book’ might be about, and they
      clearly were attentive to how the title informs the text.
      We spent some time at the end of the lesson working on the opening of a story called ‘The Secret Door’ individually.

      Homework for Lesson 4:

      Choose a title from the list below. Write the introduction to a short story with this title.

      (Use imagery in your opening).

      – Mr. Mankind’s Secret
      – A Great Escape
      – The Worst Christmas
      – The Haunted Forest
      – ‘Who goes there?’

    • #4444
      LeoL
      Participant

      A Great Escape.                                                                  One day, a prisoner escaped a <b><u>unascapable prison.Abashidi prison.Now, that prisoners name was Shiratoori.(He was a real Japanese man who escaped the worlds most harsh prisons.)He escaped like this:It was a spring night, when the guards were asleep, he pulled apart his hand locks.He had thought about this plan a few days ago.Then he got a little piece of scrap metal and picked the jail cell lock.Then he ran to the main door and opened it and went away.That was how he escaped.</u></b>

       

      By, Leo.L

       

    • #4457
      AlanL
      Participant

      A Great Escape.

      A long time ago, there was a prisoner called Bucky. He was a boy that’s really poor and lived in a small warehouse with his family. His has dark hair with two black eyes that look like two shiny pearls. His clothes are ragged with stains full of food. On a snowy night,he was so poor that he has no choice but to go to the rich and steal. His family told him not to, but he said,”I have no choice, it’s our only way to survive and have enough food. When the bell struck 12:00 midnight, he made his move.

      He walked over the cold and snowy path that leads to the city. He walked as quiet like a mouse and slipped into the mansion silently. He walked with his head low, afraid to be seen. He does not know where to go, so he wandered around, trying to find a way to the treasure room. He was seen by a maid after 10 minutes after he went in the house. He knocked her out before the maid can do anything. He hid the maid in a closet, and took the keys and the map from the maid. He was overjoyed to see the treasure room is just a short distance from the place he is.

      He  sprinted to the door and thought: I am going to be rich! He used the keys to open the door. He saw a bright light through the crack and when he used the keys and opened the door. Before he can get anything from the room, he was cuffed! He was so scared he fainted!

      When he woke up, the first thing he saw was the ceiling of the jail cell. He looked around, and knew that he was caught. He wants to escape the jail but how?He took a cup and stood at the cell door. A police came by then he crashed the police using the cup.The police fainted instantly and Bucky took his keys. He unlocked the door and ran outside. The jail is on a island close the shore. He used a little boat and rowed away.

      When he reached land, he ran home and never stole again.

       

    • #4465
      KevinKang
      Participant

      The Worst Christmas

      One Christmas night, a smart thief went into a house(Santa’s house)wich is filled of Christmas gift…then the thief took all the gift away and he left a not ‘‘you gift is gone, please go to the office to take a look.’’
      So Santa went to the office and saw a bag of gift
      ‘‘wow! I got so luckly!’’
      But Santa did nit know the gift are fake so Santa gave the fake gift to the children.
      The next morning, Santa saw a bunch of note with this gift is fake!!!
      Santa was scared…

      The end By: Kang Kevin

    • #4492
      Haoming
      Participant

      The Haunted Forest

      In the haunted forest, there is always a smell of bones, rotting leaves and barren soil. Nobody usually sees the sun so there is usually total darkness, like a piece of black paper. The taste of rotting leaves fill the cold air every day. People could touch the leaves and feel a huge block of ice on their hand. When entering the forest, you could hear the howling of werewolves, the chirping of birds and the occasional swaying of desolate trees.

      Packs of wild, fierce and livid werewolves live in the haunted forest. There is almost absolutely no light source in the forest, so sometimes a black blanket of darkness is covering the forest. When this happens, werewolves sometimes bite each other in dark areas and mistake each other for prey.

      If an explorer comes into the haunted forest, then the first thing he will encounter is a werewolf that is ready to attack him, like a raging bull. Hopefully, all explorers need special equipment to survive in the forest, so he will live to go out of the haunted forest.

    • #4542
      Jessica
      Participant

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    • #4562
      Youyou
      Participant

      Chen You – Homework #4

      The Worst Christmas.

      A long time ago, there was a nice little boy called George. He lived with his poor family.

      Every Christmas it was normal, but this Christmas was very strange: that day, in the morning, every one was exited, they were all happy.

      In the North Pole, Santa was snorting loudly. Suddenly, a large wave of wind blowed Santa’s blanket away”Brrrrr” cried Santa.

      He took another blanket and went back to sleep. A while later, at the window, there a creak (next to the window ). A black clothed man came in to Santa’s room, and KIDNAPPED Santa. “HELP ME”cried Santa, but it was too late, they had already disappeared in the woods…

    • #4615
      KaysonH
      Participant

      The worst Christmas

      Do you like Christmas? What gift do you want for Christmas? Yeah! It’s Christmas morning, we prepared cookies and soft drinks.We made chocolate puddings and prepare carrots for the reindeer. We brought cake to celebrate. We jump up and down to wait for Christmas to come. Sadly, the weather forecast said that the wind blew and trees bent, especially the lightning and storm frightened Santa. Suddenly, the rain splashed down the clouds and falled on the reindeer. A terrible noise scared the reindeer and the lightening stoke through Santa ‘s sleigh and it’s broke.Santa jumped to the reindeer quickly and got ready to leave the city. At that time, the bag broke hardly and the presents falling down everywhere so people can’t recognize which present belong to them. What a terrible Christmas!

    • #4697
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Summary for Lesson 5:

      What did we cover
      – Reflected on what we covered last lesson
      – Discussed how we found the homework and read through students’ work
      – Discussed what was good and what could be improved in our homework
      – Looked at ‘show not tell’
      – Discussed what the features of a fantasy story are
      – Looked at fantasy-inspired images and brainstormed ideas of stories we could write
      – Composed our story individually
      – Shared our writing and discussed what we did well

      Class report
      We started the lesson today by recapping what we covered last week.
      Next, we discussed our homeworks. We spoke about what we found enjoyable and what we
      found more challenging. It was wonderful to hear that one of the challenges often faced was
      deciding which of many exciting ideas they should write about. Several of the students shared
      their homework and, as a group, we discussed what we enjoyed about them.
      We then revisited ‘show not tell’. We discussed why it is good to use it, looked at some
      examples, and came up with our examples to show emotions such as anger, excitement, and
      fear in our writing.
      After this we moved on to focus on fantasy stories. We spoke about which fantasy stories we
      know and then looked at the main features. We then looked at different images of fantasy
      characters and settings and brainstormed some ideas of what fantasy stories we could write
      using these as inspiration. In the group task, it was evident that the students had been
      listening carefully as they applied their learning wonderfully.
      The lesson ended with the students coming up with their own fantasy stories using an image
      of a werewolf as inspiration. They were very creative and it was brilliant to see the variety in
      the students’ stories.

      Homework for Lesson5:

      Write a fantasy story. Your story must have a ‘good character’, ‘bad character’, a conflict,and a resolution.

    • #4704
      AlanL
      Participant

      The Alien Invasion

      A long long time ago, in a universe far far away, there was a world called: The fantasy world. Everything was peaceful there. There is nothing called war and no bad guys. But now it’s going to change.

      On a peaceful day at the fantasy world,(Everyday was peaceful anyways) everything was normal. There were smells of flowers, see the clear view even when walking, feel the softness of the clear, white snow. The streets were so uncrowded that the sidewalk looks like a small blanket. One little boy, was walking on the streets and he is like a little stain on the small blanket. He was humming the song that he liked most: Fantasy rocks. He was so happy he clapped hands at the same time he is humming. He is smiling ear to ear and waving to the little rabbits on the street. That boy, is a guy named lucky. On the same day, something was going to happen.

      On that day in the morning,the sky of the fantasy world was pink as usually,(for some reasons, but it was like this originally.) Then it turned orange, then black. It was because it was blocked by a giant U.F.O!

      People in their house took a look outside and some screamed helplessly, some hid, and some fainted. Lucky saw it and without thinking, he ran to a garage. He grabbed three things. The first one is a ball he wanted to destroy the U.F.O. But not with a ball! he took a hammer. He just lifted the hammer above ground for three seconds, then he dropped it. The hammer missed his foot by inches. He heard someone screaming outside. Then he smelt burning. That guy was killed by the lazer gun on the ufo. He took the third and last item from the garage. It was a shot gun. Perfect. He ran outside. He shot the UFO. It fell like an astroid. he ran uphill and checked who is inside.

      It, was a Alien. Lucky ran away forgetting about his gun. He hid in a bush, then remembered his gun. He took a aim. The alien took out his lazer gun and destroied the shotgun.

      Lucky went crazy. He went to the gun house, took everything there and just ran to the alien. He ran as fast as a Tiger. He took all the guns and shot the alien. Of course, the alien died. He was a hero!

      People rebuilt the city and made a statue of lucky. It was as large as a mountain.

      From that day on , they lived happily, ever, after.

      P.S there was a second wave of aliens on the same day one hundred years later.

       

       

    • #4730
      EdwinL
      Participant

      Edwin – homework #5

      A haunted house adventure:
      In a scary haunted house, there were GHOSTS!!!!!!!!!! BONES OF DEAD PEOPLE!!!!!!!!!!!!! A little boy went into this house even his father warned him not to go in, the boy decided to investigate. The house was called THE HOUSE OF DOOM!!! The boy went into the house up the creepy crumbling staircase. First he saw a ghost, luckily it was a statue. Next there was a real ghost, standing guard. It walked towards the boy, the boy ran and slammed the door to the other door. It was no use the ghost was transparent it flew through the door, luckily a table hit it. The ghost was dead, the boy found a knife and a gun, so he took it……to the next room. Now it was scary, there were Bones ghosts spiders dead humans! The boy sneaked to ghosts back and killed it one by one, and finally there was a ghost that turned dead and turn alive in 4 seconds. The was the FIRST one who saw it. It has sharp teeth red eyes blooding heads! However it did not see him, PHEW. The ghost later saw him the boy use the gun he took shooting lasers using knives, shooting at the ghost remember it can turn alive. The only way to defeat it was to use a laser shoot to blow up the entire house. That was what the boy did. At last it was a happy ending, the little boy went home without getting hurt!

    • #4770
      Haoming
      Participant

      The World Of The Pokemon

      As I entered the heart of a deep forest at dawn, I noticed a large block of wood. As I walked around curiously, I spotted an old, cuboid-shaped and yellow door with the shape of a pokemon embedded in it in the corner of my eye. As I cautiously entered the door, I entered a world of pokemon and the smell of fur filled the air. I tasted water and felt cool.There was Beldum, Metang, Metagross, Weedle, Kakuna, Beedrill, Caterpie, Metapod, Butterfree, Necrozma and many more. Nobody had seen a real pokemon before. I was as excited as a kid who was about to watch his favourite TV programme. Usually, anything to do with pokemon was games online, pokemon cards and pokemon games where kids pretended to be pokemon. This was shockingly different. Everybody knew there was no such thing as real pokemon, but this proved them all to be completely wrong. I ran deliriously around like an excited cheetah and found a million standard poke-balls, great poke-balls and ultra poke-balls. There were a trillion pokemon out there so I first caught ten pokemon, including Eevee, Umbreon, Vaporeon, Jolteon and Flareon. The rest of the ten pokemon were Metagross, Usaring, Pidgeot, Arcanine and Eevee. Running out of the door, I found my friend Zixuan and gave him half of my poke-balls. Zixuan is great at catching pokemon on pokemon go, so he caught ten pokemon, too!

      Zixuan and I ventured into the world of pokemon and caught ten more pokemon, I caught nine Eevees, and so did Zixuan. We both evolved our strongest Eevees and got a Leafeon and a Vaporeon. Zixuan wasn’t happy because he wanted a Jolteon, but his Vaporeon was quicker. Our tenth pokemon were different. Zixuan’s was a Shellder while Mine was a Cloyster. Eevee is an extremely nice pokemon, and therefore is never fierce towards its owner. Straight after we’d caught our twentieth pokemon, A Team Rocket guy appeared! His name was Grunt. I battled with him for an extremely long time. Grunt’s pokemon was Torchic. I won the battle and Grunt thoughtlessly abandoned the Torchic leaving it to me! Yippee! Zixuan encountered him later and he got a Torchic too!Afterwards, we encountered another Team Rocket guy. I used my Arcanine, My Vaporeon, my Metagross and a lot more of my pokemon. Firstly, my Arcanine lost health and returned to my pokeball. I used my Vaporeon, but that couldn’t survive the Team Rocket guy’s pokemon!

      I used my Metagross, but he lost health, too! Now, it was up to my other pokemon to defeat the water pokemon. I watched as they failed to defeat the water pokemon, one after the other. My Leafeon failed, my Umbreon failed, my Flareon failed to defeat the pokemon and my Jolteon failed to defeat the pokemon. The Team Rocket pokemon trainer was beginning to smirk.

      I kept on trying, but I lost almost all of them. Finally, I used my Lunatone and told it to use psychic. Instantly, the Team rocket pokemon lost its health and the trainer left it to me. The water pokemon was a Laprus, and it was not a normal one, at all! It had 9999999999 health and it did 1000000000 damage! I exuberantly leapt onto my Lunatone and hysterically spun around in circles until Zixuan irritatedly told me to calm down. In the meantime, Zixuan caught a Jolteon, (yippee!) and traded his Tapu Koko for my Lapras. The Tapu Koko had the exact same health and did the same damage. We caught a pikachu each and used our Jolteons as our buddies. The reason why Zixuan traded his Tapu Koko was because he really wanted a Lapras. What a day!

    • #4772
      Youyou
      Participant

      ChenYou homework #5

      Once upon a time, in a small village lived a poor family. They had a daughter called Sophie. She wished to go in an adventure. One day, she was walking around and suddenly, behind the bushes she heard a voice.” Come here little girl, come and I will tell you a big secret.”said a shaking voice. So, Sophie came behind the bushes , and saw an old elf. She said politely (but scared)” What do you want from me?”she asked, he replied”  I don’t want anything from you, I just want to tell you a secret.” “ What secret?”asked Sophie, “ Aha!” said the elf. “This secret is an adventure abo…” “ What adventure?” Interrupted Sophie,” Oh… sorry.” said Sophie “ Don’t worry little girl, so, as I was saying, with this door you will be able to go in the adventure, you need to put the small door on a wall and it will become a normal door. Then you will open the door and you will go in a adventure but I think you will need some weapons. ( and he gave some money for the guns and the shield)Oh yeah… At the end you will have a big present for your birthday.” Sophie said thank you and good bye. Then she quickly went to a shop and buy some guns and a shield and kept some money for her family, then she prepared her bag, she put the door on a wall and went inside. She was in the desert!! Then she had decided to walk to find something interesting. An hour later, she was still walking, suddenly she herd  a voice” SOMEONE HELP ME, EVEN IF THERE IS NO ONE !! Sophie walked closer to the voice, then she saw a panther, she was tied with ribbons, so Sophie untied her, then, the ribbons where free, and the panther was nice. It was night, so Sophie decided to talk about her adventure to the panther tomorrow. Tomorrow morning she told everything to the panther, and the panther said he want to help. But then, there was a dragon, so the panther and Sophie tried to kill the dragon, at last they killed the dragon but of course they were a bit bleeding, on the neck of the dragon was a necklace, Sophie touched the necklace and suddenly they were not in the desert but next to the treasure Sophie was about to touch it, but someone shot and injured the panther it was the evil queen in Snow White. “That treasure is mine” she said, “ If you leave, I will kill this lovely panther(if we touch the treasure we will come back home, with the treasure).”So quickly Sophie grabbed  the panther and touched the treasure and pop they were at Sophie’s house(with the treasure). So, Sophie was rich, and it was her birthday! ” Happy birthday to you happy birthday to…..And she made a house for the panther.

      THE END

       

    • #4808
      Jessica
      Participant

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    • #4877
      AnnaZ
      Participant

      There is a story that came from the country, “An island is in the deep of the forest, this island is very strange,  many people want to go there, but they never came out.And the most strange thing is the sound!This sound are very scary, no one wants to live there, because it’s so scaryed, and sometimes it sounded like someone was crying. They are very scared by this island, there has a name for this island “stream land”

      It is my first time going there, so my friend first went to this house. We felt a little bit scared, but this house is so big, and it is so cheap to rent. We were very excited. But,it is  closely shuttered, staid and substantial, narrow and several, enough queer, still quaint, low and comfortable, large and picturesque, fine and picturesque, fine and curious, generously proportioned, we can use the all word of describe this house. This house looks like no one lives here, I ask the women, “Why does it look like a long time ago?”  “Oh, sorry. Because last year my son went to another place, so I want to rent this house, but no one wants to buy this house, so I rent this house.” “ok, thank you.’ “But one thing you need to pay attention to is, do not go out after 12 pm.” “ Ok, I know”  I don’t know why I can’t go out after 12 pm, but I normally will sleep at this time, so I don’t worry about this.

      When we finish tidying our house, we decide to have a good sleep. I am so tired, so I quickly fell asleep, but my friend Joe called me up at 12 pm. “ can we go out

    • #4979
      KevinKang
      Participant

      Writing Homework #5
      Character: May(good character) and Night may(bad character)
      Setting: a deep ocean
      Other character: Mom(May’s mom), Dad(May’s dad), Any(Night’s mom and Google(Night may’s dad)
      The story: the diving kids

      One sunny day… a little boy called may like to dive in deep ocean,in his way on to the beach, he saw her bad sister night may she said”you will not be the winner on this race!”

      So they stared a diving race,the have to see who is the winner by diving the deepest.

      May can dive 147cm,night may can only dive 12cm,may said “I won!”

      “Urgh,Ok.” Said night may,but this is not the end!

      To be continue

    • #5055
      VMWEdu
      Keymaster

      Summry for Lesson 6:

      What did we cover
      – Reflected on what we covered last lesson
      – Discussed how we found the homework and read through students’ work
      – Discussed what was good and what could be improved in our homework
      – Looked at ‘alternative words for said’
      – Discussed what the features of a mystery story are
      – Brainstormed ideas for a mystery story as a group
      – Composed our story individually
      – Shared our writing and discussed what we did well

      Class report
      We started the lesson today by recapping what we covered last week. I was pleased to see
      that the students remembered what we had covered very well.
      We then moved on to discuss our homeworks. As usual, we spoke about what we enjoyed
      and what we found more challenging. I was particularly impressed by the quality of the
      homework this week; it is excellent to see the writing skills improve so evidently over the
      weeks. Many of the students then shared their homework and we all discussed what we
      enjoyed about them.
      Next, we looked at ‘alternative words for said’. I spoke about why it is good to not use ‘said’
      too frequently and how alternative words can be far more descriptive. We then did an exercise
      which involved coming up with alternatives.
      After this we moved on to focus on mystery stories. We spoke about what a mystery is, which
      mystery stories we know, and then looked at the main features of the genre. We then worked
      together to come up with an idea for some mystery stories. It was brilliant to see how creative
      the students were, they all came up with some really exciting ideas.
      We finished the lesson with the students coming up with their own mystery stories using the
      setting of a classroom and a leaky pen as inspiration. They were wonderfully inventive and
      different to one another.

      Homework for Lesson 6:

      Write a mystery story. Your story must have a detective, a suspect, clues, and a solution.

      (For an extra challenge, try including a red herring too!)

    • #5085
      AlanL
      Participant

      It is a sunny day at baker street when a detective named Ricky Holmes is sleeping on his couch. You can call him Ricky. Meanwhile, there is a few footsteps can be heard on the stairs of his apartment. There is a hard knocking and that made Ricky bolted right up his couch. He yawned sleepily and moaned,”Who’s there? Come in anyway.”

      An old man walked in the room, holding his cane. He hair is silver as if it is silver. He is not tall but kind of short. He is about one metre and fifty cm tall. His coat is green and his hat is blue. Before Ricky can speak, the old man started,”I am the principal of the Wimpy Kid School. I am here to ask for a case.” Before Ricky can ask about it, the man interrupted,”If you do not know my name, you can call me Roy.Here is the case. :Every day at my school, at 12 pm, when I am eating, a letter will always come and tell me to go to the funfair at 1 o’clock.Then when I am ready to go to the fair, a teacher will dash in and tell me a student is missing. So I did not go to the fair and stayed at the school to think.This has been repeating for a week,”

      Holmes thought and replied,” First, the letters is a coincidence and someone will want you to got to the fair with you. Second, for the kidnapping, please take me there.”

      When they got there, he glimpsed at the dead tree that had fallen down. He took out a gun and told Roy,” Let’s go to the tree trunk. Take a sharp object as the kidnapper is there. First, and the most common mistake by criminals are footsteps. Let’s go.”He held up his gun and walked as silent as a mouse. He jumped out, and shot. There was a painful moan, then the missing children ran out and ran to Ricky. There were 8 children and 2 adults, smiling warmly in the park of the school.

    • #5089
      KaysonH
      Participant

      A mystery Monday Morning /Kayson

      On a Monday morning, the wind blew harder than ever. No one could see anything, it was like fog.

      Suddenly, the fog has spread, we can see the sunshine above us clearly. I went to office very fast, but I found out that our vase was missing. I saw the door to enter our office was open, I thought there was someone stole the vase. So I called a detective.

      The detective packed up all his stuff in his bag, there was a hammer, string, a needle, nails and a magnifier. Then I told him our address and the detective quickly ran to our office and knocked the door. I opened the door and grumbled that things was missing everyday. I said there was a thief definitely. But I did’n know who is the thief.

      Mmmm…. the detective thought, aha, I found a hole so it should be an animal did. We called all the animals come to office and found out that no animals could even go through the hole. So the detective  confirm it’s the wind that blew the vase out of the window.

      The End

    • #5163
      Haoming
      Participant

      Homework for lesson 6

       

      The Gun Store Mystery

      On a sunny day in July, an invisible machine closed the doors of a gun store. Next, the machine took all of the people out and teleported the gun store to somewhere nobody knew.

      Instantly, chaos reigned in the city where the gun store had been. Streets were crowded with people and some were constantly knocking on the door of the government, telling them the news. Finally, the police came and calmed down everyone. The best detective was summoned and found the marks in the pavement that were made by the machine. Everyone was extremely curious about what had made the tracks. Not even the best detective in the world could solve a mystery like this. Everybody searched in the whole world trying to find the machine and the gun store, but they all failed.

      This was an emergency, thought the governor. Every person must search for the gun store. That store is for nobody, except those who attack aliens. What if an alien took it? They would kill us, so we need to make a new, secret gun store, as quick as possible, otherwise aliens will kill all of us. The governor took orders that a new secret gun store must be made, immediately. Also, he told the best detective to search underground, just in case a person had stolen it. The detective started to dig, as fast as a cat who had  found a chest of sardines. When his shovel hit something, he dug deeper, deeper and deeper, until he found what was in the ground. It was a secret underground lab, and he was not curious, because he knew his brother was always hiding from the government and police, but he only saw a statue of a man inside. He covered the lab with soil until nobody could find it. Then, he started digging in another area. As he dug, the soil became more loose, so there wouldn’t be a house or person who stole the store here. He ran over to a forest and started digging. The soil was not loose here and he predicted that there would be an underground lab. Unfortunately, he was wrong.He ran back to the place where the soil was loose and continued digging. When his shovel touched something hard, he immediately suspected and began to dig as quick as possible. What he found was another underground lab. Inside the lab, there was the exact same machine that had stolen the gun store. An evil man called Farty told the detective that he was just wondering about. The detective was not stupid and told Farty to give the gun store back. The detective walked down the lab deeper and deeper until he found the gun store. He called police immediately and the gun store was taken back. Farty was questioned.But who is the thief?

    • #5206
      Jessica
      Participant

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    • #5295
      KevinKang
      Participant

      In a dark night a suspect called Ice went out of his house and begin to steal things, a detective called Smart was finding Ice.

      In the darkest night, Ice begin to STEAL things……BUT he left a clue witch is not easy for Smart see.

      When Smart got the clue that Ice left, he begin to read the clue “tfel nrut dna og drawfor” “hmm…is it go forward and turn left,yes!”
      Then in the next week Smart has took Ice into the jail and everyone in the city lived happy every after.

      The end

    • #5313
      KevinKang
      Participant

      Homework for lesson 6:
      Title: The smart detective.a

      In a dark night a suspect called Ice went out of his house and begin to steal things, a detective called Smart was finding Ice.
      In the darkest night, Ice begin to STEAL things……BUT he left a clue witch is not easy for Smart see.
      When Smart got the clue that Ice left, he begin to read the clue “tfel nrut dna og drawfor” “hmm…is it go forward and turn left?,yes!”
      Then in the next week Smart has took Ice into the jail and everyone in the city lived happy every after.
      The end

    • #5376
      Youyou
      Participant

      ChenYou, homework #6:

      […Once upon a time, there was a detective( a girl ) who was named: Rose Campbell she was about 18 or 19 years old. She had a boss called Mr D’evreux. He is a very strict  boss. Rose had a friend called Stefanie. One day, when Rose and Stefan was eating there  lunch( together), there heard a lady screaming:

      “Somebody help me, please!!”

      Rose and Stefan went as fast as they could to the lady. When she came in the house they saw a lady crying

      “What happened to you , Madame? ” asked Rose

      “Who are you?” She asked

      “We are detectors.” Replied Rose.

      “Detectors? Where are your parents? I need real detectors and polices.” She rolled her eyes

      “Look, we are real detectors. Seriously.”

      “ I’ve no time to wait! My son just disappeared ! Your waisting time right now. If you’re really detectors, show me your badge. I mean NOW!” She screamed

      “Wow, calm down, m’am. Here’s our badge. Stef, she called, turning to Stefan, can you search for clues while I talk to the lady? ”

      “Okay.”she replied

      Stefan took out papers, a pencil and a magnifying glass. She marched in the house.

      “Seriously,” she yelled at Stefan. Turning back to the lady, then said “What exactly happened? ”

      “I was playing Monopoly with my son Ross, then suddenly, for no reason, the lights went off. When the lights went on, my son was missing” she explained.

      the lady gave Rose a picture. Rose took the magnifying glass from her friend and they searched for clues.

      “Where were you and your son just before the lights went off?”

      “In the living room, here” the freaked out mother.

      Using the magnifying glass, the young detective looked around. Then, she saw some footprints. It leads outside, then left, then footsteps leads her next too there house. Rose and Stefan, thought for a minute, when Stefan said

      “Aha! I think I got it” she explained everything to Rose, then they took out two metal de detectors and they started to look for clues. Then Rose’s detector went Bip bip bip (that means that there’s something under ground. )Rose started digging so Stefan helped. At the end they found a man and next to him was the boy!
      …]

    • #5387
      Jessica
      Participant

      Lesson 7 (Report)

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    • #5446
      KaysonH
      Participant

      Happy/Lesson 7

      Happy looks like warm green of the grass

      It tastes like a freezing ice cream

      It smells like a shining sunlight

      Happy looks like a shiny gold

      It sounds like flowing sea water

      It feels like taking photos while traveling

    • #5479
      AlanL
      Participant

      We traveled through

      We rode through plains,

      We rode through savanna,

      We rode through hills and streams.

      At times we rode swiftly,

      At times we rode carefully,

      More than a person ever dreams.

    • #5497
      Haoming
      Participant

      Anyone seen my CAT?

      Cunning ‘n cute,

      Meandering and minute,

      Crevasse the cunning cat

      He eats up mice,

      He sneaks up on people,

      He scratches the telly, (but that’s not nice!).

      He gobbles up fish,

      He scratches the furniture,

      He eats cat food (which is a tasty dish).

      Anyone seen my CAT?

      Cunning ‘n cute,

      Meandering and minute,

      Crevasse the cunning cat

      He bites your hand,

      He wrecks the chairs,

      He goes out exploring (mainly to meet bears).

      He prowls in the garden,

      He hunts down mice,

      He frightens all rodents and looks at you twice.

      Anyone seen my CAT?

      Cunning ‘n cute,

      Meandering and minute,

      Crevasse the cunning cat

    • #5511
      Jessica
      Participant

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    • #5550
      Youyou
      Participant

      Chem You poem:

      My cat

       

      I have a cat,

      She is very fast,

      She likes to catch mice,

      And she is very nice,

      She is very furry,

      And she is funny,

      She don’t like taking bath,

      But she know the path,

      Sometimes she lets me cut her fur,

      So I like her.

    • #5802
      Jessica
      Participant

      Writing Group – Lesson 8 (report)

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    • #5810
      AlanL
      Participant

      <p style=”text-align: right;”>                                                                                                                               Alan Liao</p>
      <p style=”text-align: right;”>                                                                                                                          Nerd Street                                                                                                                                 Vancouver</p>
      <p style=”text-align: right;”></p>
      11th June, 2010

      Hello, Mr. Nuthead  Headmaster. Not to judge your name, but it sounds horrible and maybe you should change it.

      Now, Mr. headmaster, I am complaining to the school about the cafeteria. I will give you three big  points.

      First, the cafeteria smells so bad it was like a lot of mouse died all over the cafe. Second, The place is so dirty it will beat the record so much, the judges will probably faint and die. Third, the food sucks. The people who survive in the wild would eat a dead mouse instead. Mr. Bighead, sorry I mean Nuthead, you better clean up this place or i will make you live in it!

      P.S Change your name.

      P.P.S. Clean that place up or I will also call the president.

    • #5818
      KevinKang
      Participant

      Dear Henny,

      Nice to meet you in Africa and we can be good friends.How are you?did you get taller this year?

      I want to ask you nine questions about Africa, Londen and Japan.

      The first one is when did you go to Africa,the second one is what do Africa people eat,The third one is do you like Africa?

      The fourth one is dose Londen has a river,the fifth one is what dose Londen people eat,the sixth one is do you like Londen?

      The seventh one is where is Japan,the eighth on is what dose Japan people eat,the last one is do you like Japan?

      I think you will take more time to answer so many questions,thank you very much!and I looking forward to see your reply letter.

      Yours,

      Kevin.Kang

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    • #5850
      Haoming
      Participant

      Haoming Luo

      161 Court Lane

      London

      SE21 7EE

       

      Friday 31st July

      Dear Miss Tuckwell,

      I am writing to ask for new supplies for the school canteen. Over the past few months, I have noticed that students like to choose the type of cup that they want to use.

      To prevent students from being picky, I suggest that we buy a machine that pours water into cups that are not different from others.

      Furthermore, some students do not eat much but chat a lot until they are sometimes late for their lessons, but mostly they do not finish their meal.

      To prevent this from happening, we should set an alarm every five minutes, so that by nine o’clock, all of the students will probably have finished their meal.

      In conclusion, I hope you will take my concerns seriously and I am looking forwards to seeing your reply.

       

      Yours sincerely,

      Haoming Luo

    • #5854
      KevinKang
      Participant

      Dear Henny,

      Nice to meet you in Africa and we can be good friends.How are you?did you get taller this year?

      I want to ask you nine questions about Africa, Londen and Japan.

      The first one is when did you go to Africa,the second one is what do Africa people eat,The third one is do you like Africa?

      The fourth one is dose Londen has a river,the fifth one is what dose Londen people eat,the sixth one is do you like Londen?

      The seventh one is where is Japan,the eighth on is what dose Japan people eat,the last one is do you like Japan?

      I think you will take more time to answer so many questions,thank you very much!and I looking forward to see your reply letter.

      Yours,

      Kevin.Kang

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    • #5874
      KaysonH
      Participant

      Mr Wigg

      20 Perth Street

      Homantin

      Kowloon HongKong

      27th Sep 2018

      Dear Mr Wigg

      How are you? I am glad I can write to you again.

      Everyday students hate food in the school canteen. Because sometimes when they order lettes they somehow can see some bugs inside it. Sometimes there are a little bit hair in the soup.

      I have a great idea to improve our school canteen.

      Can you let them, when they wash the food be careful no bugs are in the food.

      And I suggest our chief may wear a hat to keep hair from dropping.

      I am looking forward to hear you.

      Best Regards

      Kayson

    • #5901
      Youyou
      Participant

      By Chen You:

      25 February

      Dear Mr Firm,

      Everyday when I pass the school gates, I hear children complaining about their lunch. I always hear phrases like “I would rather eat my daddy’s cucumber that he left on his desk five day ago than the pastas that the canteen lady make.” and “I hate today’s pasta because it smells like a frog that stayed in mud for a year and it tastes like donkey’s fart with a mixture of insects.”

      Everyday I ask my child how was lunch, he would say it’s the most repulsive food he ever tasted. But of course, I didn’t believe him. Children always say nonsense. Still, I would ask them, even if it was true, what about the teachers? My child would say that no, they eat their own food. I still didn’t believe him. But other parents also complained about the school food. So then I thought, maybe, the children were telling the truth.

      So I talked to all the parents and they all agreed with me. One adult, also known as Mrs. Boww, told me a very interesting tale. She said that the 20 February, her daughter had a gymnastics class. When it was lunch time, she was exhausted. The canteen lady gave her some food that smelled horrible. But she was so exhausted and starving, she gobbled up everything without noticing disgusting it was. That afternoon, in English class, she vomited on her books, scaring her teacher to the death. The teacher brought her to the nurse. She was sick because she swallowing expired food, and from that day on, she skipped all the lunch time.

      So that’s why I am sending this letter to you, Mr the Director,

      I wish you agree with me,

      Sincerely,

      Chen You

      .

    • #5904
      Jessica
      Participant

      Alan, Haoming, Kevin, Youyou feedback

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      Jessica
      Participant

      Kayson feedback

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    • #6081
      Jessica
      Participant

      Writing Group B – Lesson 9 (report)

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    • #6102
      AlanL
      Participant

      There should be a trip to Disney land, because it reopened and there might be some updates about the shows and the games like Star wars and Iron Man.We should also go to Disney Land because during the time that it is closed, we did not go and we might forget something about the place.

    • #6113
      LeoY
      Participant

      A trip to Disney Land by LEO YANG attached, thanks

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    • #6134
      LeoY
      Participant

      Dear Jess:

      This is the report of Why there should be a school trip to Disneyland. It was the wrong topic I upload before, sorry for the confusion.

      thanks

      Leo Y

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    • #6173
      Youyou
      Participant

      Chen You:

      From: ChenYou                                                                HongKong

      To: Mr Firm                                                             29 February 2019

      Dear Mr Firm

      I am writing this letter to you because I’m really sure that we should send the children to a field trip to Disneyland. Here are some reasons why I think that we should bring the students to Disneyland:

      The first reason is: The children always stay at school it’s good, but they don’t have any chance to go on a trip at Disneyland, sometimes I see children sleeping on there desk and had been grounded by there own teacher.

      The second reason is: All the children at school never went to Disneyland so they need a chance to go.

      The third reason is: The children will need to do a bit of homework, I propose we will do a math game, the third year class will go to Disneyland, when they arrive there, the teachers will give them one paper and one pencil, every time they finish one attraction they will write a one on there paper, when they come back to school they need to calculate how many attractions they did.

      I hope you agree with me.

      ChenYou

    • #6181
      Haoming
      Participant

      Haoming Luo                                                                                        161 Court Lane                                                                                          London                                                                                                      SE21 7EE

      Dear Miss Tuckwell,

      I hope this letter finds you well. I think there should be a trip to Disneyland because all of the children have been working extremely hard this year. Also, I have noticed some children working extra hard and doing the work on scrap paper. I have seen others working without help and nobody talks to each other. In addition, others have not been talking much and are beginning to get quite unhappy. I feel that everyone needs some fun. Some of the teachers are even beginning to not teach the children and nobody seems to smile anymore. If we went to Disneyland, then everyone should cheer up a bit.

      Yours sincerely,

      Haoming Luo

      P.S. I hope this does not fall into the wrong hands

      P.P.S. If it does, then I shall need to find out if they have done any bad things.

    • #6184
      Haoming
      Participant

      sorry, but there was a problem submitting the work

    • #6187
      Jessica
      Participant

      Alan, Leo, Youyou, Haoming Feedback

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    • #6427
      Jessica
      Participant

      Writing Group – Lesson 10 (report)

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    • #6431
      AlanL
      Participant

      On a day of Crazy world, it was Halloween, and children are running on the streets, the streets are as crowded as the market. The streets smells like candy and you can hear people of all age talking or shouting. When a child named Max walked over a sewer lid as dirty as a rats house, the lid burst open, and a slimy hand oozed out and groaned,”Beware, I am the monster of the sewer!”After this warning, it grabbed Max and pulled him down the sewer.

      People screamed in horror and now the streets look like a crazy zoo. People threw their candies on the floor and ran home, slamming the door, and calling the police. The mayor screamed and ran around in circles as if his but caught on fire. The police station was no better. It was so noisy that the chief of the police went crazy. The police station was so loud and messy it looks like a place after a birthday party of toddlers, and the police officers jumped a mile high every minute. They didn’t really jump so high, but you get the idea.

      The newspapers are full of news of that attack, and people started getting so scared that they locked their houses and hide in their bed. The next day, the mayor made an announcement.They will put dynamite in the sewers. Who knows will they work?………………………………………………………………..To be continued.

    • #6433
      Luca
      Participant

      In the body……everything was pretty normal.Red blood cell’s were transferring  oxygen around the body, white blood cells were killing bacteria and viruses and plagues were stopping bleeds.so far, so good.but something went terribly wrong.The next day, lots(to be exact, 300)of red blood cell’s were found DEAD.Cell’s screamed at the top of their lungs and white blood cells tried to find out who did.They never came back from their quests.This secret was kept secret until now, we found out why.It seemed that Bubonic Plague was killing killing the cells(they only kill cells)!Thats why white blood cells didn’t live to tell the tale!

      The End

    • #6525
      Haoming
      Participant

      In the Poké world, everything was going fine. Ho-oh watched over all of the Pokémon and Dittos transformed. Nothing was going wrong until, SWOOSH, SNAP, SHING, SLICE. A tornado had appeared, and it began sucking up Makuhitas, Hariyamas and all of the other Pokémon including Eevees, Vaporeons, Umbreons, Flareons, Glaceons, Espeons and Jolteons. Then, Poké balls started appearing out of thin air and sucking up Pokémon. Mewtwo saw it on the map and tried to stop it, but the typhoon did not obey. It began throwing out Poké balls and within minutes, all of the Pokémon except for Ho-oh, Mew and Mewtwo. All the others were caught. Then, the Poké balls disappeared. Back in the world that we live in today, the Poké balls appeared in the bag of a man called Mr Ming Luo. He had made and invention that would cause a tornado in Poké world and suck up all of the Pokémon in Poké balls. He had just tested it out and was delighted to find that it was succsessful. Luo was ecstatic and used his Pokémon immediately. An Eevee came out of a Poké ball and started acting like a cat. Mr Luo immediately used the Eevee as a hunting dog as he hunted down extraordinary species of fox, then told the president that he had got real  Pokémon. The President immediately ordered a Squirtle, so that he would be protected by a Blastoise once it had evolved.

    • #6526
      Haoming
      Participant

      Sorry, I wanted to do ‘All of the Pokémon except for Mew, Mewtwo and Ho-oh were caught’.

    • #6541
      KaysonH
      Participant

      Oh No

      I went to my home and found my cat, she yelled at me and shouted ‘ you fat’

      I went went to my toilet and saw the mirror, I punched it and hurt my hand

      I stomp my feet and scrambled my hand and huffed and puffed and roared very loud

      I thought so mad and threw things on on way

      Oh no

      My mom went home and kicked me in the face and punched my tummy and slammed my head

      I cried so much that my tears went falling down to the floor

      Oh no

      The water got more and more that was like a flood

      I swam and shouted ‘ Help Help Help’ No one answered me so I sinked lower and lower

    • #6564
      Jessica
      Participant

      Alan, Luca, Haoming, Kayson feedback

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    • #6605
      Youyou
      Participant

      Chen You Creative writing homework

       

      My dog,

      I have a dog,

      His name is Bug,

      He has brown fur,

      And he likes staring at the river,

      He has orange eyes,

      And he likes going to Ryze( even if he is not allowed )

      He is very friendly,

      And also funny,

      And very furry

      His birthday is in February,

      He likes playing with me,

      Every time he needed

      somethings dangerous,

      He gets grounded,

      He like eating bones,

      But he doesn’t like eating corns.

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